City of IF

Chinaren · Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 5:56 am Post subject: Avarice - chapter 16. Blue.

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Cyberworm · Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 7:29 am Post subject:

Great read there China, great read indeed!

I don't know the city plan, so I can't really tell where to search from and to, but my suggestion is to separate in two groups and simultaneously search the underground. Yeah, I know it's not the suggestion you expected, but I think that the below ground is the best hiding place. If any, of course.

Mephistopheles · Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 9:05 am Post subject:

good read china! hmm, perhaps they should head to the door/gateway? maybe they will find something there. otherwise, no good ideas right now.

algu95 · Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 10:01 am Post subject:

Turn into two seperate groups (do they have radio contact?) and send done to search the City. The others should search the underground...

Otherwise, a Good Read!

Chinaren · Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 4:24 pm Post subject:

Underground could indeed be an option. Mmmm. ~Thinks~ Interesting ideas come from that one.

Just to help, some others places we've already been are:

Draggon's tribe, the tower with the future portal, the cellar with the dead dragon in...

But don't limit yourself to just those oh no.

D-Lotus · Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA

Quote: “Leave him!” said Smur dismissively. “We’ve more important things to do.”

Smith frowned at him. “He’s a person, with a right to help, just as you and your daughter are.”

Smur opened his mouth, but then closed it again with a snap. He watched, fretting as the man slung Mestro onto his shoulders and headed back the way they had come.

Yes! I was beginning to worry that Smur was softening too quickly, but he is still as repulsive as ever. Good characterization. This chapter was better than the last because a large part of it was dedicated to Smur's thoughts and personality.

Hmm, where hasn't Smur searched? Messy had a good idea- the underground. Underground what, though? Underground subway, of course! The old subway that remained nearly intact from the bombing (remember the bombing of London in WWII? People took refuge in the subways because they were the safest places).

Otherwise, he may also want to check in the Petrified Forest (trees made into stone by a chemical processes released by the bombs). Or they could search the Dead Lake (similar to the Dead Sea).

Chinaren · Posted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 10:00 pm Post subject:

Thanks D!

Well, if they were at war, it's likely they had underground bunkers somewhere too.

The Meaning Of Fear · Posted: Sat Dec 22, 2007 1:18 am Post subject:

This was a great chapter, C'ren, but I don't have any suggestions.

I do, however, agree that heading to draggon's is a good idea.

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OldJoe · Posted: Wed Dec 26, 2007 9:03 pm Post subject:

Ahm thinking a good leader'll have a hidey hole ter fall back ter. Smur should track the critter down.

Mephistopheles · Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 3:29 am Post subject:

I would love to take credit for underground, but that was algu. And i meant the gateway in the abandoned building, the future portal. maybe other's found it, and it remains open after having been unlocked.

Cyberworm · Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 5:39 am Post subject:

I was generalizing the underground, though the subway sounds like a pretty good idea. Maybe their captain occupied Smur's lair? :lol:

That would be a laugh and a pain at the same time. ;)

Chinaren · Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 9:42 pm Post subject:

Smur's hole is too small really Cy, but interesting idea.

Anyway, lots of good ideas here. So, poll is up, drink the scummy liquid of voting.

Chinaren · Posted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 4:48 pm Post subject:

Mmm. A four way tie. :?

D-Lotus · Posted: Wed Jan 02, 2008 10:24 pm Post subject:

Oops. I missed the poll. I was going to vote for the petrified forest, if it helps any.

Chinaren · Posted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 12:43 am Post subject:

D-Lotus wrote: Oops. I missed the poll. I was going to vote for the petrified forest, if it helps any.

:? I didn't think I closed the poll!?! If you wish to vote, please PM me or respond here. I'm not quite ready to start this one yet.

Mattheus · Posted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 2:30 am Post subject: Story Poll

Hi I liked that chapter, might have to read the others as well to get an overall idea of how they got to where they are.

I can't vote on the poll, has it been closed?

I liked the idea of splitting into two groups.

Chinaren · Posted: Thu Jan 03, 2008 4:11 am Post subject:

I don't know why the poll is closed, maybe I did it by accident when I was drunk or something.

Anyway, we have +1 for the forest, and +1 for splitting in two.

The Meaning Of Fear · Posted: Sun Jan 06, 2008 1:27 am Post subject:

Split into two. :D

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CunningFox · Guest Joined: 27 Oct 2005 Posts: 210

I vote for the stone forest.

OldJoe · Posted: Fri Jan 11, 2008 5:49 pm Post subject:

Ah vote fer the forest.

Chinaren · Posted: Sat Jan 12, 2008 6:29 am Post subject:

Update:

We have +3 for the forest, and +2 for splitting in two and +1 for the portal.

I'll be starting the next chapter soon, but the 'poll' will remain open until then.

Chinaren · Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 5:33 pm Post subject:

I've started the new chapter at last, though who knows when I'll get chance to finish it with RL banging away at me all the time.

Anyway, poll is now (officially this time) closed. Thanks for playing y'all!