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The Dark
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| Posted: Sun Jan 13, 2008 8:58 pm Post subject: The Dark chapter 7. Runner. |
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Warning! The following contains profanity, violence and strong sexual content! If you are sensitive, do not read further!
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Chapter 7. Runner. |
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The Dark
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| Posted: Sun Jan 13, 2008 9:03 pm Post subject: |
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| The decision point here is what to do (duh). Should he dive out of the way? Shoot? Talk? The cop may be with another he hasn't seen yet. |
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D-Lotus
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| Posted: Sun Jan 13, 2008 10:31 pm Post subject: |
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Quote: Chill made a small involuntary squeak as he stood up next to her, keeping his gun under his jacket.
Chill? You mean Peach?
Quote: It was amazing he was still alive, let along conscious.
let alone?
Quote: The words cut through the morning like a hot dick through a virgin pussy.
Usually it's Gloom who is profane, but now suddenly it's the narrator as well. Somehow, this is unfitting, since there have been no previous signs which evince a profane narrator. I prefer a collected, passive narrator; let Gloom do the dirty talk and the dirty deeds.
As for the DP- I think Gloom should try to confuse the young cop through speech. Obviously, he is nervous and inexperienced, so it's possible that Gloom can make him change his mind. But he better do it quickly before reinforcements arrive; he should seize any chance he has, especially if the young cop lowers his guard.
Let's hope that if he escapes... again, he will actually make some headway in his investigation. Gentle's clue should assist him... |
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Crunchyfrog
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Good chapter!
A technicality I noticed... word repetition...
Quote: The deed done, he set about securing his captive so he could sleep securely…
As for the cop - There will be evidence that the bullet didn't come from Gloom's gun. Stand his ground and reason with him. Get the cop to examine the body. |
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Mephistopheles
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| Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 3:30 am Post subject: |
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Good chapter Dark!
He's a wanted man, so disarm the cop and get the hell outta there. maybe shoot him in the arm or something. |
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Cyberworm
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| Posted: Tue Jan 15, 2008 12:41 pm Post subject: |
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| I say he shoots him with some non-lethal bullets or shocking ammo. He doesn't want to have a murder on his neck, the situation is difficult as it is. |
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Chinaren
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Mmm. Are the guns computerized in any way? Maybe the AI could jack the cops gun and freeze it?
If not, I say that Zephs idea. |
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The Meaning Of Fear
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| Posted: Fri Jan 18, 2008 2:28 am Post subject: |
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:shock:
Ooookaaaaayyy...
I say blow his head off. It can't get any worse now, can it? Since the officer will have seen him leaning over Gentle's body, it would be better if he eliminated him. It'll be worse off in the long run, but if the cop reports back, then he's in some deep <Bleep>. Better to have it worse in the long run than not have a long run at all...
Would it be possible to kidnap him like he did to Peach (Only difference obviously being he doesn't rape him) He could dump him in some remote corner of the lower levels and if he was lucky he might find shelter there too. I'm also assuming most people wouldn't care about a serial kill on the first level, so he could dig up some info there... If the people are sober enough to answer... |
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CunningFox
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| I say try and talk to him first, if that doesn't work try and get away. Does hisgun have a stun setting? |
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The Dark
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| Posted: Mon Jan 21, 2008 5:12 am Post subject: |
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The gun may have a stun setting.
A vote shall be raised shortly if no one else has any ideas. |
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| Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 8:37 pm Post subject: |
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| Everyone said my suggestions so I got nothing. Waiting for the poll. |
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The Dark
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| Posted: Wed Jan 23, 2008 5:20 pm Post subject: |
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| The Dark has, sweating and grunting all the while, erected a poll. Use it and abuse as you wish. |
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CunningFox
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| Set phasers to stun! Sorry couldn't help myself. |
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The Dark
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| Posted: Thu Jan 31, 2008 1:42 am Post subject: |
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| It seems people favour talking over action thus far. The Dark shall begin a new episode soon, so if the more bloodthirsty among you wish for a different result, then vote quickly, or be left to the dogs. |
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