City of IF

[Vaalenn]

The Story of the world of Iyrens:

The Demise
The world of Iyrens was created to house the cancerous disease that evolved from the bacteria E-Coli, this stirred up earth as people were killed here and there from the forever attracted disease. The disease attacked the brain, and chewing the nerves to powder, leaving no control over any action of the nervous system of the body. This preserved a problem for this proximity. The very welfare of earth had been shattered, as the stocks crashed. The medical insurances and government money went into recession. The earth and its economy was finished. As scientists started to study this disease, a breakout happned. The disease while being studied, was mixed with human blood. This gave the disease more oxygen and of course more power of evolution over itself. As the disease grew, the Rust epidemic occured. The rust epidemic happned in 2027 when new york city pedestrians caught sight of a gian red cloud of "Dust" hovering over New York. The dust fell, and everyone ignored it. As they continued there lives for a few months, the epidemic finally revealed itself. The disease took control over all nervous systems and nerves and made people lose all control over everything. Yet, there bodies still moved in a human nature. The brain that was not dead but sleeping required oxygen still, but there was no heart to supply. So new oxygen was only found in blood. Thus, the "Creatures" Required fresh blood. This is how the earth was destroyed. The world of Iyrens was created underground starting as a holdout for survivors. But it soon became a large metropolis of many people from around the world. Tunnles were built on the ocean floor,(As the ocean had dried up, as did the animals die, and plants wither away to brown )This metropolis soon turned into, a science lab as well that studied the virus in a further and safer way. They soon discovered the virus could be destroyed. But the only way was to destroy the nucules. But with it being so small,this was impossible. A man named Roger Teller, finally came up with a counter posion that went to the nucules of the disease and destroyed it. would the world be destroyed? Would Iyrens succeed in its act to destroy the Disease.? You decide.

The story now:
The year is now 2078 and its based in a post-Apocalyptic world. The base of Iyrens is still furthering its education for science. And many new survivors have come in. The holdout is now running low on provisions and have resuraface to get food and supplies.

[DeadManWalking]

(this is assuming that the lyrens are zombie-like)

Name: Markell Nelten

Personality: completely practical. Does things only if needed, and is precise. He is somewhat ruthless, sacrificing if the situartion requires it. However, he does not take pleasure in death, and does not sacrifice needlessly.

Rols: Scavenger

Weapons: specializes in close quarters, carries a heavily modified shotgun with a bayonet attached. Also carries twin sickles, usually relying on them to get the job done, as ammo is scarce.

Hope that works.

Tell me if there are any problems.

:)

[Crossfire]

A good start, but each chapter needs to be paragraphed, gone through with a spellchecker and checked for syntax problems (probably fluidity of writing, mainly) like this:

The Demise


The world of Iyrens was created to house the vile disease that evolved from the bacteria E-Coli, the disease that created worldwide chaos as people died horribly from its effects.

The disease attacked the brain and frequently chewed the nerves to powder, annihilating the nervous system. A slow and agonising death soon followed- or worse, as the disease evolved and began to take over the neuronal pathways of its victims.

The very welfare of earth had been shattered, as the stocks crashed. The medical insurances and government money went into recession. The earth and its economy was finished.

As scientists started to study this disease, a breakout happned. The disease while being studied, was mixed with human blood.

This gave the disease more oxygen and of course more power of evolution over itself. As the disease grew, it became more virulent, and so, in 2027, the Rust Epidemic occured.

It was the first major outbreak of the mysterious illness, and occured in New York City. In the morning of August 24, a cloud of strange red dust was seen hovering over New York. Pedestrians and busy motorists alike ignored it.

They continued their lives peacefully in the chaos of a city whose population rivalled that of some countries. All too soon, the effects of the disease started to claim them.

Yet, there bodies still moved in a human nature. The brain that was not dead but sleeping required oxygen still, but there was no heart to supply. So new oxygen was only found in blood.

Thus, the "Creatures" required fresh blood to survive. Shortly after they discovered this, all complex organic life on the surface was wiped out.

The world of Iyrens was created underground starting as a holdout for survivors, but it soon became a large metropolis of many people from around the world. Even as the remaining lifeforms on the surface began to die as the oceans dried up, the construction of tunnels on the ocean surface began.

This metropolis soon devoted most of its energies to science, constructing facilities that studied the virus in a far safer way than their surface predecessors. They rapidly discovered that the only way to destroy it was to remove its nucleus.

The biochemists working on the project had great difficulty finding an effective way to do this, and for a long time humanity watched helplessly as the "Creatures" evolved.

Finally, after a long, agonizing wait and the conversion of Earth's surface into a barren wasteland, a man named Roger Teller devised a biochemical agent which went straight to the heart of each atom that the virus contained and obliterated it.

Celebrations have spread throughout the once-hopeless city, but the virus is not yet dead. This is where our story begins, in post-apocolyptic 2078.

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Name: Jensen Rekatin.

Personality: Grim, laconic and often sardonic in the rare times that he speaks.

Role: Scientist specialising in biochemistry, worked with Roger Teller during the creation of the biochemical agent.

Weapons: Formula Auto-Repeat Rifle (fires canisters of Hollow, the agent that destroys "Creatures"), Jensen Weaponry "Shock Sabre", an electrified, long-reach combat blade which can be extended to up to sixty inches length.

[Vaalenn]

i Shall begin at once and hopefully will try to use all the things requested. Thank you very much for summing up my paragraph. I am a very well writer when it comes to imagination, but when grammar enters the subject i totally phase out so thank you, i will grab my grammar book from 8th grade and use the handbookall characters mentioned will be used in the new chapter which i will call: Chapter One: Beyond The Moon

[shy_blu_eyes]

I might be interested, if you're still planing on running this. What guidelines are their for character creation?

[IMDUSTRO]

Name: Marco Hindle
Personality: Always looking for the news. Hates people who act stupid for no reason. He only helps the less fortunate then him who have been nice to him. He is not afraid to pick up a gun and shoot it at what ever be in his way. Tries to solve every puzzle with the most unusual tactics.
Role: Corner Store Worker
Weapon: A simple Pistol, or whatever he can get his hands on.