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PostPosted: Sat Feb 18, 2006 8:05 pm    Post subject: Down the garden Reply with quote



Chapter 1-A noise
All teenagers were playing on Atmosphier(nightmare). A video-board game, in the living room.

"Oh no! I'm banished!"

"Lets cheat." whispered one of them.

"O.K. You take the blue keys i'll take the red ones."

They carried on playing the game. The Gate keeper banishing them, releasing them, calling them maggots and so on.

CRACK.

"What was that?"

"Hot chocolate for everyone!" came the voice of Darren's mum.

"YEY!!"

"WOOO HOT CHOC!!"

"I always burn my self on that. but it's still nice....mmmm. hot choc."

"Shut up Maria!"

"MUUUUUUM!!!! Ashley's being nasty!!!"

"Oh, why can't you cousins behave?"

"Mum. We're cousins. What do you expect?" said Darren as if his mum was stupid.

CRACK....CR.....ACK......CRICK.....CRACK!!!!

"Mum! there is something down the garden!!!"

"It's next doors dog! Now stop the nonsense! I told you you shouldnt have let Anna play that game with you. I said it would scare her!"

All of the teenagers and Anna sat drinking their hot chocolate.

"Just 'cos she's a baby!" said Michle and everyone laughed. Anna immediately burst into tears.

BANG--CRACKLE--CLING!

"What the hell was that?!!" asked Darren his head snapping around to look out towards the garden.

"I bet they let that dog loose into our garden so that it can go to the toilet again!" said Darren's and Maria's mum.

"Stupid neighbours!" said Darren.

"OI! We'll have less of that!" said his mum. After a pause and silence, "Stupid neighbours."

Then they all ignored what they heard and went back to their hot chocolate before it was time for bed.


O.K. A new one there. What do you think the sound should be?

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PostPosted: Sun Feb 19, 2006 11:33 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

a daemon summonded from the underworld to wreck havoc and make sacrifices in the name of it's unholy master

and it has a secret plan to destroy humanoty when the rituals work successfully
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 19, 2006 12:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A guardian of some sort, sent to warn them of the powers of evil that are coming for them. They have to run away. NOW!

Intriguing start. I like it Smile
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 19, 2006 4:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The ghost of someone buried in the garden.

A few typos in this one Storm!
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PostPosted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 11:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice ideas! Very different. Keep them comming. Thumbs Up

Thanks stoat!
And thanks chinaren I'll check through it and see what i can correct. If i still miss anything out please feel free to correct me. Very Happy
Not gonna improve if i dont make mistakes Wink

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 3:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

'Naibour' should be 'neighbour'

That's the only major one I noticed. Other than that, good start.

Now, for the noise... How about a three-toed monkfish warrior from the alternate dimension Mauna-Fizal'Ik'ubob 3. Who's looking for his long lost brother who he thinks might be buried somewhere in her garden. :biggrin:
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PostPosted: Wed Feb 22, 2006 5:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well...

Cheet is spelled Cheat

emedietly is immediately

You need some apostrophies in there as well in various places. They are used when something belongs to something;

EG: Chinaren's hat. See if you can find where to put them! Wink
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PostPosted: Thu Feb 23, 2006 1:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Done! Very Happy

Thanks you lot! I hope i got all of them:) I'll try to get less next time


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Its the doublkes again!!! they're out to get me!!!aaarrgggh!!!!

In year 7 my English teacher said that he had never seen anyone get their doubles so mixed up in his life!! lol. But I'm better now. Very Happy

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PostPosted: Mon Feb 27, 2006 12:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

O.K. I've decided to use this story as sort of like a storygame experiment. It will be a normal storygame apart from the polls. I will write the ideas down on a pice of paper (or on word) and letter them. In the poll i will put the letters. You have to vote for any letter you like and let the destiny of the story take its course.

The idea matching to the letter with most votes will be the idea i use.

Any questions just ask. And please comment on how you like the new idea of storygaming.

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 28, 2006 8:38 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Random destiny - oooh.
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 28, 2006 9:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey storm, good first chap.
Atmosphere rocks!!! man, that games funny
the idea where we select randomly, is also good. This should be great fun :biggrin:
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 28, 2006 10:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, should be good to at least trial the idea. Well done Storm for bringing some more inventivness to the Skiffy/Horror section! :biggrin:
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 11:46 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you very much everyone.

And Vamps, or Phang? A little question here: Have we ever actually finished that game? I mean as in actually played it all the way through from the begining 'till the end without cheating or throwing all the pieces around the room, and yes......also without playing barbie dolls with the cards and keys.....(I would never do that! especially not while watching the perverted Phantom of the Opera Halloween H2O!) Laughing



Poll goes up! *fingers crossed...ok uncrossed cos i cant type!*

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 11:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I've muddled them all up. Now even I've forgotten what sugestions are what letters. I've got it all written on XL. But I wont look And I'll keep my votes this time round in case i need to brake a tie. Very Happy

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 12:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well i've voted for B.
And storm, in answer to your cool question, I have played it all the way through once with you guys, and once with alode of adults because it was christmas...though they were drunk and didn't know what they were doing, but still great fun!

Well, good luck on this, it should be interesting...( ooh i wonder what B is!!) :biggrin:

Can we find out what they all are when the poll is over? to see what we could have voted for?
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 01, 2006 2:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

i went for A, because i've always had a connection with that letter, and i

i dont need to explain myself to you
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 02, 2006 1:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I hope my three-toed monkfish warrior was in there somewhere.... Wink

Voted for C. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 02, 2006 1:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Welll.... I agonised over this one - I really did.

B and C were obviously the wrong choices, but D sounded like it might work. Still, I liked the sound of A. Choices choices!

In the end, I decided to be practical and just close my eyes and click around until I got a random letter Wink
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 02, 2006 1:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

....calms down...sorry laughing again....Anyway!
Yes you will all get to see what the other choices were.

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 1:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Letter C it is! and letter C is.......*drum roll*.........*more drum roll as i look for XL and the answer*.........................

A DEMON SUMMONED TO TAKE OVER THE WORLD!! I'll be doing the next chapter....ah might as well do it now Very Happy

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WARNING: This story from now on may contain the words Dick and Fanny. But in this story they are used as names. Do not get offended, they are real names and is used in childrens books written by Enid Blyton (and no i havent read anymore of the Famous Five i gave up on book 11 when i got hold of Darren Shan books.lol)
Chapter 2= Nightmares and Demons.

"Good night mum!"

"Good night Aunt Fanny."

"Good night sweetheart."

"Goodnight mummy!"

"Goodnight darling."

"What time is Uncle Richard coming back?"

"Late, Ashley, Late." she sighed and all 5 children went to bed.

~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

The front door slammed shut. Anna jerked up straight. She had been edgy all night and slept with one eye open. Daddy never slams the doors. He knows we're in bed. she thought.

There was heavy breathing downstairs that could be heard all the way up fron the girls room. Anna hid under her bed covers leaving a tiny gap to peek through and breathe through.

"Dick?" Came her mums voice. That was uncle Richard's nick-name.

"Do you think so honey?" came a deep voice.

That's not daddy. thought Anna. then her mother screamed. A high pitched gurgly scream. then a whimper so qiet Anna could hardly hear it. It sounded like "please, not the children. Take me instead!"

"Richard was no good to me. Why should you be?"

"But he's older than me."

"But he is healthier than you. You have a cold that's been going for months. Besides Maria's sister is pretty. I can strike a deal with another demon. She will pay alot of energetic souls for beauty."

"No!" screamed Aunt Fanny. "Leave them alone!"

"Look, lady; My master needs souls full of energy to take over the world. Each sould makes him stronger. Got it?"

"Then why dont you take someone elses souls?" Then Anna heard a slap and her mum screaming. What should I do?

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 1:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A bit of extra info here:

O.K. we have:

Anna Nomed-10 years old

Maria Nomed-14 years old

Darren Nomed- 16 years old.

Their cousins are

Michel and Ashley Retsam are twins and they are both 15 years old.

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PostPosted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 1:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wake the other kids up and go and sneak a peek at what's happening downstairs.You can always run if - I mean, when - it gets scary and Aunt Fanny is killed Smile
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 3:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes - the right option won.

Even if I didn't vote for it - or did I?
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 06, 2006 5:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Indeed! Good old names! Mind you it could be worse. I had a manager called Michael Hunt once, but he liked to be called Mike. Really.

Anyway, run away, wake the others quickly, and continue running away! Very Happy
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 07, 2006 8:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, wake the others and take a peek then run away. Lol
I could be entertaining for the kids to see a demon :biggrin:
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 07, 2006 8:34 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm F5ing everyone else about the demon-watching. Cool
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 07, 2006 10:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Short but good chapter.

Few typos:

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Do you think sp hunny?


I think this should be so. And should 'hunny' be spelt like that? I know that's probably how it sounds.... just wondering, ignore me... Wink

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been going fo months


This should be for.

I think that the little girl will try and run in to help her mummy, no matter how scary the voice sounds. And that way, we get to see the deamon! :biggrin:

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PostPosted: Tue Mar 07, 2006 10:31 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think honey is spelt the same way as the spread.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 08, 2006 1:58 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks you lot. I'll put up a poll soon. But i think we'll get to go demon spotting no matter what happens. lol.

But now, its bed time! lol.
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 10, 2006 6:18 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Is there any chance we can see what we could have voted for, like they do on them game shows. This is what you could have won!!! LOSER!!! *does loser sign*, they are so sad rofl like me! :biggrin:
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Polls up!
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 15, 2006 6:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Voted!

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 15, 2006 3:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Went to wake then take a peek - kids are always curious

Voted, and winning.
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 16, 2006 9:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

OK people new chapter up soon. So far it looks like we wake everyone up and go see whats going on. But keep the votes coming.
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You can breath now soily! sorry. Smile

Chapter3= Demon! -part one

Anna stood at her bedroom door listening. What should she do? was this just a joke? a dream? No. Everything sounded real.
She tiptoed over to Marias bed and stook her gently.

"Maria? wake up. please wake up, Maria. Help." she whispered. Maria awoke with a grunt.

"What is it?"

"Listen."

Maria listened. and sure enough she heard the voices down stairs.

*~*~*~*

"Jasmine is pretty. I need her. I can trade her for an unimaginable award."

"Leave her out of this!" screached Marias mum.

*~*~*~*

Maria gasped. Jasmine was her older sister. She was 21 and lived with her boyfriend. Last year she had to face a Demon looking for beauty. The Demon was defeated but its master wasnt. Maria, Jasmine and their parents were the only ones who knew about this. And ofcourse Darren, being her older brother had to fight.

"Maria, I'm scared." said Anna.

"Look Anna. You have to understand. There are sertain facts you have to accept and put up with them. And when i tell you, you will not start to cry. Understood?"

"Yes." said Anna her voice small and full of fear.

"Look. Anna. Demons are real. Demons are usually controlled by Demon Masters. But it isnt all to do with magic. The real demon world is a micture of magic, science, superstition and so on. Even stories can come to life sometimes. Jasmine had to defeat a demon on her 20th birthday. I will explain to you about that later though.

Right now we have to get out. Because if I'm right the Demon down stairs is one serving a Demon Master called Yegren. If you rearange his name it it Energy. He seeks energy to take over the world and blah blah blah."

"What does this have to do with us?"

"Anna. We are children. We are the most energetic living things that these monsters can get their hands on. Now I want you to wake the boys. Climb through the cupboard and to the back there is a door leading to their room. Wake them and tell them that Yegren is on the move and that he has a Demon down stairs."

Anna did as she was told. She fought her tears back so badly, bless her. She had a knot in her throat and she trembled with fear. But she had to do as she was told. Maria was older, wiser and knew about this. Anna had just stopped believing in magic and now she has to start all over again.


Maria got her bag that was under her bed just incase anything like this ever happened again. She had tinned food in there and bottles ready to be filled with drink. Every few days she would put in fresh bread and she had just put in a new loaf this morning. Now she was ready to go.

She climbed in the wardrobe and picked up a bag that contained clothes and things. Then she entered the boys room through the back. All they had to do now is see who they're up against, try save their mum if needed and run. Run for their dear little lives.

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 17, 2006 3:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Lives.

Yes, run. Run very fast!!
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 17, 2006 4:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Running sounds good to me.

Of course - so does staying and becoming daemon munchies. In fact - that does sound more appeasing.
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Definitely run. Run as fast as the gingerbread man Very Happy
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lol, run run as fast as there little legs can go! :biggrin:
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 9:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

woah woah woah people! i wasnt expecting this many replies! I'm glad you like it. But wait this is only part one! part two will go up in a bit. Very Happy and yes they will run.....but can they hide?
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 12:05 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You can't hide from EVIL - surely you know the saying
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 2:05 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Chapter 3 part 2!=Demon!

"Maria?" said Darren.

"I'm scared." she said, sharing the same feeling with her older brother.

Anna felt a tear run down her cheek and she whiped it away straight away.

"What's going on? Demons aren't real!" said Michel a bit too loud for Darrens liking.

"Shut up." he hissed back.

"If you dont believe in Demons you soon will. Now be patient. The Demon isnt leaving yet."

All 5 children walked over to the door and listened.

"The tunnels?"

"Yep. Sounds like it."

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"Look Lady! I'm not exactly giving you a choice here! Now either you bring the children down or I'll go and get them my self!"

"Please! Please!Plea-hehe-hease!!!" Aunt Fanny pleaded with the Demon but his heart-if there was one- was as dark and black and small as a shrivelled, burned bug.
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The 5 were now half way down the secret stairs. They were going quietly. Maria had let her brother carry something. And her cousin, Ashley was holding Annas hand to try and make her feel safer.

They got to the bottom. there was a door infront of them.

"Where does this lead?" asked Michel getting angry and slightly scared.

"The invisible room." replied Darren. Anna stared her eyes and mouth wide with amazement. Ashley and Michel laughed and said no such things exist.

But then when they entered a glass room that was in the kitchen and facing the hallway, they gasped with surprise. This hadnt been here before and it was obvious that they could not be seen.

But they ignored all this now, for infront of them stood a tall, well built man. He slapped Aunt Fanny around the face. She fell to the floor and wept.

Then he turned. His face looked human. He had dark brown hair and his face wasn't scared or bruised or showed any signs of any sort of battle.

The one disturbing image was his eyes. They were completely black. No white. Just a large pupil that instead of being the centre of his eye it was his whole eye.

And it was colourless apartfrom a slight red blended in, making his eyes look like a black and red marble.

Anna had had enough. She burried her face in Darrens stomach and cryed. Her brother put his arm on her and told her that everything will be ok.

"Cry. Let it all out. Let it all out now and you'll be ok later." he said calmly and smiled at her as she looked into his eyes. Now she was reasured and cryed to let all the fear and shock out of her system.

Then the Demon, dressed in pure red started up the stairs. Aunt Fanny screamed and yelled at him to leave her children alone, to take her instead and that her husband will not let him get away with this.

But the Demon just ignored her. And climbed the stairs and made his way to the girls room first. Soon as they would be less hassle and he could use them to threaten Darren.

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So then? what do they do now? This Demon is about to find out that they aren't there. And what about Aunt Fanny? save her? leave her? Remember the Demon doesn't want her....but he could use her for bribary. Also dont forget that there are lots of other secret passageways in the house.
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I think, being children, they would try and save her. When they grow up they'll realise that saving yourself is far more important.
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 18, 2006 8:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Aye, I f5 Lordy. Being young and foolish they will try to save her. Ah, the innocence of youth.
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O.K. so if they save her. How do they escape? like where does the pasage ways lead to?
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They don't escape - the daemon kills them all. It's the penalty for youth and innocence.
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well, it is the horror section. They can all die if thats what you all want. But I'm warning you now, I can am rubbish at writing peoples deaths. I was quite pleased with my last dragon fight....but nobody died in it.

By the way...Shape Lords in the fantasy section has a new chapter.

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 24, 2006 8:06 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

yeah, they save aunt fanny (lol) and go down the secret passageway hoping for pink fluffy bunny rabits at the end and not soul eating, felsh eating ( and so on) demons

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Save Fanny, then find a secret passage that leads out into the neighbour's garden, from which they can make thier escape.

It wouldn't be a very long story if all the children died then and there would it, so I think they should escape. :biggrin:
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Chapte4 part one= Rescue.

The Demon went up the stairs.

"What will he do when he finds we aren't there?" sobbed Anna.

"Come down and take mum, most likely." replied Alex thinking hard.

Maria stepped out of the invisible room so that her mum could see her.

"Maria." she whispered.

"Mum come on." Maria whispered back.

"He''l find us in there. He's not stupid. Invisible rooms are common in the Worlds of Magic."

"We can escape through the tunnel behind the cooker. It leads to the garden. Quick!"

All the kids and Aunt Fanny ran into the kitchen as quietly as they could and pulled the oven back. Alex opened a small portal in the wall and they all stepped through.

"Hurry! He'll find his way after us in no time!" said Maria.

"I never knew this was here!" said Aunt Fanny.

"Mum? Remember that time I kinda ran away?" said Maria slowly.

"Yes?"

"This is where she hid!" Laughed Alex.

"You knew where she was?"

"Mum, she had an exelent reason to run away."

Aunt Fanny gave them both a funny look as they ran down the tunnel following one after the other.


"How long is this tunnel?" asked Anna now getting sort of used to the whole Demon thing.

"Almost there."

"Then where do we go?" asked Michel.

Everyone thought for a while.

"The bomb shelter!!!" said Anna delighted that she is actually going to be some help in this thing.

"The bomb shelter." repeated Maria aprovingly.

"Yes. There we have a phone to contact your dad." said Fanny.

"Mummy?"

"Yes?"

"Where is Daddy?"

"I don't know sweat heart. I don't know."

Then there was a pause. They came to a door which was opened by Alex and they all stepped through. They found them selves in a large room with metal walls and not much furniture. There were two beds and a shelf along with a fridge.

They sat on the beds in silence.

The silence was broken by Michel. "I want to go home."

"We will take you home and leave Anna with you. Then we have to do something about this demon."

"No. I want to stay with you."

"We'll see. And if you change your mind........"

They rang Uncle Dick and told him all that had happened. He said to go to the Village square at Midnight and meet him there. But first they had to take the two who were not involved back to their parents.

"Dad says that the Demon should not follow us. He'll be back later. But he'll be angry."

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Laughing Do they leave Anna behind? Yes or No?

lol. i'd like to see you all choose between two choices you dont know what they are...hehe....i always find that hard

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Went for A, cos it was, like, nearer. :biggrin: Razz
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Voted, and winning.

I've just always liked the letter A.
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I went for B because it was all rounded and curvy. It's as good a reason as any Razz
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 04, 2006 7:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I voted for B because everyone loves B :biggrin:

( oooh! a tie!)
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AAARRRGGG!!!! ANOTHER TIE!! I'll leave the votes going. But I wont vote because I know the answers. its kidof hard to forget what leters you gave to two options. Very Happy

Me? struggle to forget? WOW!
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Chapter 5 already? wow! I'll do it when I get home because I'll need to make sure that I get the right option.
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A was yes and B was no!

A and Yes win!

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Chapter 5= Save the ones you can!

Everyone sneacked out of their hiding place. They all ran as fast as they could to the front of the house and got in the car. Aunt Fanny got in the drivers seat and she drove as fast as she could untill she reached her sisters house.

Her sister lived in a small flat in the middle of town. So the two boys were alwyas exited to stay with their cousins in their big house and lovely garden.

The twins got out of the car and ran upto their mum who was waiting outside for them. How did she know they were coming?

"Mum! mum!! You should have seen him! you should have seen what we did!"

"Hello sweethearts. Off to bed both of you. Quick chop!" she smiled.

"But muuum!"

"No 'buts'! Bed now!" she said sternly and they obbayed.

"Thank you Fanny. Thank you for keeping the out of this mess. If there is anything you need. Anything at all, you know where to find me."

"It's O.K., Hellen. IF Jasmine phones.....please tell her we're in trouble. Tell her she might be involved. And tell her that no matter what happens, she has to keep herself safe!"

"I will. Dont worry." replied her sister and Aunt Fanny got back in the car, everyone waved goodbye and they drove off.

"Where are we going now?" asked Maria.

"Home." said Fanny. "The garden will be the safest place for us. Darren have you made sure that the tunnells are all secure and the spells are still fresh?"

"Refreshed them every week!" he said in a cheerful voice to make Anna feel better.

Back to their house they drove. They got out of the car and ran to the bottom of the garden. They hid in the shelter again.

"We can hide here for now." said Fanny.

"But for how long mum? He will find us. Tracking spells are old fashioned and easy now! We can run and hide.....but for how long?" said Darren

"Will we have to fight?" asked Anna in a small voice.

"I'm afraid so. But dont worry. You'll be fine. It's what we have Darren for." smiled Maria. And Anna smiled at Darren questioningly.

"I won't let anything happen to you." he promised and hugged his little sister.

Then the phone ran. Fanny answered it.

"who is it mum?"

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 11, 2006 3:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

A three-toad monkfish warrior! Very Happy
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Or, perhaps, a three-toed monkfish warrior. Cool
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Maybe three toads and a monkfish warrior?
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How about a three toed monk selling fish? Confused
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lol!

How about....

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I'll put up a poll shall I? lol. By the way Lordy, nice avatar!
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Thanks Storm.

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 23, 2006 12:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

oh poodles its a draw! We need one more vote that will hopefully break the tie.
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 23, 2006 12:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Tie broken. I monkeyfish deamon sounds intersting.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 1:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yey! tie broken! And a long weekend coming up for me Smile I'll post the next chapter as soon as possible! But I'll keep the poll up....just in case. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Thu May 04, 2006 11:20 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Chapter 6= The Monkeyfish Demon!

Aunt Fanny was silent on the phone. She listened and as the speaker on the other end of the line gave her instructions her face went more pale by the second!

Eventually she put the mouthpiece of the phone back in it's place and turned to face her three children who were staring at her questioningly.

"Mum?" asked Darren worrying.

"It was Monkish."

"Who?" asked all three children, Maria and Darren in disbeliefe but Anna with confusion.

"Monkish." aunt Fanny repeated.

"What does he want?" said Maria scornfully.

"We are going to meet him in the village square at midnight tonight."

"Mum are you sure?" asked Darren, not wanting to go.

"If we don't he will kill your father." she said simply and started to pick up her things and get ready to go.

"Hurry," she said, "we have five minutes to get there!"

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Chapter 7= DAD!

At one minute to midnight Aunt Fanny, Maria, Anna and Darren were at the village square. They stood in the middle of a road that ran between a church and a playground. Nearby was a small kiosk that would not have been visible if it wasn't for the lamp post right next to it.

There was nobody else there. Nobody, nowhere to be seen. Anna was about to ask something when a swing in the playground creaked. From behind it a man stepped out into the light of another street lamp. He walked hurriedly over to them.

"Dad!" screamed Anna and ran towards her father. He spread his arms out and welcomed his daughter with a smile.

"And what do you think you're doing here? Shouldn't you be in bed?" he laughed and she smiled back.

Aunt Fanny ran to him, "what's going on?" she asked impatiently.

"Monkish is on his way." he said in a voice so quiet that Anna could not even hear him properly. "I'm his slave under a magical contract."

"Kids can you give us a minute?" asked Fanny and her children stood by the kiosk waiting to be called back.

"Why the hell would you sign such a thing? You can't get out of this! It's a magical bloody contract!"

"They threatened me."

"Don't be a wimp! Besides what could be worse than this?"

"Losing you." Uncle Dick lowered his eyes with sadness. Aunt Fanny looked away with shame.

"What does he want?"

"Maria."

"What?"

"He wants Maria. Fanny, you need to know something about our daughter that even I didn't know until a few minutes ago."

"What's that?"

"She has been chosen to become The Queen of Magic. Both good and evil have agreed to this. But, she can pick a side to work on. She can either serve good or serve evil. But she cannot keep out of it. Now, every tribe of magical creature wants her. Having her on their side makes them superior."

"Does this include the Black Masters?"

"Yes."

This was a serious matter. The Monkish tribe was the least of their worries. The two parents explained the situation to their children as nicely as possible. And they understood. They made clear of what they had to do to protect themselves and especially Maria.

All of a sudden a figure appeared in front of them. It was a....a thing. It was about 6foot tall and had a body of a monkey but a head of a fish.

"Hello." He said and shot a beam of yellow energy at the family.

Maria suddenly reached into her powers and created a force field that blocked the shot. Dick moved over to the side and took no part because he was not allowed to go against Monkish as long as he didn't have to kill his own family.

Fanny shot out a beam of blue energy towards the Monkish. He blocked it with a yellow force field. Darren lifted his arms up above his head and crossed them at the wrists, then he brought them down with great force and speed and transformed into a completely different person. He wore black armor and held a black gun; he had a black shield- with a flame painted onto it - on his back. As well as that he had a sword in a case that was strapped to his belt.

Anna stood there petrified thinking of what her power was. She had never used magic before, what does she do?

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PostPosted: Sat May 06, 2006 5:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nothing, just stands there as the Monfish Warrior destroys her family, and then takes Maria captive before converting her to the side of Evil, from whence she can truely become the Queen of Magic.

And besides - you think Evil would sign an agreement, and actually stick to it?
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PostPosted: Sun May 07, 2006 7:18 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's a magical agreement. As soon as one side brakes the deal the agreement is destroyed.

So if they make him kill his family he will then be free to take revenge.

But if he wanted to run free then he would have to kill his family.

Lordy, you seem to like watching poor helpless people suffer don't you? lol.

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PostPosted: Sun May 07, 2006 11:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Who me? Whatever gave you that idea?
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PostPosted: Thu May 11, 2006 10:55 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

lol. I'm sorry, I don't know what I was thinking! Laughing Laughing


Anyway, so far we have just stand there and watch. (hehe, could be fun.......if she turned EVIL herself.) I'm off before I get more ideas and ruin the thing. It seems to be very easy, lately, to get ideas into my head *looks at Phang*

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PostPosted: Thu May 11, 2006 4:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Blast him!

and..

Quote:
Loosing you.


Losing! One 'o'!
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PostPosted: Fri May 12, 2006 4:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks Chinaren!

I've fixed it.

So then....so far we have Blast him or stand and watch! either one would be fun. Shall I put the poll up then?

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PostPosted: Sat May 13, 2006 1:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Lol, i think she should scream insainley and see what happens :biggrin:
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PostPosted: Sat May 13, 2006 11:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

lol. I've put the poll up.
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PostPosted: Sat May 13, 2006 2:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Stand and watch, then turn Evil of course, and winning.
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PostPosted: Sun May 14, 2006 2:27 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

yay scream insainley!!!
I voted for that of course anything can happen when you scream insainley! Wink
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2006 11:08 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

lordy? do you always say: ...and winning. At the end of saying what you voted for?
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PostPosted: Tue May 16, 2006 3:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey, it's my trademark slogan. Everyone (well, some people) has one.

For instance, there's Soily's *holds breath* and Smee's "Happy Writing/Voting (or whatever it happens to be).

Have you only just noticed?
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PostPosted: Wed May 17, 2006 8:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Lol, yeah. i think mines "lol" lol
Day-um blast him is winning Sad
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PostPosted: Wed May 17, 2006 11:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

lol.

Vamps you have your trademark smilie! Which misteriously seems to apear on almost every single piece of paper shanty, phang or i have! lol. I suppose you would have nothing to do with it ay?

What could my slogan thing be?.......I'll be back with an answer one day! muahahaha 8cough cough* heehee

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PostPosted: Thu May 18, 2006 12:51 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Blast him!

...And then every other tribe/ monster/ etc. will hear of how powerful she is and come after her more. Then the same situation will crop up again.

Don't kill me, but maybe you should read the piece again. Scary typos, though the story itself is quite fascinating. Smile
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PostPosted: Sat May 20, 2006 5:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

lol. Thanks. There really were a few scary ones in that. At least your not alone now vamps. lol *hides*

I hope i sorted them all. otherwise blam Word. lol.

I think I'll start doing all my chapters on word. Smile
Toodles to do next chapter.....I'll put it up as soon as possible! Very Happy

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PostPosted: Fri May 26, 2006 2:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Chapter 8= I can do this!




Anna stood there, her feet rooted to the floor. She was petrified with terror. Darren shot at the monster, her mum shot another beam but they both missed. Maria stood trying to shoot smaller balls of force field at the Monkey-fish demon. But for some reason she was failing. The force field at the beginning had drained her from her power.

Suddenly she collapsed to the floor, her mind went completely blank. Anna saw her and the shock shook her out of her terrified daze. She took a deep breath, you can do this. she told herself sternly.

-You can do this Anna. You have to. Maria is in danger. Do it!

-Do what exactly?

-Just do it! Something! I don’t know!

-So what do I do?

-Something! But quick! Hurry!


Her mind split into separate parts. She argued with herself if she can do it. And what it was that she can (or can’t) do. She tried to concentrate.

Everything around her fuzzed. The whole world spun. All that was clearly visible was the Monkey-fish Demon, the monster, the threat. Before she knew what she was doing she yelled,

“OUT OF MY WAY!”

And with that she shot out a colourful beam that blasted Monkish with such force that he flew into the air and crashed down to the ground.

He yelped in pain but mostly with shock. Everyone stared at Anna. Anna stared at her hands from where the blast was produced. Her eyes were wider even than her mums. As soon as her head cleared she started to feel dizzy again.

A beam crackled through the air like lightning, but it wasn’t. It hit Aunt Fanny and she crashed to the floor. Darren screamed something and went into a hand to hand battle with Monkish.

Hand and claws connected. Screams of pain. Sword and sword clinked and clanked and there was yelling and shouting as the two fought. One for a prize the other for his life. The next thing that Anna saw was black.

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PostPosted: Sat May 27, 2006 2:22 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Lol good chapter, love the picture you did on paint! Wink

I rekon Anna is alot more powerful than that, i rekon she ciould have jkilled that dude but she held back slightly because she didn't know she had it in her, now she does this could be extremly interseting.
Hmm..I rekon quite alot
one question "Blam" what does it mean? Wink :biggrin:
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lol. it was supposed to say Blame. lol.

I'll do the next chaoter soon. probably when we get back from holiday.

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Chapter 9= Home again?


Anna opened her eyes. She felt the warm quilt spreading from her feet to the chin. She felt the softness of her pillow. She looked around her room.

“Where am I?” she whispered to herself. She sat up. what’s happened to me? she though. It was all a dream? I mean….it must have been!
A sudden pain throbbed in her right arm. She looked at it. It was bleeding slightly. Tears escaped from her eyes and ran down her cheeks. She sniffed and wiped away the blood on her bedcover.

“What?” she said a little louder this time. The pain throbbed quickly and she could only just bare the pain. But there was no wound. Now that she had wiped the blood onto her bed covers, there was no blood either. The blood was her own, it had to be, it was fresh. Yes, look, there was a bit more seeping out from her skin.

“So it wasn’t a dream?” she said, her eyes wide. She shot out of bed and went to the boys room. Nobody there. She ran downstairs hoping to find Maria or her parents. Nobody there either. She checked in the kitchen, the living room and her mums and dads bedroom.

The invisible room. She thought. She ran upstairs and found the entrance to the tunnel that led to the invisible room. She found it and entered. Soon she found her self in the room. But nobody was there. So she came back out. She heard someone cough in the utility room. She hadn’t thought to look in there. She made her way over to the utility room. She pushed the door open slowly, holding her breath. She poked her head around the door as soon as it was wide enough,

“Anna?” her dad stood there, looking at her. He had been reading a book of some sort. She looked at him. After a pause she slammed the door fully open, ran and gave her beloved daddy a massive hug. She buried her face into his chest (that’s how tall she was) and sobbed her eyes out.

“It’s ok.” He said. “They’ll be back.”

“When, daddy? When?” she cryed.

“I don’t know sweatheart. I really don’t know.”

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So then? Who won the fight? Darren or the monkish demon?

If Darren loses, Maria becomes the queen of all evil magic.
If Darren wins, she has to become the queen of all good magic.

Their mum can either die or live. That will be a separate poll.

Poll goes up but you dont know what your voting for! haha!!

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 08, 2006 11:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting chapter, nice how we don't know where all the others are, cliff hanger type - gets you to read more just to find out :biggrin:

Well i voted for A and i hope it is for " Darren Loses" option, it'd be cool if Maria became the queen of evil magic, so then she'd have to be against her family and her family would probably find it alot harder to fight against Maria than some random person, a cool little twist to the story, but if she becomes queen of good magic it would still be good but evil rules!*


* evil people play dirty! All the more fun lol
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Of course, you could then easily fix the vote...
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Come on peoples! I need the votes for the next chapter! Please somebody vote.
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Chapter 10

Darren had to be the one to fight... again. His sister, Maria was on the floor. She had moved slightly but she was suffering from serious Power Loss. The Good and the Evil forces that were fighting in this battle were creating an atmosphere of confusion and competition. This made Maria’s powers weak and draining as the fight was based around her.

Aunt Fanny shot out a large, powerful, invisible blast that pushed the Monkey-fish monster backwards. He stood for a few seconds, confused and then exploded into a party of flames.

“Banished.” Said Aunt Fanny.

“Short term banishment.” Observed Darren. “Good. But, mum, not good enough. He could be back at anytime from in 2 seconds to 20 years.” He commented.

“Then let’s hope it’s 20 years.” She replied. They studied the area around them for any more Demons or Beasts. Nothing. Nut just before Aunt Fanny could say, “lets go home.” With a smile, the air shimmered behind them. Before they could turn, they both had arms around their necks and the air shimmered again. But this time they were shimmering with it.

Once the sickening shimmer stopped, they found themselves in their garden. They turned to face two large men. We brought you here so that we can kill you in front of your little sister and your rather annoying father. The one on the right addressed Darren. He got a hateful glare as a reply.

Darren lashed out with his sword. The Demon replied with a similar move. Aunt Fanny’s Magic was weak because of the force of the blast a minute ago. Now she was vulnerable. The other man produced a ball of fire mixed with electricity in his hand. Within a blink of an eye it was gone. Aunt Fanny was on the floor. Her body was on fire and she twitched violently.

Anna and her dad had heard the noise and ran out of the back door in the kitchen. They arrived just in time to see Aunt Fanny on the floor, her flaming body spasming savagely on the grass. Anna was shocked. She sat on the floor and stared at her mother. Her eyes were as wide as her mouth. Her face as pale a printing paper and her lips as blue the stains in a blueberry muffin.

Darren gave out a cry. His dad did the same and ran towards them. The Demon who killed Aunt Fanny lifted his hands in the air, casually and all was paused. Everything was frozen. But everyone, except Aunt Fanny, could still see what was going on.

The two Demons grabbed Darren and shimmered once more. They re-appeared next to where Maria was still unconscious and also grabbed her. Then they shimmered back to their own territory.

Anna and her dad were unfrozen from the magic. But they were frozen with shock, terror and grief.


Does Maria get killed infront of Darren. Or not yet?

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Poll is up! Votie for thie next chaptie!

Then when I get time I might do a second story...to carry on. That's why it saysie notie yetie.


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PostPosted: Mon Jul 10, 2006 12:10 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Voted to kill her off, and winning.
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 10, 2006 12:16 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You? vote to kill? Makes a change doesn't it? Wink

If you like. (if she ends up dying either now or later) you lot can tell me how to kill her. But if she dies and you get to choose how to...be horrible.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 14, 2006 2:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

New chapter up soon. Is there any particular way that you would like her to die?
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 14, 2006 3:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sorry - at the moment all my Ideaarium is flowing into Chapter 14 of Fronte.

You'll have to settle for something like having her skin peeled, and then forcing her to eat it - my creative juices aren't flowing.
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 15, 2006 10:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

eeeeeeeeeewwwwwwwwwww. low on idearium? i can see....

I like it! ok then. So she'll have her skin peeled and then be forced to eat it. anything else anyone wants to add? Remember that this is all going to happen infront of Darren.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 6:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I voted for not yet, I think you should torment Darrens mind before killing her. You know not torture him physically but mentally. Use magic to play with his mind...not nice am i? But it would sure be interesting! :biggrin:
Nice chapter, love the twitching body!
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 21, 2006 3:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

lol. we can still torture Darren. But shall we do that after Maria dies or before she dies?
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 22, 2006 1:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ooh-hoo-hooo.

I have plenty of ideas on this, of course, plenty, though of course the question is whether Tramp is prepared to write such mental and physical mindscrew and deathage, and whether she can do it duty. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 25, 2006 4:46 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

*looks at Phang suspiciously.* ....erm...I doupt it. But you can tell me and I can try. I have a feeling that this will be a long chapter....and will take me a while to write. Phang and Vamps know how fussy I am about endings... Smile
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 25, 2006 9:13 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Phang and Vamps know how fussy I am about endings... Smile


Fussy is an understatement. If every single loose end isn't tied into a pretty bow with a floral rose-scented ribbon, it's crap.
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 26, 2006 2:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well.....it's not the happy ending that is all perfectly tied up. I like it when the ending makes you know that there will be another book. But when I get to the very end, I like it to be the end. no point in reading it if I never find out what and why.
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Chapter 11

Darren woke up in a dark cave. Even though he could not see her, Maria was lying next to him. His eyes took a while to adjust to the dark. He shivered in the cold. Maria stirred.

“Maria?” he whispered into the darkness. He could now see an outline of a body.

There was no answer for a minute as the figure stirred and took time to get used to the new atmosphere.

“Darren?” she replied after a moment.

“Yes.” Darren said. “Are you OK?”

“I…I don’t know. I feel weird, but I’m sure I’ll be fine, soon. You?”

“I’m fine. Bruised and powerless. But I’ll be OK.”

“That’s where you are both wrong.” A harsh, deep, growling voice spoke in the darkness.

Darren and Maria squinted to try and see who the voice belonged to. Suddenly a glowing demon came into sight. His eyes were flames; his mouth was a jagged crack on a round ball for a face. His skin was pale green and his stomach glowed a dull green light. He had rotting flesh for legs, and bones sticking out of his head.

The two teenagers gasped at the sight. The demon moved closer to Maria. He picked her up by the hair. He winced but held back the screams. Screaming would be no help now. Darren yelled for the demon to drop her.

He tried to stand up and fight, but he was held down by a powerful force. The demon laughed a screeching laugh that pierced their ears. That shut them up. They stared at the demon. Both siblings trying to calm themselves and think of a plan.

Another, less powerful demon, came into sight as he lit a torch that was set into the wall. The green demon shoved Maria onto the floor with such force that her leg snapped as it was bent backwards.

She screamed in agony but all the Darren could do was watch. Maria lay on the floor in pain. The demon picked up a knife that was waiting on the floor next to him.

He placed the cold blade onto Maria’s skin. He used his other hand to rip her top to shreds. Maria tried to fight back, but there was another magical force holding her in place. The demon slowly peeled the skin away from Maria’s flesh. She screamed and screamed. But screaming would be no help now.

The demon worked his way across her body. Soon her arms were skinned, her chest, her stomach, and her thighs. The demon roared will laughter. When he got half way down her left leg, he decided that he was no longer having fun.

He stopped the torture and thought of what to do next.

He then picked up the pieces of skin and put them close to Maria’s mouth.

“You must be hungry and tired, my darling.” He growled. “You should be our Queen. But just because you refuse, doesn’t mean that we have to let you die from starvation and exhaustion. However, death is said to be eternal sleep. You wouldn’t be tired if you were sleeping forever.”

The demon laughed and forced handfuls of skin into Maria’s mouth. Darren lay there, unable to move, having to watch his very own sister eat her own skin.

She chewed as she had no choice. They might kill Darren if she didn’t.

“I hope you enjoyed your meal.” Said the demon, after he got bored. “Now then, how about your sleep?” he said.

“Nooooooooo!” screamed Darren.

But the demon just laughed and brought down the knife. It pierced straight through her skinless flesh, broke through her rib cage and stopped half way through her heart.

Maria’s eyes widened. Then every muscle in her body relaxed. A stench of human faeces filled the room. Darren stared eyes wide. Not being able to admit to what he just witnessed. Maria was dead.

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 8:18 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, there's you final chapter. Enjoy! (you horrible, evil people. Very Happy )

There might be a second story. Might.

Any comments, complaints, wahetever are more than welcome!

Woo! the End!

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 10:01 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Congradulations Storm - don't forget to claim your free award.
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PostPosted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 2:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice ending Stormy! Surprised Very Happy
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