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Gallant wrote: |
Oh and I don't mean to be pushy but make the next chapter longer. I want something chunky to digest. |
Crunchyfrog wrote: |
I like this story although I found the switch of POV a little confusing. The character that was in 2nd person - I guess we're assuming this is who is sobbing, or perhaps Snow White?
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DeadManWalking wrote: |
But i think you could turn green light into something a lot more horrible than any growling beast |
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table set for what seemed like a huge party |
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Once armed with something sharp I would be much more inclined to head into the thorn-door. |
Smee wrote: |
Either he's a more willing pet than he lets on, or the control is in his mind in some way, suggesting magicial, or hypnotic powers. But then he should be a much more convincing beast than he is if her powers were of any strength. Where's the stomping around, growling etc? It must be the collar, and all it does is simply prevent him from leaving the room. The rest he must do under fear for his life or something. |
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