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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2008 5:54 am    Post subject: The Dark. Epilogue. All Things Come to Those Who Hate. Reply with quote


Nasty language! And! Oh no! The End!



Epilogue. Everything Comes to Those Who Hate.

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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2008 5:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

The Dark wishes to thank all those who have read and contributed to this tale.

The Dark hopes you enjoyed reading it as much as The Dark enjoyed writing it.

A new Gloom tale is being considered, and may spew this way soon, if you're unlucky. Keep an eye out.

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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2008 6:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well done Dark! Don't forget to collect your 1000Fables for completing a SGotM tale!

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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2008 4:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Quote:
watching as a uniform jabbed a suspect in cuffs with an electric prod.


Clean that sentence up, unless it is metonym (or synecdoche, can't remember which).

Anyway, Congrats. I liked that comma at the end, because it symbolizes that this is only a pause in the story. Also, it is a recurring technique with you to end the chapters with something like "Fuck" or "Shit", which I like. It gives a sense of humoristic continuation.
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PostPosted: Wed May 07, 2008 12:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

niiiice tricky ending there, Dark! Very nice. I almost thought Gloom was going to start himself on a little redemption arc there at the end and then.. nope. And I'm sort of glad about that. This isn't a redemption sort of tale. Nice job!
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PostPosted: Wed May 07, 2008 9:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice ending... Though the fact that it ended at all made me a lil' sad... Especially as Tired of Death is (probably) at it's last few chapters.
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PostPosted: Thu May 08, 2008 8:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

One word.

Lol.

Looks like Gloom is in some deep doo-doo here, eh?

Poor, poor Gloom. His day just can't get any worse, eh? *Cough nudge nudge hint hint*
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PostPosted: Fri May 09, 2008 12:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

The Dark thanks you all for your contribution to this tale. Without you, it would never have happened.

The Dark would also like to thank Rune, may he rest in pieces, for inspiring this tale of depravity. One would like to think there is a moral to that somewhere, but at the end of the day, shit is simply shit.

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PostPosted: Fri May 09, 2008 11:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

YAY!

It's coming back! Or at least, a new SG is. With Gloom! Beware of the Dead... Eh, sounds like it's becoming a Zombie tale, which only Gloom can stop! For whatever reason...
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PostPosted: Fri May 09, 2008 6:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

the dark is dead already - he will raising a horde to do his foul deeds!


WOOT

Loved it Darky! Send a copy in book form my way!

*will comment btter when hands not covered in whipped cream and chocolate*
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PostPosted: Sat May 10, 2008 5:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

oo. maybe the title is a comment on Gloom himself.. after all, at last sighting he WAS sporting a miraculously self-healing bod courtesy of the Blue Goo of Life Juice.
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PostPosted: Sun May 11, 2008 1:54 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very nice story dark! I look forard to the sequel. Clapping
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PostPosted: Thu May 15, 2008 11:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Woot! Resident Evil, with a twist!

At least, I hope it is.

~Holds breath~ Shocked
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