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I think we can safely say that your friends will remain loyal to you Cy! 
I think it's probably going to be a FIGHT! 
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I'm not sure what running would accomplish and I would *love* to see how Smee *tries* to use magic to do something with the pies 
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I just read the whole thing and loved it.
*bumps*
Looking for more... when's the next chapter up?!
Oh... and you can call me Vikas 
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I haven't done any of it in like a year but I actually started writing it again last night and there will be a new chapter up very soon 
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Yay!!!
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Chapter 4
The crowd of friends huddled closer and closer together as the shadows slowly lurked towards them.
“Oh my god, oh my god! What the hell are we doing?” Said Kang, grasping hold of his Samari sword.
They all began to shudder in fright.
“Gahhh!” screamed Smee, as one of the shadows launched a massive cream pie at him.
A giant cackle came from one of the shadows as it hopped in the air. The figure looked strangely familiar. It had a ball-shaped body with four thin legs coming off it. Another one, in the shape of a small dragon cast a shadow ball at the group, which burst into a puff of smoke. No body could see a thing.
“Mwuhahaha, you will never beat us.” said the shadow, creeping closer.
“Screw this! Tatty. Let’s rock!” announced Tikkani.
They both looked around the group with a mischievous grin on their face and then they all turned to face the enemy.
“You’re gonna love this” boasted Tats.
Tikky and Tatty ran towards the shadow, flew gracefully into their animal form and began thrashing their paws. But, this did nothing but frighten the beasts at first.
“Alright Tiks, we’re gonna have to get serious now.” Tatty remarked.
As she stepped back and poised herself, she smirked and then let out a flare of ice cold wind at the shadows. They all began to burst into nothingness. Tikky slammed her front paws on the floor, lifted her head and released an intense bolt of lightning at the attackers, which made them melt to the floor.
Before they knew it, the large shadow mass was swiftly getting smaller and smaller.
“Take this!” Shouted Smee, throwing another fire ball.
The monsters screeched in pain as they burnt in the flames. The rest of the group charged feircly towards the opposition, as Crunchy hopped over to Cy to help him. Thunderbird began to flap his wings briskly and whipped up a powerful wind to trap the evil beings so they could be defeated. Kang pulled out his sword, which emitted a bright magical light and swung for the demons. With a burst of fire, thunder and ice there was an immense, thrilling flash. The darkness changed into light as all of the shadows faded away.
The others rushed over to Cy, who was collapsing from the brutal attack he had endeavoured, as they dragged him out of the chair .
“I really, really want some vanilla hot chocolate!” Cy cried.
“Of course, you poor thing, let auntie Crunchy sort you out sweetie.” Crunchy said as she wrapped an arm round him.
They all made a quick escape from the dark building and found themselves in a eerie and foggy street.
“So… Smee. Do you know how to get us home?” asked kang expectantly.
“Of course. I’m not going to make that mistake again. Ok everyone let’s go home and enjoy the rest of Christmas.”
“Wait. Everyone shut up.” whispered Thunderbird.
They all looked around. ‘Tap…tap…tap.’ A large faint figure began to emerge from the mist and it was getting closer and closer.
Ok so the DP is Who is that? A new character? Another enemy? Will they get home or will something else put off their Christmas even more.
Sorry it’s been so long and my chapters so short and probably really crap, I just felt like writing some :L Oh and Cy, sorry for making you look so feeble. I promise I’ll make you more heroic in the next chapter. Ooh and if anyone would really like to be in the story, just say and tell me like what you are, like if you’re a wizard or a dragon or whatever
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DP?! Its a friend... and its me
Lol, loved this.. looking forward to more....
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As promised, I caught up, and I love the chapter.  It's perfectly fine however you portray me, just write what you think you should regardless of what I might think. You did a great job so far. Okay, I'd say it's Samantha Claus, also known as Mrs. Claus. And she's evil. Naughty.
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I read this a couple days ago and wanted to say it was really enjoyed but I wasn't logged in at the time and didn't have much time to post so I went on and forgot to comment until now... oops... sorry
Anyhow, so, yeah. Very much enjoyed this. You amaze me in how well you can write such short and concise chapters and still get us to a DP (I'm really bad at doing that...)
As for the DP, hmm... I had a thought earlier but I can't recall it now. Gimme a bit to remember it and come back when I do.
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Hey Sis! Great chapter, even if it has been a long time coming. It is short, but not lacking anything due to it. Very exciting, and well paced chapter.
For the DP, I think it's Santa, who got accidentally side-tracked into the realm of the evil IFians, and another group of them have knocked him over the head, leaving him disorientated, and stolen his reindeer, sleigh and all the presents! *gasp*
Looking forward to the next one! Keep it up!
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^ I actually like that one, but I want !me! to be introduced later, so yeah, Vikas and Pope maybe.
*Proceeds with Caution*
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| Thunderbird wrote: | | It's Pope and the Muralidharan Bros. Weary travellers from the distant land of OF. (think 3 wise men Wink ) |
From OF?! Hell no, Im a good guy
Oh, and btw, my mom told me she laughed like crazy after seeing "Muralidharan Bros." Not that I would know, I was laughing so hard that I started crying
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I don't mind being an eil wiseman....
Anyway, this is definatly an interesting tale! The chapters are short, but fun, and as far as I can tell, the portrayal of all the characters is accurate! *Big thumbs up*
There are quite a fer punctuation mistakes scattered throughout the story.... Several times I had to re-read things a few times to figure out where one sentance ended and another began... Very confuseing, may want to check through on that front....
As for the DP? It's......Good King Key who was transported here some time ago and Evil King Key took his place in the good realm and has slowly been destroying IF's economy! Now, Good King Key needs the party's help to restore his throne and return EKK back to the evil realm!
Can't wait to see more! Oh, and I'm hatching your egg and growing your hatchling for you
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Ok thankyou for all your lovely suggestions and support
Ooh and thanks Pope. Your a brilliant chief dragon hatcher/ grower
Time for the pole
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haha that's what I was thinking because not much could happen
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**bumps**
Still waiting for the next chapter...
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I've just got back from holiday but i start sixth form next week so ill try to find some time
Thanks for all of your votes guys!
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I'm always late to all the good stories... Oh well. I can't wait to see what happens next!
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...... *MAJOR BUMP*
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The 5th and Final Chapter
As the large figure came closer, the group snuggled closer together, some clinging on to each other for dear life.
"I can't take any more of this tonight." whined Tikky, clenching onto Tatty’s hand tightly. But it soon became apparent that the figure was not one but three beings, shuffling closer and closer. They seemed to be humming some kind of music.
"Umm... hello" said Thunderbird.
"Hello there, are you lost?” said one if the figures.
"Yes we are" said Kang in excitement.
"Well we are here to help you. We are going to see the king, bearing him many gifts. He's such a great king. I’m sure he'd help you on your way as well and share his riches with you." said another one of the figures.
“Seven gifts, to be precise,” said the third figure with a grin, nudging one of his cronies in the side.
"No. We don't need your hel..." said Smee but he was cut off by Tikky putting her hand over his mouth.
"Riches?" asked Tatty excitedly.
"Oh yes. Come this way"
Smee tried to object but just a muffled noise came out. The rest of the group all smiled at each other and followed the three mysterious men.
"Oh how rude of us. We didn't even introduce ourselves. I'm Pope."
"I’m Vikas Muralidharan and this is my brother Vishal."
"So nice to meet you." hissed Vishal. "Around these parts, we're known as the three wise men."
"Nice to meet you too." said Tatty, skipping along asking questions.
"There's something not right about this." stated Smee.
"Oh take a chill pill" answered Crunchy patting him on the back. "It'll all be fine... and we'll be rich!" she giggled.
"Here we are gang." declared Pope. "The king will be so happy to see all of you, he just loves visitors."
The three wise men began to cackle to each other as they led the group up to a huge castle. As they approached, Vishal gave a loud clap of his hands, and a drawbridge began to lower down, eventually hitting the ground with a loud thump. They all walked down a long, lit hallway.
“I wonder what riches the king possesses.” said Thunderbird.
“Money!” cried Tatty.
“Gold!” Kang added. Just then, the three wisemen opened two large doors into a huge dark hall and disappeared into the gloomy blackness.
“Hey! Where did you go?” shouted Tikky. They all began to wander the room.
“Don’t split up!” ordered Smee. It was too late. The doors had slammed behind them and a roar of chuckling filled the room. They all began to shout and cry out to each other. As the torches were lit one by one, they realised they were once again surrounded by the dark shadows that inhabited this evil place. The three friends that had escorted them here had now returned to their original black figures with glowing red eyes. They all stood there in a terrified clump and began to shudder as a colossal shadow filled the room. His massive eyes gave off an intense flaming glare. With a large, golden crown on top of his head, he proceeded to the centre of the room, where the Ifians sat, shaking silently.
"Ah, the graceful and powerful King Key, we are here and we bare gifts of greatness that we believe will please you immensely,” asserted Evil Vishal.
"Here. These two will do fine for performers" said Evil Pope, grabbing Crunchy and Thunderbird and shoving them forward.
"And these four would make a charming addition to your servants." suggested Evil Vikas, pushing Smee, Tikky, Tatty and Kang on the floor at the feet of the king.
“Ah. I think we could find another use for you two.” He smirked as he stroked Tikkys thigh.
“UH! You pig!” screamed Tatty.
“How dare you!” Tikky added, kicking out violently at the shadowy hand touching her.
"QUIET! ...And him?" hissed King Key.
"Oh. We thought he'd make a nice main course for our banquet tonight" said evil Vishal as he grinned and gestured at Cy.
"Ah... Worm. My favourite" Key announced licking his lips.
"I..I'm not a r..real worm... your Highness..." Cy replied.
"SILENCE!" screamed the King. Cy shrivelled, not knowing what to do.
"You three evil wisemen have done well tonight. You will be rewarded substantially." said King Key, while an evil smile appeared across his face as he looked over the seven scared little faces that lie before him.
"Lock them away for now." ordered Key. They all got bundled away and chucked in dirty prisons.
"NO! My shoes are all muddy" said Tatty beginning to cry.
"Well you all have yourselves to blame, I wanted to go home there and then." said Smee sticking his nose in the air.
"Can't you just do it now?" asked Crunchy.
"No. You don't understand magic at all. We must all be holding hands to make it back and that's no longer possible. Is it Tikky?” Smee shot the shape-shifter a glare. “If you weren’t all so engrossed in the prospect of money we wouldn’t be in this mess!”
"So-rry! we're not all magicians Smee." said Crunchy, her temper building.
"Where's Cy?" said Tatty.
"Oh no! Have they eaten him already?" cried Tikky.
Suddenly there was a loud slapping noise and all of them rushed to look out beyond the bars of their cages. On the other side, something was happening. The Wise Men were rushing all over the place, along with their king, and all seemed to be focusing on attempting to control a spinning blur in the centre of the room.
“It’s Cy!” Kang said joyfully.
“He’s gone mad!” Thunderbird added.
"How dare you treat me and my friends this way! You won't like worms when I’m finished with you!" shouted Cy as he began to repeatedly smack the evil king across the face, until he had lost all consciousness. The three wisemen tried to fight him but they had no chance against the spinning attack Cy was now executing. There were shadows flying everywhere.
The clan all cheered for him.
"My hero" said Tikky, fluttering her eye lashes.
"So how did you get out of your cage? There were bars all around you." asked Smee.
"Worms are good at digging holes" laughed Cy.
"Okay. We are going home. Right, now, everyone, hold hands and close your eyes." announced Smee.
They all huddled together and grabbed each others hands. "una...tiati...yimomom...buff!"
The group began to glow and float into the sky. The next thing they knew they were back in Smee’s living room.
"Oh thank god we made it back" gasped Crunchy. "And we all got here in one piece. Well... nearly” she said and began to giggle. Cy was stood in a long magicians robe and hat. They all turned to face Smee who was now only stood wearing a tiny thong.
“GAHH! That blasted spell book!” Smee shouted as he stormed out of the room, with his bare bottom on show. The clan all laughed and cheered.
FINALLY! I did it! Sorry for the delay
ok sorry to any of you that wanted to be good but i just couldn't work out a way tot put you in and work with the idea from the pole so I hope you enjoy it all the same
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*giggles* Very well done, Sis! I'm glad you finally got this one finished, and this final chapter didn't disappoint. I guess that having got to know quite a few of the people that you've included in this SG, the jokes/funny situations they're placed in at their expense seem all the more hilarious (and I know they'll find them equally entertaining themselves too ) Poor Smee seems to be getting the brunt of it in this final installment. *giggles*
Really enjoyed it, Tats, and I really hope you have a go at doing another. You have a knack for thinking up these funny situations and I think that it would be a popular read, as this one was. In fact, I'm sure that so many people would want their IF personas involved in such a project, you could possibly think up some way to make a game of it maybe, and add even more to the entertainment! (I'd give you a hand with that part if you wished) Anyway, have a think about it.
Keep up the good work (if you choose to continue)!
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AWESOME. XD
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With just a few days before x-mas, I thought I would try this one out. I'm so glad I did. It was very enjoyable.
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