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PostPosted: Sun Apr 23, 2006 11:31 pm    Post subject: Chapter 19: The God Returns Reply with quote

The final chapter of the featured storygame "The Machine's Daughter" has been posted:

Chapter 19: The God Returns

For more about the storygame, see the New Players Start Here topic in this forum.


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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 12:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Beautiful ending. Very elegant! Clapping

Sorry to see this one finish, but I'm sure the next Wheel story will be just as involving, and just as tricky to navigate.

Now all we have to do is wait for it... Cool
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 12:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Congratulations! Cheers
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 4:42 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wonderful chapter, Key. Had the conclusive feeling definitely. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 4:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Loved the whole story. This one feels more like an ending than any of the others - very satisfying.

Not to be too demanding - when's the next one??? Smile
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 7:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes, come on Kinky- when do we sate our thirst for blood with the next one?
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 8:54 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Fantastic Chapter, and story Razz

Yep, I definately agree with the consensus - this really seemed to conclude elegantly. Very Happy

Congratulations to Director Key and Writer Katie Clapping - the completion of the City's first storygame of it's type - a Featured storygame with regular weekly installments and a split team producing it.

And that's not even mentioning it's impressive graphic enhancements.

Can't wait for the next

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 9:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Fantastic! Thumbs Up Wonderful conclusion, and I look forward to more stories from the Wheel.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 9:20 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Excellent! Tied up everything!
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 10:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Congrats Katie! Her first City story finished, and may it not be her last.

I liked the way that although it could be seen as a cliffhanger, it was very definitely the end of the story. Lovely work.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 10:28 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks everybody. Very Happy

I just want to say how grateful I am for the interest and great suggestions and debate that you all put into this story. For me, this storygame has reinforced what's uniquely great about storygaming: that together we created something that I had no idea of when we started, and could never have created by myself. Seeing your decisions take the story in unexpected directions, and even early decisions like Pilla's choice to study philosophy forming the basis of her character and the eventual story resolution, has been really wonderful.

I also want to give a special thanks to Katie, whose prose beautifully captured the voice of Pilla and the land of the Wheel, and who was a joy to work with throughout.

Finally, thanks also to Leigh Dragoon and Gordon Sutton, who created the striking graphics, font, and animation of the story frame, as well as the changing graphics on the left side (all of them except the map).

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 12:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well done graphics dudes!
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 12:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes, congradulations Key and Co. I definately prefered this ending to the Archers Flight, which I though left too much still to happen.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 12:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Beautiful ending, Key, I loved the entire story.

Can't wait for the next one.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 5:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Superb, brilliant, and all the other adjectives for job well done. I love this one Key and can't wait for the next story in the Wheel genre.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 24, 2006 7:03 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

And I'd like to thank everyone here too. You've been fun to work with, and occasionally quite surprising!
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 3:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very nicely written and I loved how the ending wrapped things up a lot more this time. Archer's Flight was pretty dissapointing in that regard too me but this one is a lot better.

Well done Key and Katie!
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 5:25 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Now makes me wonder what animal we're going to meet in the next story.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 8:27 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very good story.

I KNEW that it was going to end soon, but I didn't think THIS soon.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 9:01 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ooh, Raven... maybe we're not! Shocked All the storygames from the wheel end with them having started somthing new and maybe this is the last one before we see their fates combining. I do think the one we start with should be Pilla though- Her story was best written and graphiced.

I do seem to recall seeing this sentiment expessed in a previous disscussion. Confused . oh well!
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 10:28 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wonderful end...a gripping read all the way through. That said...


People this series is call 'The Wheel' for a very good reason. As with Lodevar and the Ram series Pilla will return when the Wheel spins anew...

After all, all the heros are simply waiting for the final battle which may never come depending on what happens on the turns between them. Thus all is circular and all is confusion and I must remove myself to ponder this conclusion...

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 3:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I will toss my approval in along with the rest. This story was the first I read on the site. Unfortunately, I came in a bit late and spent a few hours catching up, which was a negative which almost lost my attention. But I imagined being there all along and it kept me going to the next DP. I have been tickled to be involved in this story and further since here at IF. Thanks for the welcoming attitudes from everyone, and for the quality of the performance that was put into this piece. I longingly await the next Wheel installment! Rock On
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 4:29 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Ooh, Raven... maybe we're not! Shocked All the storygames from the wheel end with them having started somthing new and maybe this is the last one before we see their fates combining. I do think the one we start with should be Pilla though- Her story was best written and graphiced.

I do seem to recall seeing this sentiment expessed in a previous disscussion. Confused . oh well!


I don't know. Like others have said. The Wheel is still spinning. And what it lands on could be a story about a Scarpi...who knows? Cool
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 4:45 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

We've already had the Scarpi - that was Masakati. It could be a satyr, unicorn, twin or bullhead though. We haven't had them as main characters, though we've met a few.
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 7:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

hmmm... Shocked Pilla was told about the head of the satyr religion being a human... how about the story about him?
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 7:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'd go with the unicorns...a baby growing up in a civilization where there's a definite lack of opposable thumbs seems worth writing to me...*wanders off to ponder an SG based about that concept*
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 9:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yay! I loved the ending, and I liked the story as a whole, but I can't figure out one thing:

What happened to Prometheus? Isn't he a little too noticeable to hide...? What's he doing?

Anyway, great ending! Wink
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 27, 2006 12:22 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

But unicorns aren't Makerites are they?
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 27, 2006 2:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I thought we already had one with a satyr? Oh, whoops, that was a Sheephead....
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 27, 2006 5:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Going through my childhood mnemonic for the signs of the zodiak:

The Ram, the Bull, the heavenly Twins;
Next the Crab the Lion shines;
The Virgin and the Scales.
The Scorpion, Archer, and the Goat;
The man who pours the water out;
And Fishes with glittering tails.

The unicorn in "The Archer" was referred to as a Virgin. The zigots, I'm taking as the Scales (measuring creatures, not flesh and blood, etc.). What we haven't had in a story, by my count, are Makers born to Taurus, Gemini, Cancer, Virgo, Capricorn and Aquarius.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 28, 2006 4:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sounds like a poem, Goosey. Very Happy I don't know the zodiac at all, so I am glad I can recite something to remember them. I think we should do Taurus, since we're already in that month of time.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 28, 2006 6:39 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Goosey... hmmm.....respect thy elders Rave.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 28, 2006 3:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

That's very sweet and chivalrous, Muaddib, but if I were going to be upset at something like that, I wouldn't have chosen "Mother Goose" as a name! I may be old, but I'm not very dignified, unlike my son the chamberpot. Smile

I actually thought it was sort of friendly.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 28, 2006 8:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Mother Goose wrote:
I'm not very dignified, unlike my son the chamberpot.


Ahem...you must mean, "...unlike my son the magical and dignified chamberpot."

Smile

Thanks for your interest in future Wheel stories, everybody. The next one will be titled "The Twin Prince." I hope to get it started in the next month or two, but I can't make any promises.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 28, 2006 9:10 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

HAHAHAHA

Love your new av by the way Key.Seems more appropriate than the last one.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 28, 2006 10:10 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ah Gemini...that should be a fun one to write...all those moodswings and lovely deception...and yes, chess suits you well...
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 29, 2006 11:53 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

The avatar *is* very cool, though I think it might work better without the silver border.
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 29, 2006 7:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Muaddib wrote:
Goosey... hmmm.....respect thy elders Rave.


Ah, but Mother Goose did not seem to take much offense.

LOL Key. Like the new av. And can't wait to see that next Wheel story.

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 30, 2006 3:11 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

LOVIN the new av key. You could post a whole range in the gallery for new avs and then people could thake their picks of light, dark, pawn, bishop, knight...
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OK, thanks everybody. Locking this up and moving it to the Hall of Legends.
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