Mordok wrote: |
So Far: Jakeen, a young bard, has traveled to Vlusos to see if anyone there could help him understaand the magic of his music.
“Ole Antook would have beaten you blind if I didn’t come along when I did.(this period should be a comma)” the woman continued. “That carriage you picked to night in belonges to a powerful mage. Jakeen wound up playing all of the fist day... |
Mordok wrote: |
No one wants to be bored with the details of my real life so I will just say this.
Please help me find the flaws. I didn't have time to edit this as much as I would have liked, and I know it probably feels rushed |
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