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If he wasn't dead from the hit, he'd surly drown for he had fallen unconscious when his head hit one of the beams. |
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He blood sprays over the already soaked boy. |
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One thing I take a little protest to - the spirit that was in control of Darkon - be it just another aspect of himself, or possibly something else entirely like a possession, seemed to contradict itself.
It attacked the 'wrong-doers' yet focused one of its lethal assaults ruthlessly upon an innocent child in the process. This is hard to rationalize. It makes sense when he lays into the rest of the crew, but surely a child is no threat to the mermaiden? ++++++ He showed great magic and combat skill (nicely written battle scene btw) and I particularly liked he did it all with his bare hands. Now, were we supposed to envision them as becoming blades or just held in a martial arts like style that made them blade-like? I got the latter but wouldn't have wanted to miss it if you meant the prior. |
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It kinda hurts that you called my work tastless, but it is your right to have that oppinion. |
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