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Men dressed too tidily to be deck hands threw ropes onto the dock |
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A long brewing storm had finally culminated close to shore. This is an ambiguous sentence. Do you mean the storm is long (as in length) and brewing, or the storm brewed for a long time? Add either a comma for option one, or a hyphen for option two. The sun, still retreating through the great fissures of cloud, gave the force a fiery menace. As the wind picked up in tenuous reform, some of the dock workers began to show their respects. “Here! The sea—she musters wrath. Tie down the boats a double and leave the shore. “Blasted mages, ‘tis not a free port,” said Biggs to himself. There was an air of snobbery around mages; Biggs was not proven a man of the rabble, but on this shore life had a humble quality. “With all due respect harbour Master, you know not what trouble has befallen on this coastal town. |
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