Tikanni Corazon wrote: |
Upon reading the two chapters, it would seem that the first part is most likely to occur post the second? It seems like the world has already passed the 'shit hits the fan' stage, whereas the second is almost like events leading to the time Max lives in. I'm not sure if that is the case, but that's how it's coming across. Even though it's fairly early on, I think I like Max, I hope to see more of him as the tale progresses. |
Chinaren wrote: |
*Though I'm an Android man myself, so no crApple in this story ohno. |
Lebrenth wrote: |
Nice, voted!
By the way, Chinaren, you appear to be forgetting to change the post so it doesn't display as a chapter. Makes it easier for future readers to know what parts are story and which parts are comments that can be skipped. Since getting new readers in the late game is already hard, etc. etc. |
Chinaren wrote: |
5 votes is more than I used to have on some of my SGames in the heady days of IF, so good going. |
Tikanni Corazon wrote: |
Started to read this new chapter and realised that nothing was making any sense. Why? Well, because I've spent the evening drinking, which isn't at all useful if one wishes to do anything productive.
Basically C-ren, I'm a bit tipsy and I just wanted to let you know that I have seen that you have a new chapter and I will get to it when I'm no longer inebriated 😉 x |
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Well, I can still type at least, whether this can be classed as writing, we'll see |
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Hey. No, Hell, that was it. Some kind of life after death for those who had lived less than perfect lives, if he recalled his mythology classes. Well, perhaps Zhong had made a mistake when he came up with the Unifying theory which finally disproved religion. He'd obviously forgotten to carry a one or something. He was dead and in Hey...Hell. |
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Eyes that had seen too much, eyes that even the dead wouldn't envy. |
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The bat still had some ominous dark stains on it from that incident |
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intent on the business of drinking hard and forgetting the real world as quickly and thoroughly as possible. |
Key wrote: |
... but it doesn't look like these are the best people or the best time. |
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