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PostPosted: Mon Nov 13, 2006 10:39 am    Post subject: Scrapyard: Help! I'm stuck Reply with quote

Sorry, but this isn't page 4. This is me asking everyone for help with what happens next in scrapyard.

In page three Marty was trapped by rats, and the vote was to lift him out with the crane. I'm begining to regret drawing that crane because it dosn't seem to be leading me to any new decision points.

So what I need are suggestions for some kind of new problem that can arise from this last decision point. They don't necesarily need to be crane related. It could have something to do with where the crane puts him down. or something that happens after they get off the crane.

There will be no poll for this, and I may not use any of your ideas, but I need something to get my brain going. Sitting around alone thinking about this is getting me nowhere Smile
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 13, 2006 11:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Not to be obvious, but the crane could break, forcing him to climb up it?

Or maybe - after escaping the rats - Marty's manager (for example) could appear at the scene, and force him to quickly find excuses.
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 13, 2006 12:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The crane manages to set him down but the rats won't give up so easy?

Maybe Mel gives Marty the scolding of his life, for scaring her, and he has to come up with some way to pacify her?

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PostPosted: Mon Nov 13, 2006 6:08 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like the breakdown idea. He could be stuck up the crane, leaving his chick stuck down below with the rats. Meanwhile, it seems the device has attracted flying creature(s) as well. Oh oh!
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 14, 2006 7:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think the idea of mel telling marty his scrapyard is dangerous is a good one. He tried to make something for her and summoned an army of evil rats! I think he certainly needs to redeem his prized junk heap.
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 14, 2006 4:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Mmm, to add to or replace my previous idea. Maybe a flying beast does come, but takes the device.

Marty is happy, but Mel tells him off, saying that he must recover it. And this begins the quest...
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 14, 2006 5:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

How about the crane is actually the arm of a junk robot, and he's a little upset when someone starts using it?
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 14, 2006 5:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

wow some very interesting and random ideas Smile

this get's the creative juices flowing... I'm thinking this story needs a villain... someone with personallity, at least something more compellng then a swarm of rats, any ideas?
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 14, 2006 5:33 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Argonaut wrote:
wow some very interesting and random ideas Smile

this get's the creative juices flowing... I'm thinking this story needs a villain... someone with personallity, at least something more compellng then a swarm of rats, any ideas?



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PostPosted: Tue Nov 14, 2006 5:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

...and a rival for Mel's attentions!

Maybe some rich 'college boy' who is a rival inventor. Of course, he always steals other people's ideas.
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 15, 2006 12:50 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Howabout some creepy stinky hobo dude that lives deep in the caverns of junk sees Mel, decides he likes her, and then kidnaps her, running off, whilst Marty is trapped, dangling in midair from the crane helplessly?

All problems solved.
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 17, 2006 1:05 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

hmmm...
for a villain, how about some king of mutant half-rat half person?
after he has been lifted by the crane, mabye the rats are so afraid of the crane that they all flee, leaving the mystery of who is the cranemaster? or mabye the cranemaster takes him away in the crane and puts him down in safety? and then perhaps the cranemaster could turn out to be someone devoted to rescuing the victims of the rats? or some random person who could agree to be a sidekick? either way, they could together fight the villain!
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 17, 2006 11:58 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Maybe the crane picks him out of danger only to accidentally deposits him in an immense scrap-pit/scrap cave, of which he can't get out. He has to use the scrap inside the pit/cave to make a way out.
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 18, 2006 5:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

lol. I do like the idea of the dude kidnapping her. Or maybe the device can attract more rabits (maybe the familly of the first one at the start) and then there's a massive battle: rats vs rabits with humans stuck inbetween.lol. Very Happy Maybe the rats start spreading the plague!

(I have a thing about the plague....ignor me. lol)

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PostPosted: Sun Nov 19, 2006 4:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

tramp in a storm wrote:

(I have a thing about the plague....ignor me. lol)


I have an obsession with it as welll-youd be surprised how easy it is to wiggle it into a conversation "He so just dissed me!" "Thats cuz you have the plague" "I what?"

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Anyways, So the rich idea theif I like, So see Mel falls for the rich guy and an ex gf of the rich guy starts hitting on marty to make rich guy jealous and then... Ah, what a tangled web they weave! No actually that would be a pain.

What about a chick evil person? Who is in love with marty and takes away mel just when they start getting close?
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 21, 2006 9:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

And THEN they acidentally step on a box on idearium , which lets all the suggested villans out, and then they all become carriers of the plague too!
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 6:31 am    Post subject: Why do we hate rats? Reply with quote

As a completely random plot twist, one or more rodents start talking about and possibly loobying for quadreped rights, but finnaly get annoyed and slink off, disgusted, except for this one zealot who is completely and totally obsessed with the elemination of the dictator bipeds...

Then a giant chicken wanders onto the scene.

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PostPosted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 11:15 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Bad guy...hmmm....looking at all the previous suggestions, maybe a type of 'all the above' would work. An evil proffesser from the academy who is stealing mMarty's ideas and hits on Mel. Matbe Mel trys to pull Marty up witht he crane, it gets stuck or something, and this guy shows up, under the pretence of checking up with his former students or something, and casually saves Marty. Thus making himself look good and incuring Mel's gratitude. Marty and him could even have a history of the Proff stealing Marty's ideas, so even though Mel sees nothing wrong with him, Marty knows what he's really like.

hmmm, maybe he's really young for being a proff too, so closer to Marty and Mel in ages. Maybe he's the opposite of a sterotypical scholor, like hates bow ties and drives some cool furturistic motorcycle...

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PostPosted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 11:41 am    Post subject: Re: Why do we hate rats? Reply with quote

Masterweaver wrote:
As a completely random plot twist, one or more rodents start talking about and possibly loobying for quadreped rights, but finnaly get annoyed and slink off, disgusted, except for this one zealot who is completely and totally obsessed with the elemination of the dictator bipeds...

Then a giant chicken wanders onto the scene.

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lol. pretty funny. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 22, 2006 11:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

thanks everyone for all your ideas. I have the start of something going so I'm gonna lock this topic down and hopefully finish the next page soon. wish me luck.
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