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I tried to make this chapter more open instead of what Hal decides to do |
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What do you think of my new avatar? |
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lol. I didn't have one before, |
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fualt |
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coulden't |
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happend |
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forbiden
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And so what happened today, when you were fighting uncle donovan, will happen agian?"
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Shady Stoat wrote: |
Very good plot development Geek Girl. I like it!
I think he should demand to see his mother before he goes anywhere. Not for her to see him, but just to find her and take a glimpse and make sure she's still alive, at least. Otherwise, her peril will be a constant distraction from what he has to do next. |
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Should the mystery of Hal's relationship to Henry be settled quickly, or is it better for the story to drag it out? |
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Drag it out IMO. You want to keep the reader hanging, so try not to tie loose ends too fast. |
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You're good in a stew as well Shady.
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Geek_girl72 wrote: |
Graduation day! Yahoo for me! (Does a little dance...very badly) |
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“You see Hal? You feel nothing when I’m with you, I bear it on your behalf. Who else would do that for you? And now, I’m going to do you an even bigger favor…”
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“Oh! That requires quiet an explanation |
Geek_girl72 wrote: |
One last question: What do I do with this now that its done? |
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