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and Grum, who was their companion and a dwarf |
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Grum, as in the name of the dwarvish land in Lords and Ladies? |
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I don't think I can add anything constructive- it seems you've developed your style, and the only way to improve is with reading. You may or may not want to use more sophisticated language and sentences; maybe you can add some allusions, metaphors, whatever- but its up to you, a simple style suits the story fine. |
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As to reading to improve, true for all writers, and work can only improve with age and experience (quite a nice thought actually... )...at least up to a certain age anyway. |
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Nice, looking forward to it.. |
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