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What is your reaction to what you have seen/learned so far?

Take me back to 1762. I want no part of this.

16%

[ 1 ]

I know that pub, and I saw it destroyed. I must look at it more closely.

16%

[ 1 ]

That's him! That's the man I saw myself talking to in 1294. Who is he?

50%

[ 3 ]

When I arrived here you spoke as if I had returned from an Elven Stronghold after breaking a seal. If this is my destiny, you must prepare me with your magic now, because I have none.

16%

[ 1 ]

Total Votes : 6

Who Voted: Chinaren, D-Lotus, Lebrenth, Shillelagh, Thunderbird, Tikanni Corazon

#41: Author: D-Lotus, Location: Hollywood, USA

Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2010 6:04 pm
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I think you guys might be missing the point. I got the impression that the door handle wasn't necessarily attached to the metal hulk.

Quote:

The handle detaches itself again and lies in your hand.

I believe that this "doorhandle" will open up a door wherever it is applied, not just on the spaceship or time-capsule (if that's what the metal hulk is). Thus the opportunity would be present as long as we take the handle with us. It might even be useful in rescuing the girl from prison (if she even needs rescuing, btw) by opening a door in the prison wall.

#42: Author: Shillelagh, Location: Kansas

Posted: Thu Apr 01, 2010 8:58 pm
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Oh, I agree- but we don't know which surfaces the door knob can be used on. It could very well be that the knob can only be used on a few, select, small surfaces- if the knob attaches to anything, why couldn't the girl use it to escape? If she truly needs to be rescued, perhaps we can come back to her later- when we actually know how to use the knob, instead of just bumbling around with it.

Because, frankly, I don't think there's any point in staying around. If there's no benefit to be had, does it really matter when we leave?

#43: Author: Tikanni Corazon, Location: Running through the plains of my mind, my wolf spirit at my side (but doing so in the UK!).

Posted: Fri Apr 02, 2010 6:41 am
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I actually don't agree. The reaction of the smaller object to the larger one, is enough to make me think that they are very specific to each other. But there is also the fact that, in my opinion anyway, both objects are unusual to the time period. We don't know what they are, what they do, or where they came from.

Also going back to the first chapter, and reading the description of the girl, her appearence is also unusual. And, maybe it's just me, but I got the feeling, from the description of the shoes, that maybe they could be trainers/sneakers.

The whole thing oozes futurist, to me. Therefore I was of the opinion that these objects meant something to each other, and the doorhandle can not just be attatched to random objects.

But, like I said, all just my opinion, and my personal impression of the situation.

#44: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Fri Apr 02, 2010 12:21 pm
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The poll is up.

Have fun voting! Smile

#45: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Mon Apr 05, 2010 1:59 am
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Planning to close the poll on Friday if anyone else wants to cast their vote. Smile

#46: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Wed Apr 14, 2010 9:05 am
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Apologies for the delay - work has been a little hectic this week. But I'll try and have the next instalment up by the weekend. Smile

#47: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Thu Apr 15, 2010 6:05 am
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Poll Results:

What do you do?
Go and find the girl
0% [ 0 ]
Call out to the landlady for more information
20% [ 1 ]
Enter the metal cylinder
80% [ 4 ]

Total Votes : 5
Who Voted: D-Lotus, scissorkitty, Shillelagh, Smee, Tikanni Corazon

So, time to explore inside the metal cylinder.

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#48: Author: Shillelagh, Location: Kansas

Posted: Thu Apr 15, 2010 6:20 am
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Well, I may not know where or when I am, but I at least know that I am safe. For the moment, anyway. And given the situation I left behind, I'd rather be cautiouis about leaving this relative safety. I saw what the girl did- I can probably repeat that to leave. But I don't know where I'll end up once I do leave. So before I do leave the castle, I'll take a look at the scroll. See if it's worth reading or reacting to, and that will determine how fast I want to leave.

#49: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Thu Apr 15, 2010 8:10 am
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Oops! Upon re-reading this, I realised that there is a detail of this main character's origins we need to keep in mind, that could have a significant bearing on this DP - and make it a little more interesting, perhaps.

As you already know, he is a fruit seller who lives in a rural setting, in or around the mid 18th century. This means that he is illiterate.

#50: Author: Shillelagh, Location: Kansas

Posted: Thu Apr 15, 2010 11:25 am
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Ah. Okay, in that case, I'm going to see if there are any pictures or diagrams on the scroll which might be useful to me. As long as nothing looks evil or sinister, then I'll be mimicking the motions that the girl used.

#51: Author: Tikanni Corazon, Location: Running through the plains of my mind, my wolf spirit at my side (but doing so in the UK!).

Posted: Thu Apr 15, 2010 11:48 am
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Another brilliant chapter Crunchy! Smile

Well, though I myself may not be able to read the scroll, it has been left there for someone. I think I can safely assume that the 'cylinder' has not been just dumped, but left there for another person, or persons.

I think I should stay where I am for now, and see who comes for it. After all, they cannot see me, and they most likely will not be able to get in. So I will wait and see what happens, before attempting to leave.

#52: Author: D-Lotus, Location: Hollywood, USA

Posted: Thu Apr 15, 2010 5:57 pm
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I think that was your best chapter to date, Crunchy. Good work. Now, this capsule has very interesting properties. For one, it has the ability to time travel-- or at least to replay events of the past. It's uncertain, however, whether anything he is seeing from the inside is real at all. For now I think one must work under the assumption that at least some of the things he is seeing, such as Ned trying to listen for noise inside the capsule and the situation he is in at the end of the chapter, were happening on real-time.

So how curious is our hero? He was curious enough to enter the capsule in the first place, so he is probably still curious to see how the capsule works. My suggestion is to fiddle around. We have some clues from what he saw:

Quote:

She slots the egg into some sort of niche by the hatch, and the door swings shut. Then she takes the egg out of its invisible placing, and feels around the area by the hatch as if looking for something.

Holding the egg out to you for you to see, she waits as it morphs into a door handle, like your own. Then she winds the lever of the handle around a full circle.

All of this, of course, could be happening in reverse. For all we know, the last thing our hero saw was the first thing that the girl did. Sort of like a rewind.

Nonetheless, I think searching for the "niche" he saw would be first on his to-do list.

Also, if the capsule is a cylinder, perhaps he can use to weight of his body--by rocking back and forth-- to roll it away from the open area towards the woods where it can be concealed until he figures out how to open it. Getting picked up by another set of people could make the process difficult, so we wanna avoid that.

#53: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Sun Apr 18, 2010 12:19 am
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There are certain sequences of events in this chapter - which, if you read backwards, may give a slightly different perspective on things. Wink

I'll give it one more day for suggestions, and put the poll up tomorrow.

Smile

#54: Author: Chinaren, Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com

Posted: Sun Apr 18, 2010 5:31 pm
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Crunchyfrog wrote:

There are certain sequences of events in this chapter - which, if you read backwards, may give a slightly different perspective on things. Wink

I suspected the 'other self' he saw may come back to haunt him.

Very nice chapter or two there CF, I'm enjoying despite the POV, which I still don't like! Wink

I do enjoy time travel stories though, keep meaning to do one myself. Anyway...

I say he tries experimenting with the handle, as well as seeing if he can make anything (pictures!!) out on the scroll. Other than that, perhaps rage up and down for a bit? Bang on the walls some more? (In different places).

I'm out.

#55: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Mon Apr 19, 2010 1:03 am
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Some good suggestions there. I've distilled them into 3 options, and the banging about in different places is included in the 3rd option. Smile

Have fun voting!

#56: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 10:40 pm
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Poll is open until Friday - new chapter will be ready soon after.

Smile

#57: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Mon Apr 26, 2010 4:49 am
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Thanks everyone for voting! Here are the results of the poll for Chapter 5.

How to deal with the situation?

Use your bodyweight to roll the cylinder out of sight and concentrate on trying to get out for a look at that scroll
16% [ 1 ]
Wait patiently to see who comes for the scroll
16% [ 1 ]
Concentrate on learning how to gain control of the cylinder and the door handle
66% [ 4 ]

Total Votes : 6
Who Voted: Chinaren, D-Lotus, scissorkitty, Shillelagh, Smee, Tikanni Corazon

So lets figure out how to work this contraption!

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#58: Author: D-Lotus, Location: Hollywood, USA

Posted: Mon Apr 26, 2010 5:19 pm
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"How did I get here? Is this Magic?"

#59: Author: Chinaren, Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com

Posted: Tue Apr 27, 2010 1:11 am
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Yeah, I'd kinda roll with it here. Where is this, who are you, what is this, what are you talking about, what the heck is going on, where's the toilet???? And so on...

Apart from my usual first person moan, enjoyed it. However I thought this this....

Quote:

Nobody believes in witchcraft any more.

...struck me as rather false for the period. I'm sure there were lots of people who still believed in wc back then. Heck, there are still people who believe in it today!

#60: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Tue Apr 27, 2010 8:19 am
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Chinaren wrote:

Apart from my usual first person moan, enjoyed it.

It's working! It's working! Very Happy

Seriously though I'm trying different approaches to writing in this POV and if I can get to the point where the POV no longer jars, or at least the story and the way it is told makes the POV 'invisible' then I'll have achieved my goal. It's a tough but hopefully worthwhile excercise in writing.

Quote:

However I thought this this....

Quote:

Nobody believes in witchcraft any more.

...struck me as rather false for the period. I'm sure there were lots of people who still believed in wc back then. Heck, there are still people who believe in it today!

The culture and setting that Alf comes from is loosely based on England somewhere between 1760 and 1780. (About 100 years prior to the setting for Magician's Touch, incidentally Wink

) I've not spent as much time researching this period yet as I have done for MT...

I was surprised to read that the last execution for witchcraft in England was as early as 1682. By 1736 attitudes had changed so much that laws against witchcraft were repealed in England. They were replaced by a law that made it illegal to pretend to cast spells or tell fortunes.

Apparently it had become 'fashionable' in more educated circles in the mid 18th century to regard witchcraft as superstition. The poorer, uneducated people like Alf probably were still superstitious at that time. But they also used to like to imitate the upper classes in various ways - notably in the kind of clothes they'd wear. Carrying on in that vein (for this story) I'm kind of going on the theory that the younger generation of peasants (like Alf) would consider it to be their version of 'cool' not to believe in witchcraft, even if they didn't understand why.

Good point well made, though - perhaps this detail should be trickled into the story a little more.

Answers to questions so far coming soon... Smile

#61: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Wed Apr 28, 2010 2:08 am
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Okay, here are the answers to the questions so far. @ C'ren - yes, they'll show him the bathroom soon enough! Wink

These questions and answers will be incorporated into the next chapter.

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#62: Author: Chinaren, Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com

Posted: Sat May 01, 2010 5:21 am
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That's just great. But I'm going to drop a turd on your floor unless you show me where the latrine* is.

*I don't know wat they claled it back then.

#63: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Sun May 02, 2010 6:00 am
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Any more questions/suggestions? Smile

#64: Author: Tikanni Corazon, Location: Running through the plains of my mind, my wolf spirit at my side (but doing so in the UK!).

Posted: Mon May 03, 2010 4:06 am
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I think I would like to know a little more about the workings of this 'Time Machine'. Though I don't know if I want to go home yet, what happens when I do? Will I be taken straight back? Does the Time Machine just shift between those two time periods? If not, how does it know where to go to?

Thinking about it, will I be allowed to ever go back home, considering what I know about all of this?

Great chapter Crunchy! Lookin' foward to the next one! Wink

#65: Author: D-Lotus, Location: Hollywood, USA

Posted: Tue May 04, 2010 2:36 pm
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Who is Alfie?

#66: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 4:59 am
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D-Lotus wrote:

Who is Alfie?

You are.

Tikanni Corazon wrote:

I think I would like to know a little more about the workings of this 'Time Machine'. Though I don't know if I want to go home yet, what happens when I do? Will I be taken straight back? Does the Time Machine just shift between those two time periods? If not, how does it know where to go to?

Thinking about it, will I be allowed to ever go back home, considering what I know about all of this?

- Good questions - and they'll be addressed in the next chapter, which is now underway.

Thanks all for the questions you put to this threesome on behalf of Alf - the ones already answered will also be incorporated into Chapter 7 - which I'm aiming to have finished by this time next week. Smile

#67: Author: D-Lotus, Location: Hollywood, USA

Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 12:13 pm
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Perhaps I should have specified. I meant, who is the Alfie that they know. Or how do they know him anyway? I would think it bizarre if someone already knew my name or who I was without ever meeting me before.

#68: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 12:18 pm
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Ah, ok! Sorry for the misunderstanding.

Yes, I'll translate that into a question 'how do you know me?' and incorporate it into the writing. Smile

#69: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Fri May 14, 2010 3:05 am
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Okay! Every question has been incorporated in some form or other, and answered, if not fully, then at least partially. Let me know if there is anything that appears to have been missed out!

Okay, without further ado -

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#70: Author: Chinaren, Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com

Posted: Sat May 15, 2010 4:10 am
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I think a peasant such as he is would be scared here. Maybe demand to be taken back to his time and place, away from such warlockary. He's a commoner, and these affairs are beyond his ken.

Nice chapter Ceef, though I think possibly his confusion and awe would be even more than you've made it here, though it would also have made the chapter a bit long I guess. Confused

#71: Author: D-Lotus, Location: Hollywood, USA

Posted: Sat May 15, 2010 2:09 pm
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I agree with Cren that he would be shocked and cowed. I think he would even be too scared to ask to be taken back to his time. In any case, it doesn't seem that he can escape this Wizard in any time or place, so he might as well stay with the people who can inform him about what his destiny is. The presence of the pub and of the Wizard offer some continuity in this changed world. If I were Alf, I would be interested in visiting the pub and finding out about what happened to it, since it pertains to him-- being as it is the one remnant of his time.

#72: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Tue May 18, 2010 9:30 am
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Planning to put up a poll for this at the end of the week. Any other ideas/suggestions? Smile

#73: Author: Tikanni Corazon, Location: Running through the plains of my mind, my wolf spirit at my side (but doing so in the UK!).

Posted: Thu May 20, 2010 2:43 pm
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Considering that we saw our other self talking to this wizard, and then Sandeep and Andy spoke of us getting into the Elven stronghold, we would assume that there is some kind of undercover operation going on here, to infiltrate the elven territory, or to find out what their plans are for the ongoing war between them and the humans.

If this is so, then we should get out of sight quickly, in case the wizard recognises us, and it ruins our plans, whatever they may be. And Lizzie and the others would most likely agree.

Though considering the wizard is just strolling down the street, there is a chance that he may not actually be a threat to them. But I'll still say, try and get away before he recognises us.

Great chapter Crunchy! Smile

#74: Author: Shillelagh, Location: Kansas

Posted: Thu May 20, 2010 5:04 pm
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I have absolutely no idea what I'd be doing here. Part of me wants to hand the knob back over and say "Whatever war you're in, you can fight it without me." The other part of me wants to break the fourth wall and ask shock-value questions like "I thought she died. How is she here?" Maybe we should demand to know who the wizard-figure is.

Mostly, though, I'm thinking something along the lines of "Look. You keep talking like I'm some sort of important person. Well, I'm not. I'm helpless, and I have no idea what's going on. You want me to help in your little war? Then you'd better train me."

#75: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Sat May 22, 2010 8:09 am
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Okay, poll's up!

Very Happy

#76: Author: Chinaren, Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com

Posted: Sun May 23, 2010 2:44 am
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'ted for the take me back option. Of course, by voting for this, I'm in no way saying he should be taken back of course. At least not just yet.

#77: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Sun May 23, 2010 1:30 pm
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Chinaren wrote:

'ted for the take me back option. Of course, by voting for this, I'm in no way saying he should be taken back of course. At least not just yet.

Should the first option win, Alfie's desire to go back home would just about be the only thing you could count on as featuring in the next chapter. As it features time-travel there are a lot of variables in play for this DP. Very Happy

#78: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Fri May 28, 2010 12:36 am
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Any more votes? I'll leave this open for a few more days, as it is the bank holiday coming up.

#79: Author: D-Lotus, Location: Hollywood, USA

Posted: Fri May 28, 2010 7:52 pm
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Ha-ha, it'd be difficult to handle a four-way tie, don't you think? Very Happy

#80: Author: Crunchyfrog,

Posted: Sun May 30, 2010 11:32 am
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And we still have a 4 way tie!

As I'm in the process of writing a new chapter on the Magician's Touch, I'll let this one run on until Friday.

Smile

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