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Chinaren
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| Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 6:40 am Post subject: Avarice Chapter 5 - Ankles! |
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Lilith
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| Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 11:45 am Post subject: |
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How about he uses the dead guard's clothes as a disguise? And then he hides the body somewhere in the tent where it won't be found for a little while. And then he goes out acting and looking like a guard, with his prizes hidden of course.. and when no one's looking.. he slips away.
Well written, China! Bravo! :D |
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| Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 12:03 pm Post subject: |
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F5 lil. I think it is best to go under cover of an gaurd then or someone ells important. Andchina I was around, but was to frightened if you would want any fables...
*looks about a dark corner her eyes unsure what to do*
Well It is great. I loved the begining of the child rejecting her father... :-o sorry but it resembles real life. |
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D-Lotus
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Nice avatar...lily....
Umm, f5 I guess.
One thing, though. This story has elements of the spiritual. Like, the shades, and...well, the whole story is spiritual, if you think of it. The concept is similar to Waterworld, which was also a spiritual film deep down. Umm, well, just pointing it out... :) |
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joyfull22
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| Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 2:08 pm Post subject: |
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Wow, just caught up, great story Chinaren!
For the DP, I F5, though his priorities should be in finding the books and any other interesting items he can find.
Keep up the good work! |
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OldJoe
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| Posted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 4:07 pm Post subject: |
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Ahv just caught up with this 'un Chinaren. A right gritty tale.
Ah say yer find the books, hide the body and start a fire as a distraction. Then hightale it outa there. Yup. |
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Chinaren
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| Poll is up. Exorcise the spirit of voting. |
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CunningFox
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| i went for th efire. I think it will be more chaotic. :lol: |
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| I'm going for the fire too. In a toss-up between chaos and order, I would invariably choose chaos at the moment, and I believe that the fire will have a greater effect anyway. Posing as a guard is way too risky. And before you ask, yes, I did read the chapter before I posted... It's OK, I guess. Maybe. *grins* Lastly... wondrous pun, chinaren, a true stroke of genius. *bows to him mockingly* |
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Chinaren
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| Posted: Thu May 03, 2007 2:25 am Post subject: |
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So, split this one off, but the poll was left behind in what is now Chapter 1.
The winner was:
Find the loot. Start a fire and escape in the ensuing chaos.
The next chapter is coming as soon as I get a shot of Insparatium. :shock: |
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Chinaren
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| Posted: Mon May 07, 2007 2:00 am Post subject: |
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| The next chapter is finally done, so locking down this thread. |
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