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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2004 2:34 pm    Post subject: Chapter 2 - The wizards and your mother.  

What has happened earlier:
You, Thadius LaFontania, the newly crowned king of vampiric kind, left your palace after three assination attempts. Your father was the first victim. Your friends, Mack, the swordsman, and Mary, the chemist, followed you out of the city. After a small disscussion, you decided that the wizards would be a good place to start...

You look up at the tall, dark blue tower that is the stronghold of the wizards. You turn around to look at your friends and are about to say, "Well, here we are," when suddenly an inhuman scream comes from the tower. Mack says, "That wasn't good."
"Nope, I don't think so." Mary says.
"Well, there's no other choice now. We have to go in there," you say.
You turn back to the tower. As you walk up to it, you notice a huge doorbell. Naturally, you push it. DING-DONG-RING-GONG, and a wizard opens the door almost instantly. He bows low to you, and says, "Ah, Thadius, we were expecting you. Please, do come in. I will inform the king of where you are."
The moment you enter, you sense something wrong with the place. You say in reply, "Thank you. I was hoping I could maybe have a tour?"
"Certianly! I will send someone to give you the tour."
As he leaves, another enters. This place seems to be full to the brim of wizards, and none of them will leave you alone. This one says, "I understand you wanted a tour?"
You reply, "Yes, may we begin?"
In response, he opens a door which leads to a library. He then says, "This library contains all of our most precious books."
Suddenly, your amulet, the one your mother gave you, flashes red. At the same time, the wizard's face is covered with red flame, which spells the word LIE. You look at your friends, who seem to take no notice. The wizard, apperently unharmed, continues with his rant. "They contain the schematics for our tower, and many secrets, which are yet to be translated, much less understood."
Mack slides up to you and says, "This feels wrong to me."
"What, a trap?"
"No, illusion."
The amulet flashes bright red, and the room dissloves, to be replaced by a room with fifty or more wizards, and a pentagram. Worse yet, you are in the middle of it, with your friends!
The head wizard, the one with the most robes on him, grins, and says, "Yes, you will be our next test subject!"
Test subject? Then you recall the scream. So that's what they plan to do! A sudden fit comes over you, and before they can close the pentagram, you fly to the head wizard's face. As you close your hands on his throat, he says, "Ah, like your father."
You stare puzzled at him. He, seeing this, continues. "Your father was our king, but he retained the title for only a year after he was converted. The law, you know. The title went to me, his advisor."
So, instead of granting him the gift of vampirism, you knock him unconcious instead. Mack, recovered from his initial shock, draws his swords and makes heads roll. Mary throws her explosive liquids. Soon, more wizards come in, and you are forced to retreat. Suddenly, you come to your senses, and find yourself in the woods. As you collapse, you see an elfin figure. You manage to gasp out, "Elshinger..I'm her son...Thadius....take me to her....."
Then everything goes black as darkness claims your mind.

The next thing you remember is that your mind is fragmented into four pieces, each one boldly naming itself. One says Human, another Vampire, yet another Wizard, and the last Druid. Your only control is on the soul level.
You waken, and find yourself in a hospital bed. Your mother is watching over you. She smiles and says, "I think our healing was a bit too complete."
After that, the days become a blur. You chatch up on everything since your leaving her. One day, you mention that you have to get back, and your mother takes her pendant. She says, "Watch."
Suddenly, the small crystal flashes, and you see your palace overrun by rebels. You hear her say, "They have been decived by the wizards. They think you dead. You must prove yourself to be my son, the son of the queen of humans and druids alike."
She continues, "You realize that the world is half land and water. Well, the five lakes suggested that there were five islands out in the ocean. I looked with my magic, and I found that not only were the islands there, but on them, well, the artifacts!"
You are stunned. She continues. "Because of your blood, you can use all of the ones for the races...but you have a great trial ahead of you. You must prove yourself to the races! You are the literal prince of the world, and king of half of it by right!"
Your mother suddenly gasps, maybe because of the arrow in her chest. She looks at you. "Now you are king of all of it." She collapses.
"NO!!" you scream. You yell, "MEDIC!" while switching over to the druid part of you. You try to heal her, but it is too late. Now you are faced with a choice, but not really a choice. You must prove yourself.
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2004 7:57 pm    Post subject:  

Okay you jumped around a lot, could you please explain what happened? All I got was you saw the wizards, were attacked healed by your mother, you have to get the artifacts, and she suddenly is just shot. That may sound like all of it but I don't get it.
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Posted: Sun Jun 06, 2004 10:10 pm    Post subject: arrow  

where did the shootie bit come from?
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 1:50 pm    Post subject:  

Yeah.
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 2:09 pm    Post subject: Apology  

Sorry for that! Let me try again...
The whole palace thing was a fraud made by the wizards, they tried to imprison Thadius so he would have to serve them. They know something about him that he don't know! Also, like the wizards can't do mind control on an elf. You see, the elves and druids are often mistaken for each other, the only difference being the elves are masters with the bows, the druids can use magic.
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 3:44 pm    Post subject:  

Okay but where are his friends and where did the arrow come from?
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 4:26 pm    Post subject:  

yeah, if the elves are masters of archery, could have possibly been a renegade elf :?: or an elf under wizard control? please make a post to clarify
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 6:59 pm    Post subject: Re: Apology  

Idea master wrote: Sorry for that! Let me try again...
The whole palace thing was a fraud made by the wizards, they tried to imprison Thadius so he would have to serve them. They know something about him that he don't know! Also, like the wizards can't do mind control on an elf. You see, the elves and druids are often mistaken for each other, the only difference being the elves are masters with the bows, the druids can use magic.

I think I understand what you're trying to say. The wizards put up an illusion in hopes of making Thadius their puppet kint? Is that what you're trying to say? Or were they really going to kill him? Thats what I got from reading the second chapter. And I don't understand by the suddent death of his mother. Is she elven or a druid? Or both? Confused. Besides my confusion, I would like to compliment you on a job well done. I like how you were able to incoporate the seeing the wizards and visiting your mother (despite the way he visited her) in to a nice story. It was a bit shocking to have the mother killed on the first day. Keep up the good work!
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Posted: Mon Jun 07, 2004 7:52 pm    Post subject: a thought  

I think that I sort of understand. So what are our options to obtain the rest of the artifacts and prove that I am the King of Druids/ humans. However Druids are human, but it's a religion...... :lol: :lol: :lol:
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2004 9:10 am    Post subject:  

Okay, somebody starts to get the idea! The wizards were hoping to gain control of the vamps thru Thadius, so they lured him away in hopes of possesing him. The elves and druids live in harmony in the forest, with Thadius' mom ruling over the druids. The wizards knew something about Thadius which will be revealed in due time. Now, if his mom and dad had lived, they could testify that Thadius was their son and all would be well. However, his dad died, so he could still have his mom testify, and only have to gain a few artifacts, so as to prove his mixed blood. However, I realized that the story would be too short that way, so his mom had to die. Of course, the wizards still had a grudge, so they killed her indirectly. I may have missed a few points...
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2004 9:13 am    Post subject:  

Ah, yes I did. Well, Thadius still has Mary and Mack with him, so a blood test is always an option. And before anyone gets any ideas...Yes, it's possible to have a vampiric kid! One or more parents must be vampiric, but everything about a vamp changes, including...yeah. So it's rare. I'll be back.
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2004 6:44 pm    Post subject:  

Thanks for clearing everything up. Now I understand the story so far. :D :D :D
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Posted: Tue Jun 08, 2004 11:07 pm    Post subject:  

I like this story. It's original. With the four races and each one having an artifact -- very clever.
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Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2004 4:25 am    Post subject:  

:lol: hi i just signed up
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Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2004 10:32 am    Post subject:  

This is a very good story that you have created in your mind,
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Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2004 2:34 pm    Post subject:  

This story sounds very good, but confusing... Keep it up. This will be a novel someday im sure. :wink: :roll:
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Posted: Wed Jun 09, 2004 7:59 pm    Post subject:  

I like the story, but the artifacts are being rushed in. I don't understand why he needs to prove why he is the king of everything, and how did someone shoot his mother when he was there and in the palace with a bunch of gaurds and shes the queen . Another thing i wonderded about was, where were thadius's freinds the entire time 8) .
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Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2004 6:44 am    Post subject:  

I like it. Me being an Author and all, it's really great! I love the story, but you could put more detail in it. Make it more understandable for others. But other than that, it is really good. Keep up the good work and one day you could become famous! :wink:
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Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2004 10:13 am    Post subject:  

Anonymous wrote: I like the story, but the artifacts are being rushed in. I don't understand why he needs to prove why he is the king of everything, and how did someone shoot his mother when he was there and in the palace with a bunch of gaurds and shes the queen . Another thing i wonderded about was, where were thadius's freinds the entire time 8) .

I don't think the artifacts are being rushed in. IMO its perfect timing. His mother was murdered, and his father is dead. He needs something to avenge his father's death. And as for the death of the mother, it could happened anywhere in the palace, in the courtyard or something. She didn't have to be talking to her son inside. And besides all kings and queens have spies in their household. But I agree with you on Thadius' friends whereabouts. Just a suggestion, try to include them more in the story, so the readers don't wonder where the hell they are. 8)
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Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2004 1:03 pm    Post subject:  

Quote: His mother was murdered, and his father is dead. He needs something to avenge his father's death.

He also needs to avenge his Mother...
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Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2004 6:13 pm    Post subject:  

*Sigh* I leave you all alone for a few days, and this is what happens...
Not that it's bad! Great ideas! Now, about Thadius' friends...
As of right NOW, he doesn't have them, they all split up after the tower.
I'll get them back in there....
And some people are right, he does need to avenge his mom, but he also has those rebles at the palace to take care of.
Another thing...
READ THE *%*$* BACKGROUND!
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Posted: Thu Jun 10, 2004 7:44 pm    Post subject:  

Good to see that u are back.. i was gettin worried.... :lol: :lol: :lol:
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Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2004 2:51 pm    Post subject: Last call!  

Notice: New chapter is going up tomorrow! Get your ideas in!
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Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2004 3:21 pm    Post subject:  

WAR! Big war like in Lord Of The Rings! Those who submit to our hero because of the law v.s. those who dont(Bad Nasty Wizards)!
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Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2004 3:39 pm    Post subject:  

never mind... lol the post i was refering to got deleted. :D :D :D
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Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2004 6:23 pm    Post subject:  

Vamp wrote: Quote: His mother was murdered, and his father is dead. He needs something to avenge his father's death.

He also needs to avenge his Mother...

Good point. I meant to say that, but am glad that someone caught what I meant to say. :D :D :D
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Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2004 6:28 pm    Post subject:  

heh :P :P no problem
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Posted: Fri Jun 11, 2004 6:42 pm    Post subject:  

srry..... that above post is me... i just forgot to login. :D :D :D
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 8:00 am    Post subject:  

Um, the next chapter might be delayed a bit...
Still working it out...
Don't worry! If not today, then very soon.
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 8:11 am    Post subject:  

Hey I love your story. :D
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 10:03 am    Post subject: hmmmmm  

i like this so far....sounds goood but ........i wanna seee more talking befor battle between persons you know one of those bulid up the suspince things ...if you would do that i would love you and anything you wanned i would do........
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 12:10 pm    Post subject:  

It would probably be a good idea to explain things a little bit more
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 2:22 pm    Post subject:  

:? :? :? We've all said that...... (old news)
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 3:39 pm    Post subject:  

MORE STORY! MORE MORE MORE I SAY!!!!! :evil:
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 3:45 pm    Post subject:  

i agree! MORE! MORE! MORE! lol :P :P :P
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 3:46 pm    Post subject:  

UGH! doing that is embarassing... i forgot to login again im the guest chanting more! more! more!... :oops: :oops: :oops:
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Posted: Sat Jun 12, 2004 4:02 pm    Post subject:  

Okay, okay! I've got it ready. Forum..is...LOCKED.
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