City of IF

[D-Lotus]

As always, read the chapter before this and decide what Kihachi should do or what you think he would do based on his actions and personality by voting in this poll. And please click the submit button, because saxon did not do that once :wink: . Oh yeah, the last two options are somewhat alike, but they are completely different. Also, I think when I was telling the story of Lord Date, I told his story almost until his death, but I was only supposed to tell until his battle in Osaka. But then he won't be on his death bed.... but I could just say it was a sickness he later recovered from and they thought was deadly. Yeah, I'll go and edit it right now.

[saxon215]

well i definately pressed it then, i'd go for the last option

[Ravenwing]

I too go for the last choice, along with Saxon. It seems like a reasonable option. His sole purpose was to gather samurai to save his village, and that should be his priority. Thats what I think.

[D-Lotus]

Hmmm... 3 for accept. Remember, this father of yourd has made you a peasant, and now he wants you back to satisfy his petty wishes? Well, on the other hand, he is on his death bed (or so he thinks, for he will get better and live about ten years more).

[Smee]

Thanks for the PM, but I've already voted.

I'd change my vote in light of the new information about his dad probably living for another 10 years, but Kihachi doesn't know that, so I'll stick with it.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Happy Writing. :)

[saxon215]

hahahaha i dont thnk you were ment to blurt that out smee

[s1lents0ul]

i voted to delay the answer until he saves his village.

[Smee]

Blurt out what Sax?

[Random]

I voted the Accept but wait option as well. It just makes more sense for story continuity. Regardless of where your father left you, if there is a reasonable chance you can get out of the gloom of peasantry and make something of yourself, I believe Kihachi would take it. But not by dumping his responsibilities. Take care of the village then you can make the trek.

[Reiso]

Getting to it so late in the game I would only end up repeating what others have said. I am always surprised when I read this story D, you keep turning different corners with your style.

I voted for the last option as well.

[saxon215]

probably just finding a style that suits him

[D-Lotus]

Well, guess I'm not sure what I'm comfortable with. I don't like the you thing, but I started in the first chapter, so I have to continue. Next chapter is half way done thanks to your votes, thank you. Oh and Smee, don't worry about the PM thing, everybody knows I like to do my propaganda. :wink:

[Ravenwing]

Don't worry I don't like the second person perspective writing. For me, at least when writing my own stories, it has to be first or third-perspectives.

[D-Lotus]

you'll find that the next chapter will have less of that "you" crap. Wait, doesn't Keavney do it with you?

[Reiso]

I know for myself that using the 'I' perspective (which I think is first person, though I could see why someone might call it second person too . . . I don't honestly remember, how embarrassing that is), is what is most comfortable for me. I just imagine that I am the character and walk myself through events . . . then I just explain what happened to 'me'.

It probably comes from gaming half my life. That perspective just seems the most natural to me.

[saxon215]

im with you on that one Reiso, I is good

[Ravenwing]

Much prefer third-person. Why else would my story be in that perspective?

[D-Lotus]

When I use the 'you' I kinda describe it like an 'I'. But my favorite is third person. More detail, and clearer.

[saxon215]

no way a story is far more emotive in first person

[Ravenwing]

True, but what if you want to avoid the emotional parts?

[saxon215]

without emotion it really isent a story, emotion dictates a story and involves the reader within it, adds to the description and fleshes things out, without emotion thing are but stated facts
despite what we believe 99% of the time humans are ruld by emotion like this extract from the OC
it doesent matter what he knows its what he feels now

[Ravenwing]

Alright, maybe you're right on that point. But it depends on the author on how much they want to express emotion in the character because sometimes emotion will reveal too much sometimes.

[InsaneCP]

i think he should accept after saving his village it does make a story longer [and longer is better :lol:]

[D-Lotus]

Hey insaneCP, I;m happy your enjoying my story. Did you read al the chapters, or just this one?
Third person can describe emotion just as well as first person can. That's all I'll say.

[Ravenwing]

I see you don't want to get in between the argument between Saxon and I. Good choice.

[D-Lotus]

Yup. Well, Only five to six paragraphs left to write.

[saxon215]

thats like saying a narator can act with as muchexpression and emotion as a character, they dont, and if they do they arent ment to they only describe things that are happening the character actors use emotion

[Ravenwing]

I heard that some authors treat their characters as normal human beings. Meaning that if the character does not want to reveal something, the author does not reveal anything. I find it interesting that some authors like to converse with their characters as if they were real people. Thats how I interact with my characters.

[D-Lotus]

Dude, it's almost exactly the same, except you change he for I. True, you might be able to express a little more emotion, but you can only notice if the writer is an expert. And anyway, did you see any really good author using I? Not many.

[saxon215]

i admit you both have points but when i am my character i converse with all my oother characters through him and i feel it gives the character real personality because its part of me

[Ravenwing]

D was that last post in response to my post above? Just trying to get this whole conversation straight.

[saxon215]

or is it maybe because your bored? hmmm?

[D-Lotus]

I was answering sax.

[Ravenwing]

Ah, just wondering thats all.

[D-Lotus]

Hey Rave, in about 15 minutes I'm gonna post the new chapter, so maybe you wanna stay around?