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| Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2005 1:50 am Post subject: Elves do it.. |
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| Shady Stoat wrote: | | As for the elf... it depends on how snooty the elves are in this world. Would Narg be likely to... ahem... get his reward for rescuing her? Or is she more likely to look down her perfect elven nose at him? |
Oh yes, Narg doesn't work for charity! He will be 'suitably' rewarded!  hehe. 
I have added the poll now Smee has removed the last one. Votes appreciated!
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| Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2005 4:26 pm Post subject: Oh yeah! |
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Its gotta be rescue teh elf man! oh yeh. I like this story. 
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oh yeah! He must be "rewarded"......I hope liddle kids don't read this story...he he he*cough*heh heh heh!
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| Posted: Wed Oct 12, 2005 10:33 pm Post subject: Keep on voting! |
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I don't know, you lot. Show a bit of leg and you are all chaffing at the bit! Disgusting!  Hehe.
Thanks for your votes, and everyone - please keep voting for Narg as Storygame for October!
I am be away on business for a week from tomorrow, but I will try and look in at odd intervals anyway.
Keep good people!
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| Posted: Thu Oct 13, 2005 2:06 am Post subject: Re: Keep on voting! |
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| chinaren wrote: | I don't know, you lot. Show a bit of leg and you are all chaffing at the bit! Disgusting! Hehe.
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Actually, I think you were showing us a bit of shoulder, neck and head, Chinaren! Surely the legs are well sunk by now? 
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Hey Chinaren,
I managed to read all but the latest chapter on my lunchbreak today. I'll finish off and join in very soon.
Until then,
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| Posted: Thu Oct 13, 2005 7:08 am Post subject: Welcome! |
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Hi Smee! Hope you enjoy the story. Comments from the mod always welcome!
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Hey Chinaren ,
As promised, a comment
Now are you sure you want this...
Only kidding. The story is very good. The hero is fantastic for his honesty, and the storyline is progressing nicely.
Your decision points have been pretty good - the hardest thing to do well - and I made it from the beginning to the end in one go (or would have been if my lunch break was longer) - 13 pages - excellent.
A few typos sprinkled around the chapters, but certainly not a major problem in that amount of writing.
As for what happens next:
It isn't time for finishing the necromancer yet, go save the buxom beauty and rally to fight another day, with maybe a new team, and night buddy.
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If he crashes after the necromancer he'll probably get a faceful of nasty magic, and the enemy of his enemy is his friend, so I voted rescue the girl.
Oh and if he's not in a philosophical mood, he should rescue her to get laid.
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| Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2005 7:40 pm Post subject: Phillysofikal |
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I don't think Narg is ever in a philosophical mood! Thanks for the vote Duke.
It looks like option one will be a clear winner, so I think I will start writing the next chapter. I am in Beijing (sat in an internet cafe at the moment, surrounded by people smoking and playing online games, cough) so it will be next week sometime before I can post.
I have had a couple more plot ideas too, so things should be warming up nicely for our hero soon. Watch this space!
In the meantime, comments about the story are always welcome, and don't forget to vote for Narg as SGotM! It is in the lead at the moment, but it isn't over until the fat dwarf is guttted, as the old saying goes. 
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| is killing the necromancer and then go have a little necrofilia fun an option?, well if its not then i would say save that god damn elf, she might be useful and if nothing else she probably will be a good lay.
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| Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 1:24 am Post subject: Chapter 7 forthcoming! |
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If you vote for Narg for SGotM then you will get a free cameo appearance in the story!
I have done chapter 7, but I can't transfer it here yet. However, I can reveal a couple of lines as 'teasers'...
...'Gorgus was crouched over the prone body of Shogun'...
...'her hand moved down, undoing fastenings as it went'...
...'the mace hit squarely on the back with a resounding crack'...
Remember! Watch this space for episode 7!!!
..and don't forget to vote for Narg!!
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| Posted: Wed Oct 19, 2005 9:20 am Post subject: Re: Chapter 7 forthcoming! |
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| Not logged on Chinaren wrote: | | If you vote for Narg for SGotM then you will get a free cameo appearance in the story! |
Ok! Though I think I'll leave it a few days in case someone comes up with a better offer.
The teasers sound cool too. Of course, you add the one with the female elf *ahem* showing her appreciation for being rescued (tres cunning, will probably attract some certain people in the hope of something nearing free porn).
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| Posted: Sat Oct 22, 2005 11:25 pm Post subject: Episode 7 nears... |
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I should be in a position to put up the next chapter later today or tomorrow.
In the meantime, please vote in the poll for SGotM. Narg is not winning, and he is looking very angry!
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Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice......I suggest you follow the creature, it may be controlled and it might lead you to it's master.
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Good chapter again Chinaren
I'd day leave the elf and carry on after the Necromancer.
1) you can't hurt this thing which carried the elf off. You've already proved that.
2) Narg's already had his reward, where's the profit in following? He doesn't seem like the kind to hang onto a lover for more than... say... 24hours 
Let's get back to the job we were paid to do
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well, thats a very good story! took me a longgg time to read it but worth every cent!
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| Posted: Mon Oct 24, 2005 3:12 am Post subject: Choices |
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Thanks for the comments all. This is a close one! I must say, for some reason I thought option 2 would be the choice here. Anyway, that is what the votes are for!
Welcome Old Joe, thanks for reading! Now, if you like the story, please help me beat old Stoaty (great guy that he is an all ) and vote for Narg in Story Game of the Month! Follow the link below!
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| Posted: Mon Oct 24, 2005 3:23 am Post subject: Re: Choices |
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Welcome Old Joe, thanks for reading! Now, if you like the story, please help me beat old Stoaty (great guy that he is an all ) and vote for Narg in Story Game of the Month! Follow the link below! |
*grins* well, actually old stoaty's a great GAL, and everyone knows you should never mention a woman's age - OLD stoaty indeed, humph!
But good luck in the competition - and watch out for sneaky stoat attacks from the flank
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| Posted: Mon Oct 24, 2005 3:43 am Post subject: Ooops |
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Oops,  <removes foot from mouth> I am not doing well by you am I Ms.Stoat. First the 'Bob' incident, now the wrong gender debacle.
Really, many apologies!
And of course, good luck to yourself as well. Your stories are really good, I will certainly vote for them when you try again next month. 
<returns to dark corner and resumes sticking pins into small doll, now slightly amended in certain key areas>
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| chinaren wrote: | Oops, <removes foot from mouth> I am not doing well by you am I Ms.Stoat. First the 'Bob' incident, now the wrong gender debacle.
Really, many apologies!
And of course, good luck to yourself as well. Your stories are really good, I will certainly vote for them when you try again next month.
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ROFL! Ouch! Stop doing that... or at least stick them somewhere interesting if you have to keep doing it ;P
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| Posted: Tue Oct 25, 2005 4:14 pm Post subject: okay |
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I am in a writing mood just now, an I have had quite a few new ideas for this story, so I will give this a little longer and then start the next chapter.
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| Posted: Wed Oct 26, 2005 9:23 am Post subject: |
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This chapter slipped me by, (as have quite a few recently) but I've caught up once again.
Great chapter, fast flowing and entertaining.
One tiny thing that lept out at me whilst reading:
| Quote: | “We are after a necromancer…” Started Narg, but was interrupted as Serime pointed at something.
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Shouldn't this be 'the' necromancer. After all Serime has seen, and been defeated by him? But I may be misunderstanding.
As for the young lady herself, Serime seems rather randy for an elf, but still fun to read. :biggrin:
For the chapter:
As Stoat so eloquently put it -
| Quote: | | Narg's already had his reward, where's the profit in following? |
Stay on misson.
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*laughs* brains of puppy. Yum!
I say head up the staircase. Everybody knows the necromancer is going to be in the highest room, in the tallest tower...
...wait... did I get that bit wrong? Ah well, go for it anyway.
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Option 4 is missing off the poll. I will PM Smee, in the meantime don't forget option 4...
4. Wait for whatever is coming down the hallway.
(If you vote for this option, say what you would like to see come down the hallway!)
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Hey Chinaren, it's me (you know who). Good story. I will check out the other links if my connection doesnt die on me.
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Cunning Fox, otherwise known as Shady Stoat...big mystery....but you had me fooled for a seconed(I read lots of mystery books but stink at writing them).
I haven't decided were to go yet though Chinaren.....
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K!I voted to face whatever is coming!
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You should be studying!
Anyway, CunningFox isn't Shady, but a friend of mine.
Any ideas on creatures to come down the corridor? Suggestions welcome!
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hey! I am not a Stoat! I am a slinky fox.
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.....oops is all I can say. Sorry "Slinky"! Chinaren, Iv'e always wondered this:
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YES WHAT?HMMMMMM....I'M THINKIN'......HE/SHE? YES...WELL....I DON'T THINK I SHOULD TALK TO YOU ANYMORE...*SLOWLY SKOOTS AWAY* LOL!
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He he.
I choose option C number 1. 'He'.
Stands in a heroic stance wind blowing his long locks behind him, muscles rippling...
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Smee
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| Posted: Sat Oct 29, 2005 12:19 am Post subject: |
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Yet another good chapter
And a welcome to the Slinky Fox - turning into a zoo around here
Happy Writing.
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| Posted: Sat Oct 29, 2005 6:22 am Post subject: |
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| rofl, i think shogun was right to back away
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