|
|
|
|
|
Author |
Message |
The White Blacksmith Elder
Joined: 02 Apr 2006 Topics: 15 Posts: 2629
Items Legends
Fables
Strata-gems
|
Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 12:34 am Post subject: |
|
|
WE WANT A SEQUEL! WE WANT A SEQUEL!
_________________
Tea Cures All.
|
|
Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Author |
Message |
Shady Stoat Elder
Joined: 02 Oct 2005 Topics: 76 Posts: 2950 Location: England Items Legends
Fables
Strata-gems
|
Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 12:35 am Post subject: |
|
|
Ovrlndnsea wrote: | I suppose that the Stoat wants more Fables from our replies. |
Hey! I'll have you know I paid good fables for gloating rights until the end of the month. I'm determined to get my full money's worth!
*gloats*
|
|
Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Author |
Message |
Chinaren Hallowed IFian
Joined: 05 Sep 2005 Topics: 340 Posts: 8881 Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com Items Legends
Fables
Strata-gems
|
Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 12:49 am Post subject: |
|
|
Shady Stoat wrote: | Ovrlndnsea wrote: | I suppose that the Stoat wants more Fables from our replies. |
Hey! I'll have you know I paid good fables for gloating rights until the end of the month. I'm determined to get my full money's worth!
*gloats* |
Haha! Good point! _________________ Neil Hartley Books.
My Amazon page.
|
|
Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Author |
Message |
Ovrlndnsea Guest
Items
|
Posted: Fri Apr 21, 2006 6:04 am Post subject: |
|
|
chinaren wrote: | Ovrlndnsea wrote: | I suppose that the Stoat wants more Fables from our replies. |
I doubt our Stoat would do that.
It's nice to leave a SG open for a while, so we can all beg for a sequel, which I can't help noticing, hasn't started yet. |
It was a joke...
|
|
Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Author |
Message |
D-Lotus Venerable IFian
Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Topics: 103 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends
Fables
Strata-gems
|
Posted: Sat Apr 22, 2006 7:09 pm Post subject: |
|
|
Congratulations! I just caught up, and I must say this was a great achievement, one you should remember for the rest of your life (unless you become a famous author).
Anyway, Good job. _________________ Chapter 5: The Rendezvous
|
|
Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Author |
Message |
Solomon Birch Honored Citizen
Joined: 22 Nov 2005 Topics: 18 Posts: 1562 Location: England..... but Japan beckons..... Items Legends
Fables
Strata-gems
|
Posted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 10:26 am Post subject: |
|
|
*does a dance while no one is looking.
Then strips naked and runs all over limbo*
Ahem.... _________________ "Humankind cannot stand too much reality" - T.S. Elliot
Thesopholis - A Noir Sci-Fi Story - Chapter 8 is up! Read it here
The End of the Voyage - Chapter 9
Shady the Furry Goblin! [Demon's, Satan and Slobadan Milosevic!] - Chapter 3
The Quest for the Legendary Rubber-Duckie! - Chapter 3
One Last Bullet.... Chapter 3
Green Eyes - Chapter 5
|
|
Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Author |
Message |
Ravagerrr Guest
Items
|
Posted: Wed Apr 26, 2006 7:24 pm Post subject: |
|
|
PUBLISH THIS!
In our modern day there have been relatively few 'fairy tales' told anew. This was very much like Shrek in the fact that the world of 'fairy tales' was displayed altogether, as if all the characters ever to be imagined were to be found in one home, limbo. This drawing upon the rich history of many various fanciful stories, in conjunction with a healthy dose of creativity, has produced a story which could be a classic, not just on IF (where this story is and will forever be a shining example of the best of all Storygames).
A few notes as to why I felt this story was so darned good. First, it presented us with decision points which were so open ended, it inspired all of its players to get really creative(I am so mad I missed them). I mean, it dealt with how to deliver wishes... how cool is that?
The second was the inverse and tricky nature of the character's intentions. She was trying to grant these wishes in a way that would get her fired but not demoted... difficult at best.
Third, the supporting characters were awesome. Chuzzle is VERY memorable.
Fourth, you never really knew what was going to come next.
Fifth, the humor was delivered perfectly. Great one liners combined with a humorous plot all around to create a very solid comedy. Perhaps this could be adapted to a theatrical script?
The only complaint I WOULD have had if I were a player, would be the length of the chapters. I realize the reason for this, but it seemed to me that a sequel should consider using more variety in the decision points to break up the chapters a bit more. It's easier for the reader to pick up on shorter chapters. I would have caught on to this earlier, and have been able to participate, if the chap length hadn't been so daunting.
Still, this was a masterpiece! I came here to sample your writing Stoat, only to find that it is some of the best stuff I've ever read. I know I've said that about a few IFians, but wow, you're literary sword is sharp and you have real potential in the world of publishing. IF authors like you, Stoat, are amazing me more and more with every story I read.
Kudos!
|
|
Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
Author |
Message |
Shady Stoat Elder
Joined: 02 Oct 2005 Topics: 76 Posts: 2950 Location: England Items Legends
Fables
Strata-gems
|
Posted: Sun Apr 30, 2006 4:14 am Post subject: |
|
|
Thanks for the awesome responses everybody. I'm locking down this topic now. Elladora will get some much needed rest...
...until the adventures start anew at some point
|
|
Back to top |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
You cannot post new topics in this forum You cannot reply to topics in this forum You cannot edit your posts in this forum You cannot delete your posts in this forum You cannot vote in polls in this forum
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|