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Woo - a new chapter. 
However - it's just clicked over to 1:11 am and it's time I found a bed. I'll tackle this in the morning.
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| Quote: | | Beck seemed to grunt a bit while offering a head nod, but Mack doubted his sincerity. Mack nodded cautiously in return, fumbling to say, "Nice <breath in>, <breath out>, to meet you... <breath in>, <breath out>, Beck" |
Isn't this meant to be Mack talking? So why is he speaking like Beck?
And I'd say that going to bed would be fine if he's tired. Currently he's crippled, and has just learnt more in one day than pretty much the rest of his life. Also given his recent inactivity, this is going to take a lot more out of him than it would a healthy person, so taking a break doesn't seem too bad.
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Thanks for the tip Lordy... ack... ok fixed that...
As for the DP... sorry it's so much like the previous ones, but just as in life, the same things seem to come up again and again... besides, there's so much to explain here that I wanted to break up the chapters... don't like makin em too long.
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| Posted: Sat Apr 22, 2006 4:42 pm Post subject: |
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Yes, me too. Great to have a new chapter, but it's too late. Time for sleeping.
*holds breath and dozes off* 
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| Posted: Sat Apr 22, 2006 11:28 pm Post subject: |
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Very good. I like the way you're tying all your history and science together. Makes for a very believable background.
However, as Lordy said, there's no shame in being tired. Go take a break and resume in the morning.
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| Posted: Sun Apr 23, 2006 12:29 am Post subject: |
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Good stuff Rav-man. Very vivid.
I have to agree with the others. Let's get some shuteye and carry on in the morning.
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| Quote: | | turkey sandwich and a couple sodas. |
Missing an of in the above I think Rav.
Nice chapter, once again. The science stuff is pretty deep, and I don't feel brainy enough to follow it just now, but it sounded impressive!
For the DP. Rest why not if Sid wants to. No harm in that.
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The others have already voice my opinion. Mack should sleep on the stuff he has learned before making any major decision yet.
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Great stuff Rav!
But the monoatomic gold stuff was a bit far fetched don't you think?
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*shrugs* Seems to make sense after reading that article Rav linked to.
From Libaray of Halexandria on Monotomic Elements:
A case in point is Gold. Normally a yellow metal with a precise electrical conductivity and other metallic characteristics, the metallic nature of gold begins to change as the individual gold atoms form chemical combinations of increasingly small numbers. At a microcluster stage, there might be 13 atoms of gold in a single combination. Then, dramatically, at the monoatomic state, gold becomes a forest green color, with a distinctly different chemistry. It’s electrical conductivity goes to zero even as its potential for Superconductivity becomes maximized. Monoatomic gold can exhibit substantial variations in weight, as if it were no longer fully extant in space-time.
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Screw far-fetched! He has a goatman! Who cares if it's far-fetched! 
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Now that is something we should discuss in the Cryptids Guild. Goat people.
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I doubt that he could sleep, with the impact and excitement of everything he's just been told. He should finish the tour first, then perhaps if he still can't rest he'll know more about who he'd like to talk to alone...outside the controlled tour. This way he could get answers to his questions without seeming to question orders or duty.
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| Posted: Tue Apr 25, 2006 4:23 am Post subject: |
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How about all of them?
Hm, I didn't vote, but it looks like the poll is closed. If Rav wants to consider my ballot, I am casting it for the first option about the Pills.
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The poll that is showing is still for the last chapter... Sorry... Am I cycling too fast through the chapters?
Actually... far fetched though it may sound, I provided the link for that reason. I've developed this story through research into very real possible sciences and 'conspiracy' theories that better researched individuals than I have proposed. I don't understand everything about Monoatomic Gold, the Annunaki, or the Sumerians, but the theory as an overview is backed up more impressively than one would think at first glance. I can give more references for those who are interested.
Now that I've established the background I can start driving the plot a bit more. I thank you all for your patience.
By the way... if you feel this is far fetched, strap in for the ride I've got a lot more outskirts theories to throw into this 'modern' world of Mack's! I challenge my readers to look into everything I suggest and will continue to put more links in when appropriate. I feel there is a lot that our governments aren't telling us and I'm writing Pillbox to suggest to you the things I've encountered in my research. Besides, this should end up being a pretty fun action story as well...
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To avoid confusion about the poll, I generally get it deleted as soon as I start the next chapter, because I otherwise find that events such as this happen.
By removing the poll people are forced to wait.
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Well then I was one confused member then.
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Poll deleted!
Looking forward to the next chapter! :biggrin:
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Is anyone going to vote? Have I lost my readers? 
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| Post to let us know the polls up. Don't worry, we'll come flocking
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| Posted: Fri Apr 28, 2006 2:33 pm Post subject: |
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yeah - I'd missed it, sorry.
Don't worry - you can't loose* us that easily
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| Smee wrote: | yeah - I'd missed it, sorry.
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I'm all caught up Rav and, btw, are you going to throw the Illuminati in here at a future point in time? They always seem to have their hands mixed up in this sort of stuff...
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| I voted to be healed immediately. NOW
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Voted!
Time for more superness action! :biggrin:
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