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| Quote: | | “There are strange things here.” The shaman finished his work on the Bis’p and stood up. Rubbing is bent back, the old man continued. “I sense greater activity on the other planes that is usual. There is also something… lager.” |
Bit of an alcoholic is he?
I think Smur should go look for Draggon. If nothing else, he can tell them there's another tribe trying to kill them, which should ingrate himself in her good books.
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There's always one isn't there? Thanks Lordy, corrected. Now, any other suggestions? 
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You have me hooked since Chapter 1. LOL. Very nicely done, China. The whole description of Smur and the city itself is just so real-like.
It's obvious that Smur needs help, and even though he left Draggon, I think I agree with Lordy here that he should go seek her assistance in translating the spidery looking text.
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| Look for more artifacts. If they're going to use the stairs and explore each level as they go, they are going to be very tired and out of breath by the time they reach the top. And he is on the 100th level. But 110? Can he go up further and explore? Maybe more useful artifacts or knowledge could be found.
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Hmm, nice.
Well, Smur has the firestick- what is he afraid of?
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| D-Lotus wrote: | Hmm, nice.
Well, Smur has the firestick- what is he afraid of? |
Well, there are several of them, and they could also have firesticks! 
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In that case, try to isolate them before attacking them.
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I WAS IN THE RESTROOM WHEN I THOUGHT OF AN INTERESTING IDEA. | Ravenwing wrote: | | It's obvious that Smur needs help, and even though he left Draggon, I think I agree with Lordy here that he should go seek her assistance in translating the spidery looking text. |
I AGREE, BUT I ALSO AGREE WITH | Crunchyfrog wrote: | | Look for more artifacts. |
AND | D-Lotus wrote: | | In that case try to isolate them before attacking them. |
SOOO, WHY NOT HAVE HIM GO LOOKING FOR DRAGGON, KILLING THE TRIBESMEN ON THE WAY, WHILE COLLECTING ARTIFACTS?
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Hi Fideath, welcome to the story and IF!
If you vote for the last option, it would be a tie again, and I could do just what you said.
This one is next on my 'to do' list, so voting will close soon.
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| Just because I like making things hard for you china, I voted for the last option. May mayhem ensue!
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!?! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ROFL LOL!!!
A TIE!
ON ALL THREE!!!
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