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Nice work! Very pretty descriptions!
A bit careless of our hero (Carver that is) leaving her legs unstrapped though. Ah well, next time...
What next. Well maybe she doesn't escape? Just a thought, and then the Carver gets to finish her off, slowly of course. I do appreciate a good bit of perverse torture! 
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I've finally caught up with this rather disturbing thread...
I believe I've been away for far too long.
Anyway. Hum.
I say she gets free and uses the tool on the carver in such a random fashion that he earns his name!
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| chinaren wrote: |  IM, is your avatar a Magic card? |
Actually, I saw it on a poster in France, and a card in this cool shop.
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No, I just looked for a random avatar one day and kept it ever since. I kinda like it.
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LOL!!
i didnt know it was a poster but its definetly a card in Hocus Pocus. the coolest shop EVER!!! (after greggs of course...ok its equal to greggs and book shops. lol) Anything you buy in there smells of the essence sticks that they use. so i guessed straight away where my christmas pressie was from. lol lol that emoticon looks angry.
anyway.
I finally managed to read it all. andother amazing chapter fauna. *does a little dance* i know who the carver is!lol.
This story would seriously make a good book. As long as nobody read it and got the idea of turning into a film. no wait...if this was a film we would survive it because we already know what happens....but that chavs  .....we'll tell them its.....You've been served or something. lol, i cant even begin to imagine the looks on their faces!!!
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Chp9: Resolution
Carly scooted upwards on the table, until her head stuck out over the edge. That was as far as she could go with her arms bound as they were. Favoring her painfully exposed left shoulder, she curled at the midsection and flipped over the edge of the table, gasping as her right shoulder dislocated with the effort. Panting in fear, she lifted first one side of the table, then the other, slipping her shackled wrists free of the legs.
She stood and turned to run, only to slam headlong into the Carver’s chest. He reached to grip her arms, but not before she had bashed her cuffed wrist into his nose. Blood spurted out from his abused nostrils, but he grabbed Carly and pushed her to the floor.
“Clever, clever girl,” he muttered, crashing his fist into her face. He had suddenly lost the urge for careful work, and decided this one was too much trouble. He’d just skin her quickly and be rid of that hideously wrong brown flesh, make her pay for every insult that she dared to inflict upon him.
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The Recovery Squad retrieved the small craft from its inopportune landing site, reporting the discovery. Evidence suggested that some agent, most likely the pilot of the craft, had recently been at the site salvaging equipment. Trackers were dispatched to recover the pilot of the craft as well, a wanted criminal.
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The Carver continued his work, hanging Carly by her ankles from a support beam. Starting from the edge of his last cut, he opened the skin down her midsection, terminating the line at the base of the pubis. He rolled the epidermal layer as he cut, peeling away her skin as he circled around the left side of her body, leaving the tube of her skin hanging at the small of her back before starting on the other side.
His ribs throbbed dully, but anger made him ignore the hurting. He continued working, and smiled in satisfaction when Carly finally regained consciousness. Her wails were little more than wispy whimpers, agonized cries muted by unbearable pain. He worked tirelessly, mercilessly for many hours. Carly drifted in and out of consciousness, until finally she descended completely into darkness. The Carver removed the skin from her right leg, as Carly drew in her final, shallow breath.
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The Trackers isolated the pilot’s life signature, a distinctively unique being on this populated world. Speeding swiftly across the open landscape towards their target, they monitored the location surrounding the object of retrieval. A failing life signature indicated that the target was not alone at present, but soon would be. A perfect opportunity for an uncomplicated, undetected recovery.
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He briefly considered returning to Tonversit, to the warmth and comfort of Winnow, but changed his mind as he watched Carly’s body swing slightly from the ceiling. He hurt, his blood-encrusted nose ached now as well, and he was tired. The Carver drifted into an uneasy sleep.
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The Trackers found their target sleeping. Recovery was simple. The target was placed in stasis and prepared for transport back to the home world, where he would face trial for his crimes. Evidence of further criminal activity was documented carefully at this location.
The Carver had never expected discovery. The Carver had never anticipated a trial. He mocked the justice system. He sat quietly in his comfortable cell, healed of his physical insults courtesy of society. He didn’t fear what they might do to him, except for maybe inflicting interminable boredom. This people that had birthed a monster like him, for the most part were kind and forgiving.
His sentence astounded even him. He had anticipated an extended stay in a rehabilitative facility, where patient teachers would instruct him in constructive activities and crafts, and shrinks would try to modify the twisted behaviors that had led him to kill. He had planned to cooperate, to bide his time until he had convinced the morons that it was safe to return him to the populace.
Instead he had been sentenced to a new facility, designed for the severely criminal minds that were resistant to rehabilitative efforts. A new system, where the troubled were placed in a suspended state until better rehabilitation could be determined. The Carver was destined for a long sleep.
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Encased in his new home, connected to monitors tied into an artificial intelligence, the Carver drifted into his new realm.
“Welcome,” intoned a soft female voice. “I am Aayii, the Keeper. I will monitor your troubled dreams.”
The Carver smiled in his unnatural sleep, and dreamed of being with her in a field of fragrant blossoms.
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Wow! What can I say?
As unpleasantly realistic as the rest of the story.
Well done and well written Fauna. Congrats on finishing it 
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 Well done for finishing your first storygame.
As Stoat said - a good ending. The loose ends are tied with a cunning intervention.
Happy Writing.
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Bravo, bravo!
I would ask for an encore, but I decided against it...
Considering what you did here, after all...
But a great story nonetheless!
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Woo! I love it!
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Great ending Fauna! Get this story published I say! lol.
  
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| Posted: Thu Jan 05, 2006 8:48 am Post subject: |
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| Congratulations fauna. Nice story... thanks for share it with us...
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eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!
my toes have gone funny and my so has my stomach and my fingers. At least when you skin a sheep you do it when it's dead and then you eat the meant afterwards.
Amazing story fauna!!! like i say when i really like something COOLNESSYDO!!!!!
By the way is his brained being controlled? I just got a bit confused at the end.
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| sparta12 wrote: | Great ending Fauna! Get this story published I say! lol.
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Yeah!! and like (i think) i said before. If they try to turn into a film give it a cunning name and make chavs (and my P.E. teacher) watch it. Then film them running and screaming like little girls while we just sit there and enjoy the film.
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