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Given his knowledge of elfen lore it would seem reasonable of him to head home for some time. Or perhaps summon an elf to his side to aid him in finding a solution. However I also like Lordy's idea of drinking buddies. At the very least let him leave the sewers, the smell offends me. 
He may also use this army I have summoned for him.
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Welcome Zeddy.
Nice work with the Head. I have nothing else to suggest just now, so I f5 the above. 
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Good chapter Jack - enjoying it, although I'd have like to have seen a bit more torture of the Head. If it had made such dark oaths it was unlikely to break them at a threat. Gently hammering a nail slowly up its nose would have got it talking pretty quickly.
As for what to do...
Against such a threat we needs more than a few cutthroats and pickpockets that will as soon stick a knife in our back or run at the first sign of trouble as anything else.
We may not be that heroic, but we need some fellows who are on our side. Some sort of knight/paladin, barbarian, dwarf - whatever. Someone who we can atleast trust as far as we can throw them.
Maybe some church or temple could be approached with this knowledge?
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Alrighty then. We have the poll up.
Where to look for aforementioned brave men to fight by his side?
hmmm... This may be a tough one.
So don't be afraid to use your lifeline and ask a friend (meaning of course that you make them read it too... Hopefully they'll get hooked.  ).
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Ok, maybe I should rephrase, cause I'll probably have him look in just about all of them.
Where will he be successful in finding allies?
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Voted, obviously.
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You obvious people up there - what did you vote for? We know you voted, coz it says under the poll.
If you're gonna post, and run off with 5 fables then at least say (by editting, not posting again ) what you vote for, otherwise it's obviously pointless posting.
I voted for temple.
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| I put in Fighters Guild/Hunting Tavern. It seems a good place for finding seasoned allies, would have gone for mercinaries but they are notricously known for backstabbing you when a shiny coin is involved.
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| Smee wrote: | You obvious people up there - what did you vote for? We know you voted, coz it says under the poll.
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I don't usually say I voted, I was just playing around in response to Raves' post.
I voted for the Fighters guild, for the same reason as DF, it seems like a good place to find hardy allies.
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Begin at a temple...get a few kick-ass monks with a distaste for undead evil and then go on a holy mission to save the world from this vile filth.
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| F5 to lordy on that one.. Back home is where the action is always at. Also cause thats where I placed my vote.
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Well since you want to know. I went for the temple. I had a reason, but I forgot it 'cause I am tired with all my AP studying.
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Voted for back home!
elves are much more reliable then cut purses!thats why i voted that...
OH NO I MADE IT A 3 WAY TIE!!!!!!!!!! 
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ok now 3 more ppl vote for taverns!*joking*
or he can use this army i borrowed from my friend, george bush
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Hey Fear, no double posting. Edit your previous one, if you happen to want to say more.
Welcome to City of IF, by the way.
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| The Meaning Of Fear wrote: | ok now 3 more ppl vote for taverns!*joking*
or he can use this army i borrowed from my friend, george bush
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I see how it is, generating a bigger army then the one I offered. So I send in cyclops reinforcements. 
And a Medusa as well. 
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Hey you guys, no spamming in the storygame threads.
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Sorry for my absence on the second chapter, Jack. I know am back to speed and ready to go.
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ooooh!winning!!!!!!!!!!OH YEAH!IN YA'LL FACES!!!!!!!!!!WOOT~~!
......as for your bigger army,i have now also borrowed from my 2 friendly mates, zeus and thor....and musnt forget hades.oh and jesus let me rent his angels, as long as i pay rent.... and wats-is-name-from-a-nightmare-realised let me borrow some wights...
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Well it won't be a tie until someone new chooses the second or last choice.
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Dont have to worry about that one. I just finished the newest chapter and it'll be up in a sec.
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Chapter 4
Emerging from the sewers like some half drowned rat, Larson peeked his head up into the city street. He ducked right back down as a large ox drawn cart hurtled overhead. A potato rolled from a sack in the cart and tumbled into the pit in which he hid.
Catching the root, he nodded, saying, “Hmm… Dinner,” as he stowed it within one of his many hidden pockets.
Checking to ensure the coast was clear, he emerged from the hole, doing his best to brush the filth and grime from his crimson cloak, the bounty killer began to think.
Help from mercenaries was never wise, as they were treacherous scum to a man. Of course most of them said that or worse about bounty hunters, but that was only because they provided a good fifty percent or so of any hunter’s income.
He doubted that a human temple in the local area would help, as they refused to even acknowledge the existence of Aryeh Vavrin. They had kind of a distaste for most everything elven, especially half breeds like himself. Drawing attention to himself and risking an inquisition was definitely not a good idea. Burning at a stake was not a pleasant sensation, he bet.
A hunting coven or a fighter’s guild could always yield some results, but he had no gold with which to pay nor could he guarantee treasure, loot, and booty. So it was out.
So that left him with one last viable option. He would have to get a message home and draw upon his friends. They would believe in the prophecy, as his cleric elven mother had done much to facilitate cultural exchange with the nomads during what time she had lived within the tribe.
Of course, things had a way of changing, which they probably had under the new regime. Because of the new khan, he could never return to his homeland. Needless to say, the state of affairs on the steppes weighed heavily on his mind, making him more than a little hesitant about what to do.
First thing was that he’d have to find somewhere in which he could relax for a bit, unwind and clear his troubled mind. Perhaps he could even get a hot bath and a cold ale, something that he was absolutely not opposed to.
If he knew this rat’s den of a city, then, the Lusty Wench should be somewhere nearby. Turning around, the cloaked hunter couldn’t help but smile as he saw the more than welcome sight of the bordello and inn across the muddy street.
Cutting straight across, and consequently sinking up to his knees in filth, Larson was not bothered in the least. There was no way it could be more filthy than the sewers he’d just emerged from.
The sound of a drunk retching violently caused his head to snap over almost immediately just in time to see the man puke out his alcohol into the sludge. Perhaps he’d underestimated the hygienic failings of the fair people of this town and the street was a close second? Maybe even worse?
He shuddered and picked up the pace.
Once he was inside, he simply sauntered up to the bar, tossed down a gold coin and said, “Usual room.”
The scantily clad female behind the counter smiled warmly and nodded. The half elf was well liked around here for his sharp wit and the way he took care of the girls. On more than once occasion, he’d roughed up a couple of drunken louts with no charge other than that they save a specific room for his use only.
Upstairs several minutes later, the swashbuckler stood shirtless, a steaming bath ran and ready, complete with one waiting harlot holding a sponge.
Although it was not really the order he preferred, business came before pleasure. Searching out amongst the cages, he found the pigeon that knew its way to his people’s current seasonal encampment. He tied a note to the bird’s foot and sent it off with a prayer, hoping that it would reach his friends.
That being done, he threw off the pants and leapt into the tub, soaking the woman as well. She giggled, rather used to his wild antics as he placed a hot kiss on her red lips.
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Roka was riding about, as was his habit at sunset. The powerful beast breathed slowly, raggedly, tired from the exertions of this day. It had been a long hunt earlier and the village was well fed.
He thought the day’s concerns were a thing of the past when he saw a figure cross the crest of a nearby hill, hell bound for him. Riding to meet the man halfway, he was greeted with a message.
“Are you sure this is right? Is it really from Larson?” He asked after glancing over the scroll.
“Yes, yes. We decoded it twice, Great Strategist,” The messenger nodded.
“Tell the khan that I leave tonight,” Roka said, tossing the notice back to the supplicant as he rode toward his yurt.
He was inside and almost packed when the khan and his guard burst within the hut all hot tempers and gnashing teeth.
“Where do you think you are going, Roka? To fight in some fool’s war with some fool?” The warlord demanded.
“Yes, my lord. With or without your leave,” The tribesman said, a hand falling to the hilt of his sword.
“I need you here. You cannot go. Request denied,” The chief spat out contemptuously.
“I don’t think you heard me. I don’t give a damn about those petty raids. They can wait. A friend needs me. Now.” Synching up his travel sack, the warrior tossed it across his back.
“If you walk out now for that half breed, you walk out of the tribe,” The leader spelled out, obviously drawing a line.
A new voice entered the arena, peeking through the open window in the yurt’s side.
“Yes, well tribe life isn’t all that great anyways. I’m sure he’ll do fine without you. After all, look at me,” The gruff speaker projected, his chords rusty after having not spoken to anyone but his falcon for many years now.
“Outcast! How dare you come to this place!” The khan snarled, his words dripping with malice.
Cutting in, Roka spoke, “You know, Larson was right. You are a pompous ass,” As he shouldered through the crowd and out the door.
“You’ll regret this! You will rue the day, Roka. When you leave with the Outcast to help that mongrel, you leave for good!” The shouting clansman threatened.
“You are so hasty to abandon the teachings of the best Clan Mother we have ever had just because of your ill founded hate for all things elven, aren’t you?” Roka spoke turning.
“Hell, that was obvious. He even banished her only son after she finally keeled over despite the fact that he has more of a right to the khanate than he,” The outcast muttered as he swung a leg high over his horse.
“Unfounded lies! I could have you killed!” The barbarian responded.
Roka, having had enough of the portentous bastard, turned and finished the conversation with, “He was the Great Khan’s illegitimate son, and you are but a distant cousin from the far wilds! Tell me who is the rightful heir!”
Riding away, the two left the fuming general in the dust, his guards eyeing him nervously and for the first time, doubting his integrity and intentions.
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Late that night, Larson was out stretching on the balcony above the street, a cold mug in hand, relaxing after the evening’s exertions. Although he’d lost out on one of the biggest jobs he’d ever had, the day had been fulfilling. And not in the way that there were three exhausted prostitutes lying about his room in many varied positions.
Instead, he actually had a purpose. A good fight for something besides the next sack of coins. It was a great feeling, something he’d not had since…
Since he’d been forced to leave home. It was a thought he did not enjoy, memories that he did not relish. Running the guantlet was not something one forgot, especially with so many scars as little reminders.
He wished for something to distract him from the pain…
An arrow whispered through the air from an adjacent roof and struck the post that he’d just been pacing in front of.
Ducking down, he whispered to the gods above, “Not what I meant! Not what I meant!”
He crawled around the door and worked his way back inside, taking shelter behind a divan as he contemplated his next move.
His thought process was interrupted by a hefty brick smashing through the stained glass window above. Attached to it was a note.
It read in flawless, articulate penmanship, “The one called Larson comes out or we burn this whorehouse to the ground.”
Sitting back, he ran his hands through his long hair as he debated about the best course of action.
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Use a back exit. There's bound to be a couple of lesser-known escape routes, and he knows the building well enough by now.
Then, when they're shouting their threats and throwing their stones, sneak up and see who's doing the threatening. At that point, we'll know better whether we can take them or not
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I'd say he tries to get near an opening and see who or what is threatening him. Then he could always go through a back door like Stoat said, or try and fight it from his room.
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Doesn't seem like they just want to kill you at first sight. Walk out half-naked and appearing drunk. Let them think they have you. You can then assess the situation in the open, see how many are in the street to face you and possibly get an idea if anyone is concealed in an alley or on a rooftop.
I'm sure you'll have some form of backup. A houseful of intrepid whores isn't going to cower in a corner while their home and livelihood gets torched. And the other clientèle will provide distraction if not assistance.
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I agree with Shady. Find a back exit from the establishment, and access the strength of our enemies.
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| Posted: Fri May 12, 2006 1:32 pm Post subject: |
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Hey Jack - good chapter.
I F5 Fauns plan. He needs to get outside to stop his safehouse being destroyed, but also assess what he's up against.
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The Meaning Of Fear
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| Posted: Fri May 12, 2006 3:31 pm Post subject: |
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Very nice chapter, jack.
You kinda get the feeling Larson is oh so VERY VERY different to Forenius...Well, ok not even VERY VERY would describe their differences. Just try imagining Forenius being a bounty hunter and working 3 prostitutes. 
Anyway, here are my ideas:
If he has a bow, he can tie a note to an arrow(preferably the one that was shot at him) and demand why they want him, or simply walk out for a talk. If they are hostile, try to find some means of escape.
If all else fails, lets just say blood will be spilt .
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| Posted: Fri May 12, 2006 11:47 pm Post subject: |
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| Jack wrote: | | It read in flawless, articulate penmanship, “The one called Larson comes out or we burn this whorehouse to the ground.” |
sounds to me like there is an elf in the neighborhood.
| Jack wrote: | | His thought process was interrupted by a hefty brick smashing through the stained glass window above. Attached to it was a note. |
also sounds like that there is a brawny human in the area.
Perhaps his friends are very fast... or there are some Doppelgangers in the area?
I f5 whoever it was that supported his going out to speak, if he is the hero of the story he will be fine if not then the good guys will still win.
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| Posted: Sat May 13, 2006 2:21 pm Post subject: |
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| Quote: | | he can tie a note to an arrow |
Do you know how hard it is to shoot an arrow with a note attached? It's not easy I'm telling you - the arrow wobbles so much while in flight, off-sets the balance completely.
| Quote: | | hero of the story he will be fine |
You can't ever assume that just because he's the hero he will live. Look at Heroes Never Panic, in which the option we voted for caused Taggart to die, and Mannings became the protagnist instead.
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| Posted: Sat May 13, 2006 5:39 pm Post subject: |
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But night, you musnt forget that larson made it all the way to be in death of an age, so he can't die now.if he did, then jack would have to change his other story, and that would be very frustrating
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| Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 7:55 am Post subject: |
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This could be afterwards, or a dream, or the other one could be an imposter, or he could have been brought back to life, or the Gods could have given him one last chance to do good, or an alternative reality.
There's any number of possible reasons why he could die here and still be in Death of an Age.
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| Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 9:51 pm Post subject: |
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Or both of you could be just overanalyzing this way too much, and just enjoy the story as is.
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| Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 9:57 pm Post subject: |
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F5 Ravenwing.
My form of entertainment doesn't lend itself heavily to extreme amounts of thought.
In the Navy, we call that 'nuking' something, cause everyone in the nuke power rates has a real bad habit of... well... overanalyzing things aka 'nuking' them.
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| Posted: Sun May 14, 2006 10:04 pm Post subject: |
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LOL. That's an interesting term to use.
An image of an idea balloon blowing up came to mind when I first read your post. Some people I guess love to think too much. Lordy, and Fear I guess go under that category. LOL.
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| Posted: Mon May 15, 2006 4:31 am Post subject: |
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Glad you like my bit of sailorly slang.
Maybe if we're lucky, it'll catch on here, and be used a lot like F5.
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