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PostPosted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 6:12 pm    Post subject: Drama High: CHAPTER 7!!!!!!!! Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Tue Mar 06, 2007 7:36 pm    Post subject: Chapter 1: the drama begins...... Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 4:18 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well written and totally, like, shocking. Surprised

I assume the DP is what you do next?

Well, you can either storm up and bitchslap them both, or pretend you didn't see anything and plot evil vengence. After all, revenge is a dish best served cold.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 7:38 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

you read my mind China. I'm gonna wait a bit and see what others have to say but you were right. That's exactly what I had in mind.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 8:36 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great story, it brings memories back... Very Happy
I say confront the bi** and your soon to be 'ex' boyfriend. Razz
This story really fits in with the name.

Keep at it and it'll be promoted. Very Happy

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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 3:18 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Lia, Lia, Lia.... you really are toying with me aren't you, my dear saati?
You should know what my answer will be already..

Walk away and pretend nothing happened.. keep letting Rob think he's getting away with it.... plot your revenge on them both... something slow and painful for him especially ..... make sure to recruit your closest friend (who obviously isn't Maddie).... and when Maddie and Rob least expect it... that's when you strike, hard and fast... show them that you are not someone to be walked over.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 4:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Go for the bitch slap.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 4:48 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

chinaren wrote:
Well written and totally, like, shocking. Surprised

I assume the DP is what you do next?

Well, you can either storm up and bitchslap them both, or pretend you didn't see anything and plot evil vengence. After all, revenge is a dish best served cold.
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I'm disappointed in you China. Obviously the best plan is to 'accidently' walk in on them, and then pretend you had a thing for Maddy all along. Get them drunk, get something started...

...then take pictures and leave. Blackmail material is always worth the effort.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 07, 2007 9:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yo, nice story. I like the flow, really. Although that's all there is to it in a story like this. But I like it, seriously- It kinda reminds me of some Kalanna style.

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...then take pictures and leave. Blackmail material is always worth the effort


It says in the story that the character is 'under the radar', not completely weird and excessively cruel.

Although I'd like to F5 Lily, I think the character would probably shriek, run away, and cry.
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 12:01 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like stories about screwed up high schools although yours is a little more conventional than mine...I mean at least the main character is a real student...

As for what she should do...well turn about's fair play and payback is a bitch.

I suggest walking up to him and with a cold smile on her face and playing like she knew he was cheating all the long...but only wanted to catch him at it.

Drop a few hints you've got another prospect all lined up while your at it...

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PostPosted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 1:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Perfectly lovely Liania...Perfectly Lovely. Chinaren's right, this story is written well on all accounts. Good character potrayal, Good Setting, Good Written Illustration, and so far a good plot. Keep it Up! Very Happy

Strangly, this reminds me of my High School *looks dreamy* although I don't why.

Having no good ideas of my own, I'll set around and wait for a poll.
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 10, 2007 3:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Poll is up.
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PostPosted: Sun Mar 11, 2007 4:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

AH. I say plot revenge. I t sounds so cool, make it funny. Like sticking their pictures on fat people... Or something funny, but I dont know how. I'll come back with stuff, just not lordly's seggestion abiout get something started, or wait plot revenge, let the guy cheat on her or let them fight.

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PostPosted: Sun Mar 11, 2007 10:54 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice, from the looks of it, it's unanimous. Everyone wants Lisi to sneak away and plot revenge. Ok then dear readers, I'm up for suggestions on revenge. Scheme away!
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 12, 2007 4:05 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You should know better than to allow me to scheme away, saati.. heh heh heh!

Okay, well, since Maddie obviously doesn't give a damn about Lisi, then it's time to play the game on Maddie's level. Lisi could go home and pretend she didn't see a thing, while plotting revenge in her head. I suggest a set up where Lisi gets physical with Maddie's man and somehow, both Rob and Maddie have been lured somewhere close enough to know what's going on. And coincidently, Maddie's man also happens to be Rob's best friend and had no idea of Maddie's infidelity.

So in short.... sleep with Maddie's boyfriend/Rob's best friend

Ain't I a b.itch?
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 2:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Dang it! I wanted some right away action, but I'm sure this story will have other types of...action.

Waiting for the next chappy.
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 16, 2007 1:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ok......poll is closed. I'll get the next chappy up soon.
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 16, 2007 1:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

AWESOMENESS, in forte Lia. (I have no Idea why I said that it's a me thing I suppose) but since you've got a poll already that's all I can say for awhile
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 16, 2007 5:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A great start, Liana! Looking forward to seeing how this will develop...
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 5:01 pm    Post subject: Chpater two Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 5:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes, my dear everything will be alright. Don't you love our brainstorming sessions, saati? I can't wait to see what delicious ideas come from Evey's mind.... Cool
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 5:58 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

oooh if i'm correct this will lead up to you're great revenge *schemes* well i'm once again hoping I don't end up like most guys *defying fate is hard, but hey thats why I'm a half-dragon* and now, I say, Let there be evilness abound.

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PostPosted: Wed Apr 04, 2007 11:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wonderful Liana absulutaly wonderful. It cought my attention once again. *looks about* bullsharks! where?

O but ofcourse my mind could make brain storming too... mmmm. very great liana and well put, quite funny what your charrecter said about sucking dace. LOL

I shall see I shall see- har har. Now To the plot and to the hospital, just hope he doesn't show up...

Give you any ideas
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 12:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great dialogue, but I found this chapter a bit rushed, it was missing a description of the surroundings. This could be fleshed out a bit more with describing the scene, expressions on faces, and so on, to bring on more life.

Otherwise, good stuff!
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 1:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Is that any better CF? I tried.....
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 1:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hey I think it is great man. I didn't mind on the seroundings because this is more focused upon feelings and poeple, expressions now that might be missing but I think It is great Liana.
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PostPosted: Sun Apr 08, 2007 4:57 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

That is better!

The DP is not clear, though... there is only one real suggestion so far, and I cannot come up with any. You need to help your readers out at the end of each chapter, asking for suggestions. This guidance was also missing from your previous chapter too, we had to guess what the DP might be. This is something that a storygame might fail a review on. Wink

Add a DP to your chapter, (e.g., what will happen next? or what will the character do? Maybe add a few options yourself. Check out a couple of other SG's for some examples of DPs at the end of the chapters.)

It might be a good idea to repeat the DP again as a new post, (as a few posts have been added now and people might not see your edit)

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 16, 2007 5:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ok all....... what is Evey going to do? Plot away dear readers.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 16, 2007 5:34 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

MUAHAHAHA! Well, well, it's obvious that Evey is going to be "taking care of Rob and Maddie." I have two options.... unimaginable torture (PM me for that later) or my earlier suggestion of sleeping with his best friend /Maddie's B/F and using that as blackmail.. under the guise of Evey being Lisi of course..
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 17, 2007 11:11 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

that's a solid idea Lily........any others?
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 17, 2007 4:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The evil plots are good but what if Evey found some one for Lisi to parade in front of Rob and Maddie but have it where under the surface over time Lisi actually starts having feelings for this other guy that way not only will the damage be less on Lisi but it will help her plot her revenge on Rob and it will give her an extra person to help pull it off. just an idea though
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 17, 2007 4:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Everyone, let's give Liana a round of applause for her SG being moved to Jester Park! *a crashing round of applause sweeps the room*

Maybe you could combine mine and Kangs ideas? That would be very nifty! Cool
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 17, 2007 4:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Just goes to show that great minds can and so sometimes think alike *wink*
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 18, 2007 5:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like it guys...... Lisi could tell maddy's boyfriend about the cheating and they could hook up to get back at them. then they could develope feelings for each other. but what about Evey?
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 19, 2007 1:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Perhaps Evey has an old score to settle with Lisi.

Having already posed as Lisi and spoiled things with Rob, (causing him to move on to Maddy) she's going to stir it up about some past incident, combine it with the current situation and make matters worse for Lisi, whilst all the while acting the innocent party.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 6:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I don't know... i guess the friends backstabbing thing i guess is a bit farfaethched since evey is supposed to be helping Lisi out with her problems with Rob so i guess it could work but that might take Evey a bit out of character

note i wrote this on no sleep friday so if it doesn't make sense talk to me saturday ...
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 2:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

*raises an eyebrow at Kang* And who was the one hounding me about not getting any sleep Thursday?

Sorry, Liana.. :offtopic!:

Anyhoot, backstabbing, lying, cheating, drinking, smoking.. these are the things that high schools were built on.. it seems perfectly normal to me.. Laughing
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 5:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

my poor innocent story is being corrupted..........just kidding. well I guess I'm gonna put a poll up soon. Crunchy, could you explain your idea a bit more? I don't if it's the lack of sleep catching up with me or what but I didn't quite understand it. Sorry I'm a bit dim at the moment..........I need sleep!!!!!
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 12:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

*off topic to lilith that's what happens when you drink a 2 ltr of vault before work *


Crunchy's idea is good it's what i like to call the "Mean girls" move tir up drama and then sit back and enjoy the show as if you had nothing to do with it and i guess lilith is right we're talking high school so... i guess a little mean girls dash into the story might be fun to see
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 4:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Personally, i would think this is hte time to reveal the big Family Secret of (insert plot device)!
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 11:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

ok so far I'm getting

Lisi sleeps with maddy's boy
Evey sleeps with Maddy's boy
some kind of backstabbing in the sister department
Lisi fakes a relationship with maddy's boy and falls for him
mean girls approach
big family secret

am I correct?
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 11:34 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

May I suggest a combo of Evey sleeps with Maddie's boy and does backstabbing sister thing by telling everyone that it was Lisi? (and doesn't the evil twin thing count as big family secret?)
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 11:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

good point lily. Nice idea by the way. Oh boy my story is being corrupted. I blame lily! *points at lily* just kidding sis. I guess I need to get a poll up here soon then *sigh*
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 11:57 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 23, 2007 5:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ugh....Din I feel your pain. So far the only option I didn't want to use is winning. Grrr.......Evey is supposed to help Lisi..... not hurt her more. I think you guys are trying to get Lisi to kill herself. I mean come on, give her a bit of a break here. oh well. i guess her entire world falling down around her ears makes for a better story *shrugs* lol. I'll keep the poll up for a couple more days. Then it'll be a few days after that before the next chappy is up.
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yayyyyyyy, my choice won, let glee flow forth from which it shouldn't

Ok, I feel weird now, really weird, anyone got some ways to get back to normal, (well, not normal normal, me normal)

well, back to business, I can't wait for the next chap., so hope to see it
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 25, 2007 3:38 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ok.......poll's closed. Gimmee a bit to ponder the choice before I write. Next chappy will be up soon!!!!
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PostPosted: Wed Apr 25, 2007 3:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

nice story chica!!
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 7:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Guess just by the poll that most of usare are sex mongers or agree that it is okay to sleep around *gags*
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 8:15 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice SG here, Liana!

I really wanted to read something on this level right now Very Happy, thankyou.

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 2:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ooo nice story Liana. Very Happy

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Anyway, that was a very interesting story I liked it a lot. It made me want to keep reading and finish. Hmm kind of a hard decision, it's so open. Evey could plot revenge against Maddy first, then leave the boyfriend next. Her and Maddy could get in a big fight in the hall, and then it elevates to something more. But since the polling is closed then I guess it's already decided?
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 27, 2007 5:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's great to have some new readers. And yes Lisi's fate has been decided in a few days the new chappy will be up. i'm not sure how long it will take seeing as i just got a job and i do't know what my hours are. But don't fear dear readers the story must and will go on.
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PostPosted: Mon May 07, 2007 6:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

taken for a little editing work

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PostPosted: Tue May 08, 2007 4:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Quote:
"Dammit.....I did it again!"



*laughs so hard tears come out of her eyes* Ah, a total Paige moment there, lol!

Loved it sis. Now, of course Riley is going to come and ask Lisi why she left without waking him. What is the title of the story? Drama High, right? More drama.
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PostPosted: Tue May 08, 2007 7:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I guess Evey could come clean ( but that would make a good story short now wouldn't it) she could keep it from her i guess just add more drama onto more stuff that is already going on
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PostPosted: Tue May 08, 2007 12:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

'm thinking Evey disappears their father's house without telling Lisi what happended. I think that's a good choice don't you? Any other ideas?
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PostPosted: Tue May 08, 2007 4:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow... laughed so hard at the Dammit I did it again!

I don't know what she should do... Hmm maybe have a sister fight and then they both beat on Riley because he gets Evey pregnant or something.
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PostPosted: Tue May 08, 2007 4:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

the whole idea is to somehow have Evey betray her sister and make everyone think Lisi slept with Riley
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PostPosted: Wed May 09, 2007 7:40 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Gotta love your humor and ideas . hmm a good ole rumor never hurts. Have it where Evey starts it and Lisi gets the worst end of it ( nothing like best friends betraying each other Muahh)
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PostPosted: Wed May 09, 2007 11:22 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

so far i have

Evey departs, leaving her sister to take the blame for the Riley situation
Evey starts a nasty rumor about Lisi
Evey fixes it and admits it was her

any others?
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PostPosted: Sun May 13, 2007 4:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Combine options A and B then I'll be happy. Laughing Laughing Laughing
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PostPosted: Mon May 14, 2007 5:10 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

*sighs* alright dear saati. lol
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PostPosted: Tue May 15, 2007 8:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I F5 Lily's idea but i think Evey coming clean might be a good idea to keep for a later chapter. Her conscience will have to get the best of her soon
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PostPosted: Tue May 15, 2007 12:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Remember Kang, Evey may not care about her conscience -
Liana wrote:
"Dammit.. I did it again!"


Evil twin, right? She's obviously had this experience before and the repeat performance just allows her to make a swifter escape.

Lisi will probably be the only one who can figure out what the hell really happened.... and if she's smart, she'll play along with Riley to piss Rob and Maddie off while swearing merciless revenge on her sister who had promised to fix everything but only made things worse and then skipped outta town.

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PostPosted: Thu May 17, 2007 8:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

hmm good point. but you know Evey is going to have to come clean with Lisi and Riley sooner or later just depends on when and how she does it.
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PostPosted: Mon Jun 04, 2007 5:32 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

sorry I've been gone so long. Damn spring fever! Poll's up! Vote now or die......just kidding.
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 06, 2007 5:15 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

so far the poll is very one sided......
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:01 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Evey isnt the evil twin she is just sick of Lisi acting as though their father is to blame for everything even though it was their mother who was sleeping around.
Evey is totally pee'd off with the world and how her hussy mother got all the $$ while her Dad lost all his friends and is out in the cold.
I obviously voted Evil Evey. Dont you love aliteration?
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 22, 2007 10:08 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 23, 2007 11:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well it's time For Lisi to go bitch mode on Evey!!!! Evey deserves to get an earfull and i think that the Wrath of Lisi need to be unleashed
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 23, 2007 4:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Heck no Kang!!!!

Lisi should be thanking Evey for getting some back at Maddie! SHe should sit backand wait to see how this pans out.. will Riley get infatuated with her and moon after her.
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 24, 2007 6:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Awesome, awesome, awesome!

*lightbulb appears over head* Transform *turns into Post-shipp, Sas, and nails up fliers that say, "party at the exchange students house, taste exotic Japanese drinks* and now I wait.

well this wil be fun but while I wait, I think thatLisi should take Riley to the next "yearbook" meeting and 'accidentaly' make out infront of Maddy and Rob, that would be awesome
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PostPosted: Thu Jun 28, 2007 10:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

No, Maddy needs to feel the worst emotional pain possible. Drama is full of rumors, yes? Rumors fly like moths to the flame, they cannot be halted, so rumors will fly, better of for worse, growing larger and larger by the lies that are added to it.

Sleeping with Riley is something that some will appreciate but most will call it one thing, "SLUTTY." There must be repercussions for Evey and you. Some will obviously treat her with disgust and others with admiration for her bravery. You can use this to fuel your anger, perhaps even Maddy spread these rumors, and a more devious plot can begin.
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 1:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

more people need to vote!!!! Thank you Suke and Chemai. Everyone else......VOTE! lol
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 9:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

well then...I guess it's time for Lisi to grow some balls...lol
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 11:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

She starts going out with Riley in secret and then when she feels she can trust him tells him (and shows him) how Rob and Maddie are cheating on them. He is at first heartbroken, but then angry with her because he thinks she was only going with him to get Rob back.

Of course, by this time they are both deeply in love with each other.
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 4:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

She just uses him to get back at Rob. No need for secrets, annouce that she's breaking up with Rob to be with him if you want.
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 5:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ok....so far I have

use him
fall in love with him


anything else?
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 10, 2007 5:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

She uses him of course but in secret. She keeps up her relationship with Rob (for the time being) and keeps her friendship with Maddie stronger than ever.

Or so they think, while she is secretly plotting a revenge for each one of them.

Rob for his infidelity,
Maddie for her betrayal of friendship,
Evey for starting the rumours,
and even Riley too, for he is going out with Maddie yet he is cocky enough to think a one night stand with Lisi/Evey makes him in every respect her boyfriend.
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 9:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh come off it Lilith! Be romantic! Can't hurt!
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 9:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Short yes but still good.. hmm pretty much everyone has taken my ideas so i'll have to wait untill nexy chappy to geive any input
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 11, 2007 10:46 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

You can pretend they were your ideas if you want!
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 14, 2007 11:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

hmm i guess using him would be good for the moment them maybe plot against evey at the same time
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 15, 2007 10:01 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

ok people....i have a tie. BREAK IT SOMEONE!!!!
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 15, 2007 11:36 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Maybe you could you with the staple of tied chapters and combine then? She starts off using him, but gradually falls for him and when she's finished using him she doesn't want to let go?
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 15, 2007 11:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I voted for use him but i think it would be better if you did that
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 4:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

ok shall use blacksmith's suggestion because i was already thinking the same thing when the , now broken, tie came up. A new chappy with be up in a few days
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 8:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

yay can't wait for the next chappy and wow love the avi it really takes my breath away
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 1:05 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Woo! I have power!

And capital letters please.
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PostPosted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 8:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Crud! i was going ot say that it turns out he knows it was Evey not Livy cause Evey slipped up and he just wants to trick Livy..

or a crazy p[lot twist.. rob, riley and maddy are all shebanging and they have set Livy up for a menage a trois plus one...
(i am evil. Embarrassed )
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 20, 2007 10:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

her name is Lisi not Livy. And as explained in numerous chappys none of lisi's friends know of Evey.
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that kinda happens when you jump in to a sg while in progress gotta give a little leeway
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 2:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hell no. Play it out.
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hmm nah can't fess up not yet there is still too much to plot out so many more victims that need to be caught in the net muahhhh!
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 25, 2007 12:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Why blab so soon? She can use him a little bit more..... maybe string him along for a few weeks in fact. Laughing Cool
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 25, 2007 4:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Is Riley rich? Does he have connections? If so, maybe she can get uh...a few things besides physical enjoyment.
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 25, 2007 5:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

seriously - the guy isnt any better than maddy. riley doesnt know she is cheating on him but he is quite happy to cheat on her so is he really any better?

as for the fact you (liana) said that no one knows Evey that was just what Lisi believes. dont close yourself off to plot twists so thoroughly as you will be limiting the flow of the story. havent you seen 'wild things' youspend the whole time assuming that no one knows anyone else and then through a series of flashbacks (very well done ones btw)you find out that two of the characters had met previously DESPITE the lead character have thought that no one else knew them.

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Hmm, Riley seems to care for her though since he's bristlin' whenever she gets touched by another boy or maybe he just wants her for sex's sake. Who knows? All will hopefully be reviled on C7, so, uh...HURRY.
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 12:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ok a poll is going up. Sorry I've been gone so long.
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 11, 2007 1:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

What is this? Who is this Liana person? She sounds familar......

Razz Okay enough teasing... besides I can pick on you later.

I've got the first vote! WHOOT ME!
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I said no. If he genuinely has feelings for her, then he'll be crushed to find she appears to be only doing it for revenge. I say that they go on like they are.
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 19, 2007 10:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

NIce chapter! Although slightly...

Anyway, I voted 'yes'. The state she's in, she's not about to argue, and anyway, it'll make for a really good fight scene at the end of the sg.
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aww come on.......no one else wants to vote?
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 02, 2007 10:22 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well 'Does she have sex with him?' is a slightly ... strange poll title, intit?
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 18, 2007 10:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I will vote yes because I'm bored and I know certain people here would love to see it.
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 15, 2008 1:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes i am back ( well sort of ) I say yes the whole having sex. fan will want it plus it will give you a chance to see how explicit your writing can really get muahhh
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 04, 2008 5:40 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

sorry about taking so long with this one. I wrote the next chappy and had a friend look at it. Apparently my scene was not up to standards. So i will begin rewriting it now. sorry >< Confused
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PostPosted: Mon Jun 02, 2008 11:25 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Awww.....
too bad I didn't get here earlier I could share my seemingly billiant idea.

Too bad his parents got there early if you get my drift.

For those slow on the uptake, I'm saying the parents should unexpectedly come home early while Lisi decided to go 'through' with it. That would just cause more drama......

Too bad I got here too late :'(
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 2:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

you should definetly go ahead with the sex idea
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 2:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

you should definetly go ahead with the sex idea
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 12, 2008 8:59 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

forgie me if im a little out of step:im new
i love this story, i love it so much! its so intense! cant wait to see ur new chappy!keep it up. you might also want to think about publishing it ,i think it will be a major attraction for teens!
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 12, 2008 9:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

forgie me if im a little out of step:im new
i love this story, i love it so much! its so intense! cant wait to see ur new chappy!keep it up. you might also want to think about publishing it ,i think it will be a major attraction for teens![/code]
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