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Mister Biz's Collection Goto page 1, 2  Next   (currently a favorite of )    Storygames Home -> -> Poetry Palace View previous topic :: View next topic   Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 10:14 am    Post subject: Mister Biz's Collection Biz Bit: Time for some poetry. Called it my collection because a lot of poetry will be put in here. Yeah. First piece is about a friend of mine. Enjoy. Jess The heavens did weep when they made thee The most beautiful creature any man doth see Skin that is, was, as smooth as a marble floor Your voice as sweet as wine that I needed to hear more Your gaze melted me like ice thrown upon a flame My soul soared high whenever you said my name But fate can be a witch, so violent and cruel Pushing me around and making me look quite the fool The gods envied you for your beauty and your love So they trapped you in yourself, making a crow from a dove They broke your spirit and wreaked havoc on your faith And kept me from saving you by placing me in chains Then they took you back to sit like a dog, poised at their feet Taking from me the kindest soul I ever did meet The gods felt great envy when they created thee Envy so great, they stole my only goddess from me Back to top Author PopeAlessandrosXVIII Arts and Poetry Mod Joined: 10 Oct 2010 Posts: 1858 Location: Surrounded by many beautiful naked men Items Legends 13801 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 10:23 am    Post subject: I Think...... Very nice. A very heart felt and many time true poem. I weep for the sadness within. _________________ To Be A Knight And my first Finished work Death Day Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 10:33 am    Post subject: I believe I've read this before but it doesn't get old. The purest of your expressions, this one - quite beautiful as well. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 12:15 pm    Post subject: Interesting use of 'thee' and 'doth'. I'm wondering why-- it seems a bit archaic. Maybe it corresponds with the whole theme of gods, godesses, and inspiration. The elements are well blended. Although I applaud the effort, I'd also like to see something more modern from you. Back to top Author Angeal PureHeart Resident Joined: 15 May 2011 Posts: 70 Location: Escanaba, MI 49829 Items Legends 406 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 2:09 pm    Post subject: Wonderful poem. I love alot of it and liked the rest. Keep going! *Thumbs up* _________________ All are welcome! To read and comment on my poetry! Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 7:14 pm    Post subject: The Villain in Me Biz Bit:Ok. Not impressed with my first poetic impression. Shouldn't have been mellow. Most of my stuff ain't. so I present to you lyrics I wrote after a vicious breakup that helped make me a bit more psycho. Enjoy. The Villain in Me I thought you were Wonder Woman But you had a Joker's grin You painted me up and then I danced Like your personal harlequin You wanted to elevate your alter-ego So you just batted a lash Then you sold me out cuz you were done Left me quick as a flash But you won't have no happy ending When you're crying out pleas I will not save you as you sit and beg Like a dog upon your knees Superman won't fly in to help you now You'll suffer for the world to see Because the hatred and the evil in you Brought out the villain in me I looked upon you like you were a marvel I'd come whenever you called You weaved you magic like an enchantress You had me wholly enthralled I served as your loyal minion, only living To serve your every whim Then you dropped me for a better sidekick I guess I'll just take a hammer to him Because I'll take away your happy ending While you're crying out pleas I will not save you as you sit and beg Like a dog upon your knees Superman won't fly in to save the day You'll suffer for the world to see Because the hatred and the evil in you Brought out the villain in me I'm beyond death's stroke now, bitch Just you wait and see You'll find that the bane of your existence Is little hate-filled me So go ahead, my dear arch-enemy I can sit here and wait For you to fall into my little trap So I can seal your fate Because I'll take away your happy ending While you're crying out pleas I will not save you as you sit and beg Like a dog upon your knees Superman won't fly in to save the day You'll suffer for the world to see Because the hatred and the evil in you Brought out the villain in me Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 10:07 pm    Post subject: Now that's what I'm talking about. It's a bit psycho, but much more refreshing in its use of language and cultural symbols (such as WW, Superman). Does make me wonder about the superhero references. Is the poem implying that trying to measure up to standards of perfection produces inhumanity? Quite possible. _________________ Chapter 5: The Rendezvous Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 12:55 am    Post subject: Bizzy... you're just simply awesome. Only your own words can describe how cool this is: Quote: I served as your loyal minion, only living To serve your every whim Then you dropped me for a better sidekick I guess I'll just take a hammer to him Nice. So very nice. Inspiring. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 4:09 pm    Post subject: Not My Queen Not My Queen Your touch is like barbed wire upon my flesh You rend the skin from my bone You scream to keep your bitter anger fresh Yet I hear terror in your tone I am degraded by every syllable you speak Pushing me down to feel whole You like to trample upon the hurt and the weak Because you can't stand your soul You're nothing but a ghost and that's all you'll be You'll fade to nothingness, not even a memory Just a symbol of all that is dangerous to me You'll die unloved and alone just wait and see Covered in muck, welcome your mediocrity Your beauty is a curse, you'll soon rot away Show the world your true form Your so deep and different is what you say But your just part of the norm You say to bow at your feet but I'll just stand You're not my queen anymore I'll make a toast with all the poison at hand Watch as it eats you to your core Because you are not the victim that you pretend And I will piss upon your grave at the very end And forget how I was once your only friend You have lost the heart that I once tried to mend Nothing but a wolf that gets the sheep to defend You'll be crushed under the weight of your sin I hope you enjoy the taste I'll watch you suffer with a wicked little grin Because your nothing but waste Shuffle off this mortal coil, you do stain it so I can not wait until your gone Grab your favorite blade and please just go So I can party until the dawn And I'll be there to shovel dirt onto your grave I'll bury you because I'm no longer your slave You call me a coward but I'll show you that I'm brave And prove that I'm something more than a knave All because you ruined everything that I gave Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 10:07 pm    Post subject: Boy, I would think twice before going out on a date with you! Very dark and wrathful, as well as self-righteous-- inspired by Hamlet, perhaps? I gather that because of "mortal coil", which if I remember correctly is a line in the famous "To be or not to be" soliloquy. _________________ Chapter 5: The Rendezvous Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 10:29 pm    Post subject: Well... whether we DO things like this or not, I'm sure at times we've all FELT like this at one point or another. And for that excellent expression of such moments, I tip my hat to thee Mr B. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 10:40 pm    Post subject: Dear Father Dear Father Dear Father, Why did you leave me? Now I have abandonment issues My Father, I wanted you to know That I never really missed you I’ve heard all bout you In the stories that float around About how you vanished into the night You left without a single sound Sweet Father, I’ve heard a tale You were a soldier I have my doubts Cuz I’ve grown so much older You were a soldier That I’ll never believe Cuz the fact remains that You’ll always be a deserter to me Fuck you, father Why did you go? I hope you think about the kid That you’ll never get to know I've grown up fine without you Gotten by on my own beliefs I've learned how to be a man And how to survive through my grief I’m sorry, my father That I was given life I guess you were just confused enough What you didn’t know, you could deny I’m at peace now You selfish, little ass If I had the chance to meet you You better believe that I’d pass You know, Father I’ve had this master plan I’d grow up to be better than you After all, I’m the bigger man I wish I could really truly hate you But I’m not gonna judge Life is just too short To hold my life-long grudge I’m better off now, Father Than if you had stayed Face it you arrogant dick I’ve really got it made I hope you’ve been happy Since you disappeared into the wind Daddy, I love you Sincerely, your forgotten kid Back to top Author Andolyn Mayor's Ambassador Joined: 18 Apr 2011 Posts: 852 Location: sitting barefoot in a tree in the beautiful land of Ardara, writing my tales... Items Legends 12390 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed May 18, 2011 10:48 pm    Post subject: Biz, this made me CRY!!! ='( it's beautiful and very passionate though. Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu May 19, 2011 5:19 pm    Post subject: That's very heartfelt, to be sure. I can only hope someday there will be either reconciliation or forgiveness, like in Johnny Cash's song "A Boy Named Sue". _________________ Chapter 5: The Rendezvous Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu May 19, 2011 9:51 pm    Post subject: I've read and commented on this before. But you see new things when you read through works like this so I'll add to my previous statements there. One thing you did fascinatingly well was deliver us the viewpoint of a great deal of inner conflict. In one line you state you are at peace, yet the next you're cursing him out - not the sign of one at peace. It's a bit jarring - in a good way - a paradox that is yet understandable. Speaks of Will vs Will and that's a powerful place from which to write poetry. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Fri May 20, 2011 11:21 am    Post subject: Dead Angel's Hand You stare at the clock because you can feel Your time slowly slipping away You try to weasel your way out of paying the toll But it's one you have to pay A venomous tongue takes you from your feet And brings you to your knees You start to cry but its all in vain because Giltine Will not heed your weak pleas She'll take you away from your happy or horrid life No matter what you do You can't run and you can't hide from Giltine's sting She'll always come and find you Wear a smile before Yama takes it away Do what you must in the time you can stay Hold a lover close and right before the end Maybe Mr. Black will let you say good-bye to your friends Close your eyes, take a breath, go out like a man Just accept your fate and take hold of the Dead Angel's hand Here comes the Angel who flies with blackened wings Coming to take your soul Thanatos will take you to the bank of the blackened river So you can pay your toll You can cry if you want but the gods will not hear you now You're beyond any hurt or help So look across the river at what awaits your sudden arrival Be it heaven or wretched hell Before you cross, feel free to look back at everyone and thing That you are leaving behind But don't stare too long at the past because I guarantee that You will surely lose your mind It'll be easy if you go along for the ride Even though this is eating you inside You'll leave even if you scream all the while Just relax and trust the black angel's smile It'll be painless so please just close your eyes You can't run away because everyone dies The hourglass is always tilted, slowly pouring away Never making a sound Azrael will come to escort you from your mortal shell Before you hit the ground Please don't weep and do your best not to worry I promise that I'll be fine Ankou can prove to be one of your greatest friends Just like you were mine Once you cross that immortal river, will you please wait It won't be long you see Because once the dark man with the scythe is done with you He'll be coming for me It'll be easy if you go along for the ride Even though this is eating you inside Hold a lover close and right before the end Maybe Mr. Black will let you say good-bye to your friends It'll be painless so please just close your eyes You can't run away because everyone dies Wear a smile before Yama takes it away Do what you must in the time you can stay You'll leave even if you scream all the while Just relax and trust the black angel's smile Close your eyes, take a breath, go out like a man Just accept your fate and take hold of the Dead Angel's hand Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat May 21, 2011 1:31 pm    Post subject: Kombat I learned how to live through fatalities Filling my up with a Kombat mentality Must fight to live, live to fight Krush the opposition with Shokan might You cannot win, I'm sorry to tell After this fight, I'll see you in hell I'm back from the darkness Like a Netherrealm Spectre To stare right in your soul Immortal lie detector I see how my presence Chills you right down to the bone You try to run away But your whereabouts are unknown My centaur kick takes you down I'll stand over you just to gloat Down a jug of sake Put my drunken fist down your throat I learned how to live through fatalities Became filled with a Kombat mentality Must fight to live, live to fight Krush the opposition with Shokan might You will not win, I'm sorry to tell After this fight, I'll see you in hell I'll set you up to suffer With a grin, I'll sit back and watch Lock you away in a cage And then I'll pulverize your crotch Like a shock to your system I'm a thunder god in the flesh I'll throw acid in your face Dine upon your soul while its fresh Necromancer supreme I revel with the damned and their pleas Give you a Tarkatan grin Violate you while you're on your knees I learned how to live through fatalities Completely filled with a Kombat mentality Must fight to live, live to fight Krush the opposition with Shokan might You'll never win, I'm sorry to tell After this fight, I'll see you in hell With undead might, I'll end you Like my fists were crafted from steel I'll force you to kiss my blade Run you through to prove my fury's real You will look into my eye Start to cower when you see it glow I'll bring you forth with a spear Then I'll slaughter you just for show You tried to give it your all But this champ had the better technique And as I tear out your spine Your queen will let out a vicious shriek I learned how to live through fatalities Completely filled with a Kombat mentality Must fight to live, live to fight Krush the opposition with Shokan might I will always win, I'm sorry to tell After this fight, I'll see you in hell Back to top Author PopeAlessandrosXVIII Arts and Poetry Mod Joined: 10 Oct 2010 Posts: 1858 Location: Surrounded by many beautiful naked men Items Legends 13801 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 3:43 am    Post subject: I Think...... *Dies* Much luv fer all of these. The last 2 give me warm tingles for the memorie they induce. The dead angel oe with it's myth bases al over the place, giving me happy recals of school and studying, and Kombat of all the times I handed my MUCh bigger brother his ass with the girl characters from Mortal Kombat! ~Sonya Blade's da BOMB!~ Anyway, great work here. May want to read through and turn a 'my' into a 'me' and other such spelling things. Unless intentional! Then, perfecto I say! _________________ To Be A Knight And my first Finished work Death Day Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 8:51 am    Post subject: Biz Bit: A love song I wrote to my current girlfriend. I'm seeking judgement and opinions before I share the piece with her. Do ya'll like it? Is it good? Should I give it to her? Kiss Me in the Rain You can make things right whenever My little world starts to go wrong You bring a method to my madness When my voices just seem too strong You are the reason within my chao When I can no longer fight You free me from all of my inner havoc So I can get through the night Because you hold me in the thunder And then you kiss me in the rain And I can feel the lightning Whenever you speak my name I don't need shelter from the storm Because you're my only oasis With you right by my side I know I can face this I've never felt this whole And never felt so sane So, just wrap your arms around me And kiss me in the rain The winds rage all around me Telling me to just conform But then you came strolling right in And quieted the raging storm You looked me in the eyes And made me forget about the cold You told me not to worry because You'll always be mine to hold And you'll always you hold me in the thunder And then kiss me in the rain And I can feel the lightning Whenever you speak my name I don't need shelter from the storm Because you're my only oasis With you right by my side I know I can face this I've never felt this whole And never felt so sane So, just wrap your arms around me And kiss me in the rain You're the only one I wanna be with You make my world a safer place Your love had me totally hooked From the very first taste I know that i could never survive Living without you Because whenever we're apart I start to come unglued Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 5:12 pm    Post subject: Biz Bit: True story about a fight I was in. Enjoy. The Fight Two figures stand Out in the mud Each one dying To shed some blood The preacher man Is first to strike Against the sinner He does despise The sinner hits With a mighty fist Sending forth a Mighty crimson mist He follows through With a solid kick To the hated guts Of the self-righteous prick The preacher coughs And stumbles back As he starts to plan His next attack His knuckles fly To strike the sinner's chest And an uppercut echo Tries to prove he's the best The sinner staggers As his vision blurs And the preacher screams "You're our town's curse" The sinner moves So very fast A fierce headbutt puts The preacher on his ass The preacher pleads As he hits the muck But the sinner just Doesn't give a fuck He stomps hard on The preachers gut As the preacher moans "You filthy mutt" The sinner drops down And lifts his fist As his silence Shows he's pissed He strikes quick To the preacher's face Refusing to hold His mighty rage He hits again Just as fast Determined to Kick his ass With one more blow He's pulled away So the preacher can live Just another day The preacher stands And spits some blood As the sinner is held Back in the mud The sinner fights Back to his feet In term of rage He is elite He flips the bird And is on his way As the preacher swears He'll see the sinner pay The sinner walks home With his head held high As the rain fell hard From the dark gray sky At home he sat Outside in the rain He looked to the heavens His memory keeping him sane The few words he said He knew were the truth Five words to speak his mind "I did it for you" Back to top Author Andolyn Mayor's Ambassador Joined: 18 Apr 2011 Posts: 852 Location: sitting barefoot in a tree in the beautiful land of Ardara, writing my tales... Items Legends 12390 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 5:30 pm    Post subject: i love your lyrics for your girlfriend, Biz =) very sweet. Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 6:45 pm    Post subject: Ah... I had read An's reply and didn't realize there was another one posted in the middle there. Ok... very nice. I wonder if it went down like this or if this is a fantasy of how you felt it should have. Either way this is a hilarious piece of dark humor drawn from the heart of real world experience and thus is brilliant! _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 7:26 pm    Post subject: About the poem for your gf: I like the chorus, but the first and last stanzas hint of needyness. Quote: I know that i could never survive Living without you Because whenever we're apart I start to come unglued Now, if I were a female I'd be taken aback by this. But it depends on the relationship. Admitting that you are wholly dependent on your gf can make her feel uncomfortable if it is still an early stage in the relationship. _________________ Chapter 5: The Rendezvous Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 23, 2011 9:25 am    Post subject: In The Depths I see her there A taste of heaven, a glimpse of light The one who lies in the depths The depths of my memory, the depths of peace And the depth's of the creator's jealousy Eyes A pair of bright brown eyes sit in from of me in the the creamy milk sea that is her skin An enticing stare brings me forth, dragging me forth from the depths Of my own pain, shattering my mask of arrogance to reveal my true form That form of self-loathing that hides in the depths of my core Skin Skin so silky smooth and so pale that it inspires Jealousy and hatred in doves Yet its thick to protectec her the the cold The unforgiving, cruel, godd-forsaken cold Of a harsh world that offers her no understanding Hair Thick flowing waterfalls of crimson waves So rich and beautiful, the gods feel shame Undying shame compared to her perfection It shines, bouncing back light enough light to blind the sun, eternally burning the atmosphere Smile Her lips, so delicate Calm and filled with the color of a rose it hurts to see that smile fall Her smile is but A crescent moon that rests calmly On the small jaw of a goddess Form A body so small and frail, yet so Powerful and full of the strength Of an unholy angel Enough strength to keep me Kept me crawling on Hanging by the last thread of my sanity The one I loved from the depths of my soul Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 23, 2011 1:56 pm    Post subject: This one tugs me in many directions of possible interpretation. For that, and for some of the very uniqeuly clever word usages, I greatly enjoyed this. It was also a clever exposure of the deeper regions of the emotional well - which is the hallmark of what makes your poetry resonate with me. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 23, 2011 7:14 pm    Post subject: Fall For a Succubus Down deep in the sea of dirty thieves Lies a harlot who promises sweet relief She'll clear the pain from your rotten mind Give you peace that you wished to find But your smile comes with a dire price When she's done with you, she owns your life She'll give you what you like She'll give you what you want Then she'll leave you all alone And laugh just to taunt In the day you'll have her love The she'll fulfill your lust You'll feel better for a little bit When you fall for a succubus She'll crawl deep in your minds cracks Give you a chance to just relax She'll let you live out whatever you need But this underworld call-girl comes with a fee For your single night of shame and sin She'll leave her mark deep within She'll give you what you like She'll give you what you want Then she'll leave you all alone And laugh just to taunt In the day you'll have her love The she'll fulfill your lust You'll feel better for a little bit When you fall for a succubus When she's gone, you'll lose your mind Chasing her ever loving fucking high You'll scream for her to come again You'll fall to your knees, plead and then You'll plead to God to hear your case You'll sell your soul again to see her face She'll be all that you want She'll be all that you need She'll sit in hell and laugh At the new pain you feel You'll try to feel as good As in your night of lust You lost your soul When you fell for a succubus Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 23, 2011 8:20 pm    Post subject: This is a rather inspiring poem to me - not only do I fully understand and recognize the feelings you're expressing - they take me back - but it also makes me think of a character I'm developing for a future tale. One little crit, if I may, on a technical level: Quote: You'll plead to God to hear your case You'll sell your soul again to see her face Take out again and you have the same amount of syllables from one line to the next, which I felt, in reading it, would make it flow a lot better there. 'Again' may not be necessary anyhow, even though it adds another layer of consideration here that I'm sure you'd, as the author, agonize to release. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 1:09 am    Post subject: Hehe, TB getting into the nitty gritty of the poem. I see that my thread on the mechanics of poetry has sparked an interest in you. I agree with TB that some parts could use some adjustment in the rhythm so as to flow without disturbances, but in terms of subject matter and delivery, I think this is one of your best poems to date (I have been reading, even if I don't comment every time). I enjoyed the sin and perdition, especially lines which employed metaphor (hurrah!): Quote: Down deep in the sea of dirty thieves Lies a harlot who promises sweet relief Quote: She'll crawl deep in your minds cracks Give you a chance to just relax _________________ Chapter 5: The Rendezvous Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 5:41 pm    Post subject: Biz Bit: A piece I wrote a long, long while ago. That is all necessary information. Here I am On my knees Right where you left me Can you hear All my pleas Show me what I can't see Do you watch Do you care Can you say that you're proud You're in all My nightmares That cause me to cry aloud I can't stop screaming Without you to silence me I can't start healing Until I know you forgive me I was supposed to be your knight In clear and shining armor The thing that completes my fright Is that I deserve my karma Please help me If you hear Pull me out of my grave You took away All my fear So I could feel somewhat saved Don't leave me All alone Crumbling in my own despair I'm stuck here On your stone You're gone now and it's not fair I can't stop screaming Without you to silence me I can't start healing Until I know you forgive me I was supposed to be your knight In clear and shining armor The thing that completes my fright Is that I deserve my karma Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 9:37 pm    Post subject: Whoo... powerful powerful powerful words there B. Hits like a sledgehammer! You tore that one straight from the deep of the soul methinks. My one crit on form (which was exquisite for the majority so far as I could see) Quote: Crumbling in my own despair Take out 'own' and see what it does for the flow (read the stanza outloud both ways). It seemed to flow more in step without the 'own' to me - but I could be wrong, AND it appears to slightly interrupt the visual (chart style) appeal though so I'm not entirely sure its 'good' advice. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 9:49 pm    Post subject: Well, this poem is blank (free) verse, so there's no real need for rhythm. But if there's no rhythm, there's gotta be something else of substance, such as metaphor. You had a couple of good lines: Quote: Pull me out of my grave Quote: Crumbling in my own despair I'm stuck here On your stone These I liked. They were symbolic. But your other lines are a bit trite. You need to start thinking outside the box, especially with free verse. Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 10:02 pm    Post subject: Free verse, yes, perhaps. But I saw some nice attention to the rythme in the rest of it so I saw enough of an attempt to create a nice flow that this one part sorta stood out. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue May 24, 2011 10:55 pm    Post subject: Upon re-reading it, I believe you are right. There is some attention to rhythm, especially in the 3 syllable verses, and some others as well. But then it gets precarious as soon as there are more than 3 syllables. Sometimes he hits the mark, other times he doesn't. It's a bit haphazard. _________________ Chapter 5: The Rendezvous Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed May 25, 2011 7:51 pm    Post subject: Ode to the Executed Tick tock the preacher man said In five minutes you will be dead You can't run nor can you hide Tell me son are you scared to die Tell me boy what you must confess Because tomorrow they'll lay you to rest You best repent, sinner man Save your soul if you can Pray until your voice is hoarse You have a chance if you show remorse So speak up, tough guy, cast off your sin Run from your own made hell and the demon within Tickity tock the guard man say Follow me, the end is right this way Make sure that you stay real close behind Don't fear the crowd that's here to see you die Up at the stage, your family has gathered near So smile a small smile like you have nothing to fear So follow along, sinner man Enjoy the air while you can March up to the wooden stage Show the masses you're unafraid I'm sorry is the lie you should tell Before the masked man sends you to hell Ding dong the clock tower chimes As I think about all of my crimes I rest my neck upon the bloody stump As my friends gaze up at the condemned chump The sun glints off a blade as it kisses the sky Then it drops and in a split second I die So clean your axe, executioner man Tell yourself you've done the best you've can Go on home and kiss your beautiful wife Relish in the fact you've taken a sinner's life Think long and hard and you will see You're just a killer, just like me Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed May 25, 2011 8:58 pm    Post subject: Oh, true excellence Mr. B! Can't pick hardly at all at the rythme here and the message is nice and pointedly delivered in the last verse like a punchline or a hacking axe on impact. And a good point to make at that! _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu May 26, 2011 2:41 pm    Post subject: I Am I am the darkness I am the thick black mud That corruptly consumes your every thought That seeps into the cracks of your porcelain psyche And stains the self-righteous purity that you claim to love I am the puppeteer Tugging on your strings to move you forth On the sordid little journey that you call your existence The hand forced up through your ass to grab your vocal cords And stifle weak insatiable mutterings that you can not help but to gush I am the fire That glows in the pit Of your infernal gut every time You gaze upon the vileness that is Your own reflection, looking upon you just to laugh I am the blood That falls upon the tile Like God's tears as he gazes Upon all of his creations and realized how wrong he was In giving life to those who would rather thrust it back in his face I am the emptiness That you feel as you stand Upon your wooden pedestal, prepared To give it a solid kick and change it into a stairway Into an eternity, devoid of any contact from those who made you suffer I am the guilt Thrust upon those you leave behind As they struggle to find an ounce of reason Fumbling to come up with a single logical answer Behind your fleeing escape into the eternity filled blackness I am the madness That crawls into those who remain And wallow in the filth and puddles of self-pity Telling themselves you're still beside them as you lie In your darkened hole underneath the sole of the weeping I am suicide An act beyond all human greed Selfishness that claims no equal as those Who are blind enough to lose sight of any and all hope Take the easy way out while their loved ones struggle to breathe on Last edited by misterbiz on Sat Feb 02, 2013 5:05 pm; edited 1 time in total Back to top Author D-Lotus Venerable IFian Joined: 21 Oct 2004 Posts: 4123 Location: Hollywood, USA Items Legends 10229 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu May 26, 2011 7:33 pm    Post subject: The shape of the stanzas reminds me of stairs. And here you confirm my impression: Quote: To give it a solid kick and change it into a stairway The stairway, therefore, is symbolic of a descent into... hell? A descent into madness, selfishness, despair-- lower and lower we go until the stairs end, and then there is no choice but to leap. Very nice. _________________ Chapter 5: The Rendezvous Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu May 26, 2011 8:50 pm    Post subject: Quote: The hand that is forced up through your ass to grab your vocal cords And stifle insatiable mutterings that you can not help but to gush this being the only place you interrupted that sequence D mentioned. I suggest simply removing 'that is' in the first of those two lines. A very personal message you deliver here Mr.B. Powerful, as always, but this hits a little deeper than some. And I loved what D pointed out about it - I may have missed that neat aspect of this work. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Fri May 27, 2011 12:25 pm    Post subject: Biz Bit: These are lyrics that I wrote about my already finished project entitled: The Sprinter Saga Part 1: Getting Lucky Getting Lucky Look in the mirror Tell me what do you see You're becoming the monster I always knew you could be So close your eyes, just give in To your rage and your hate You're a real sick motherfucker Brother, I can relate So take a deep breath and pray For all those who get in our way Apologize as you cut them down Drop them fast, don't make a sound Don't give them a chance to feel fright Let that be their way of getting lucky tonight Don't deny me, brother You know this gives you a thrill Nothing feels quite as good As the bloody rush of the kill Let me work through you I promise you'll like what you see Fall back into you darkness And hand the reigns over to me You and I will run through them all Stack them up just to see them fall Make them beg and make them plead And we'll laugh as they cry and they bleed Let them know how they lost this fight And how no one will be getting lucky tonight And in this ballet of bloodshed Your destiny will arrive As you collect an unholy toll A life for another life Look in your partner's eyes Seal it with a bloody kiss Then take all her breath away And deprive her of her earthly bliss So take a deep breath and pray For all those who get in our way Make them beg and make them plead And we'll laugh as they cry and they bleed The bloodshed will take us to brand new heights And maybe by the end we'll be getting lucky tonight Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Fri May 27, 2011 3:34 pm    Post subject: Having read the tale, I really like the interplay of all the various themology you're mixing about, along with a solid streak of suggestive innuendo. Excellently done, Bizzy! _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Fri May 27, 2011 6:37 pm    Post subject: Biz Bit: A follow up to Getting Lucky. A piece written about its upcoming sequel: The Sprinter's Saga Part 2: The Best in the Biz Best in the Biz I'm made of bloody bruises A man who never loses His mind or his soul Got total self control Strike like a snake As fear makes you quake As life leaves your eyes You will realize Out of the dark The true demon dwells Hides in the light To send you to hell There is no escape Your fear just says that there is You can't run or hide From the best in the biz Your armies will fall I'll cut through them all Put your guards in the ground Without a single sound With a blade and a grin Your demise will begin I'll kill your closest friend And right before the end I'll give you a chance To choose to fly or to fight You know my bark Is nicer than my bite There's a truth hidden here You know what it is I can never ever die Because I'm the best in the biz Steel clashes with steel Your anger revealed Hell is coming fast To put its foot in your ass Put you down like a stray On this my darkest day Out of the dark The true demon dwells Hides in the light To send you to hell Nowhere to run, no place to hide You know how it is You can never escape From the best in the biz Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 30, 2011 12:41 pm    Post subject: Escape an Eternity The sky starts to bleed As the dead start to cry You're left here to suffer Without a reason why You pray to the heavens But know they didn't hear Are you able to hold together In the face of your fear You run and you try to fight Lost in this forever night You can't win, their numbers grow You're the star in the devil's show You want to leave but its way too late This eternity you can never escape You hear their bloody cries Outside in the streets You hide in the darkness And prolong your defeat You look to the heavens Ask to just see the day Because you know that in hell You can never get away You run and you try to fight Lost in this forever night You can't win, their numbers grow You're the star in the devil's show You want to leave but its way too late This eternity you can never escape The sky turns to flame As you let out a cry Wonder why you've been left To suffer and to die You curse at the the heavens And do so without fear You ask why they hate you And why they left you here You ran and tried to fight But couldn't survive the night Their numbers grew, but you can win Because you'll go out with a grin Eat a bullet before its too late A monster eternity you will escape Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 30, 2011 6:51 pm    Post subject: (Oyvay my internet is running like crap since that wind storm blew it out yesterday!) So it took me some time to get these pages up to respond to this. But it was worth it cause I really liked both a lot. Only word of advice and its just feedback, mind: Because you'll go out with a grin Try changing Because to 'cause in this case. I think it might improve the flow a bit. Otherwise, excellent work. You're paying closer and closer attention to such details and its making your poetry come across very professionally. Additionally, it impressive how you are so able to take your basic plots and convert them into a vague overview via poetry - very intriguing work bizzy! _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 30, 2011 9:19 pm    Post subject: Battle of the Ages A black beast rises from a frozen battleground It lets out a scream its such a terrible sound It thrashes about waiting for its enemy to arrive Preparing to wage war for this, the very final time Lightning cracks the sky as the hero doth appear And he knows full and well that he may fall right here So he let out a battle cry As he let his hammer come crushing A fire burns inside Like Niagara, his blood is rushing It’s a battle of strength it’s a battle of wills Between two arch-enemies They’ll fight till the end, when they’re burning in Hel For all eternity Thunder rips apart the sky with every single blow Our hero stands tall, surrender a word he doesn’t know His eyes burn a fiery red as this battle continues to rage Making sure that this is a battle for the ages The hero cries out, bloody hatred upon his breath Determined to make the demon beg for death So he let out a battle cry As he let his hammer come crushing A fire burns inside Like Niagara, his blood is rushing It’s a battle of strength it’s a battle of wills Between two arch-enemies They’ll fight till the end, when they’re burning in Hel For all eternity The hero finally delivers a finishing blow But the beast is poisonous to his very soul The hero suffers a price for his mighty win As the creatures venom sinks in The hero takes nine steps before he falls Now they’ll sing his name in the halls Because he'll never let out another battle cry As he falls into the snow His fire has finally died inside Now he's so very cold It was a battle of wills both won and lost Because both enemies fell And at the end of this Norse holocaust We'll all do time in Hel Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon Jun 06, 2011 3:31 pm    Post subject: Biz Bit: Tis was a theme for the first slasher flick I was gonna write. That project is now more. But the piece still exists. Enjoy! Love You to Death The darkened moon calls to me Leading me to your door Filling my head with thoughts of you And I know I must have more My heart whispers to my mind Speaking in many tongues Compelling me to hold on to you Until the last breath leaves your lungs And then I'll still be by your side As I lay you to rest I'll watch as you are lowered down And drop a rose upon your breast I'll hold on to you tightly Even past your dying breath Because its a simple fact, my darling I love you to death You tell me that you don't love me But I know its only lies You're just playing a little hard to get I see it in your eyes You tell how much you hate me But I know your love is deep Why else would you leave your window open So I can watch you sleep Your eyes flicker in slumber And I know you dream of me And how you and I are destined For one long shared eternity Your love is disguised Behind the fear on your breath But you know just as well as I That I'll love you to death So just surrender to your instincts Give in to what is right Take your place in my arms And, darling I'll make your night You'll come to understand your feelings And I'll be here when you suffer hell But you must see, if you won't be with me You can't be with anyone else I'll still be by your side As I lay you to rest I'll watch as you are lowered down And drop a rose upon your breast Your love is disguised Behind the fear on your breath But you know just as well as I That I'll love you to death Your eyes flicker in slumber And I know you dream of me And how you and I are destined For one long shared eternity I'll hold on to you tightly Even past your dying breath Because its a simple fact, my darling I love you to death _________________ Back to top Author Andolyn Mayor's Ambassador Joined: 18 Apr 2011 Posts: 852 Location: sitting barefoot in a tree in the beautiful land of Ardara, writing my tales... Items Legends 12390 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon Jun 06, 2011 4:25 pm    Post subject: love these, Bizzy. =) as always. keep up the good work!! Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue Jun 07, 2011 8:31 pm    Post subject: That first one - the battle between Thor and the Midgaard Serpent! Nicely done! (And no, I wouldn't have needed the Norse reference to realize that. Aside from the spelling of Hel, Quote: The hero finally delivers a finishing blow But the beast is poisonous to his very soul The hero suffers a price for his mighty win As the creatures venom sinks in The hero takes nine steps before he falls Now they’ll sing his name in the halls gave enough away for me I would almost have preferred to have forgone the Norse reference entirely as a result. But I can see why it was there. Not all would know Ragnarok lore quite as intimately and it may have pointed them in the right direction. Quote: And he knows full and well that he may fall right here This was a 'he' that I found could apply to either one - was it supposed to apply to the hero or the demon? So yeah, as a subject matter, especially, you couldn't possibly go wrong in my book! The second: I literally laughed darkly at this one. heh heh. Great attention to rhyme and rhythm in that one. And the message, as twisted as it was, was completely brilliant to have expressed. Here's to the understanding that what we write isn't always exactly what we feel but sometimes is simply a drastic exaggeration for the fun of it: _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 7:41 am    Post subject: Dreaming of Angels All of my life all I knew was hate I was a scared young man mad at fate Tired of all this pain that i've felt Hating this hand of life i've been dealt Then I met you, had a taste of bliss Finally felt Lady Luck's savory kiss Then cupid struck, fast and hard And I swore never would we be apart Even though I was just a devil dreaming of angels A blind man stuck in the light Not remotely deserving of your beauty Yet somehow it feels just right You have shown me an incredible mercy By coming to a devil like me Will you hold me close and just promise That you'll never ever leave Time flew by at the speed of light Feelings appeared that I tried to fight If I were to act, things wouldn't be the same My blood rushed whenever I heard your name I always said that there would be another day I didn't know that you would ever go away Because I was just a devil dreaming of angels A blind man craving the light Never deserved a single ounce of your mercy As you gave me back my sight I should have known that no good ever lasts For devils and demons like me An angel by a demon, you wouldn't go on your own So the gods finally mad you leave Now I'm just a monster stuck in the shadows Of my own personal angel Fate longed to tear you away from my side So it left me to dangle Tore you from my grasp because happiness Can't befall bastards like me One day I'll claw my way back to your side And I promise that I will never ever leave _________________ Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2011 7:47 am    Post subject: I can only pray this one's more for the archives than current... Nicely expressed Bizzy! _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat Jun 25, 2011 9:23 am    Post subject: Organize Your Chaos After the sun sets Before a blood moon falls into the sky Chaos rules your thoughts Draining you of all of your life Eternity calls you Filling your mind with a dozen lies Glances of heaven’s gate when Hell is all that you’ll know in a matter of time Tell yourself that this isn’t real Tell yourself that you know I’m wrong Tell yourself that you’re not going mad And your road to salvation ain’t that long Tell everyone that you’re really OK And that you are honestly doing fine As you organize your chaos To try and save your mind I see you fight Jabbing at an enemy that no one can see Killing all of your demons Letting them know that you can never be beat Mighty is your cause Noble is your fight as you struggle to be free Of this nasty fate of Perishing at the hands of all of you enemies Tell yourself that this isn’t real Tell yourself that you know I’m wrong Tell yourself that you’re not going mad And your road to salvation ain’t that long Tell everyone that you’re really OK And that you are honestly doing fine As you organize your chaos To try and save your mind Quietly you start Retreating into the depths of your own fear Silently backing down Telling yourself you must be away from here Until your fight no longer Vexes you so and your mind is once again clear When your demons never X-ray your thoughts just to see your tears You scream for salvation but Zero tolerance is all that you can hear Tell yourself that this isn’t real Tell yourself that you know I’m wrong Tell yourself that you’re not going mad And your road to salvation ain’t that long Tell everyone that you’re really OK And that you are honestly doing fine As you organize your chaos To try and save your mind _________________ Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu Jun 30, 2011 8:50 pm    Post subject: Biz Bit: Couldn't post on Father's Day so here's my tribute to the holiday. Eviscerate the Desperate I stare into the glass upon the wall At the image of perfected blasphemy that I call my own I can't help but growl, knowing That somewhere there, you are hidden A birthmark that none but I know exist Something I know is there but is impossible to see My fist flies, quick and free A finger fingered device bent on sheer destruction My image shatters and a frustrated smile befalls my lips As my fingers continue on their conquest A conquest of self destructive self-preservation They clutch a shard and Send it straight into my forearm Sending a violent scream to the uncaring heavens The walls shake from my roar as I drag up Crimson life flowing fresh and free from its newfound exit I extract the makeshift blade for an eternity filled moment Before thrusting it in through my ribs Warm crimson spills forth, dying my hand The same color as the precious liquid I now despise I bellow your name as once again As I continue to carve myself like a thanksgiving meal Desperate to carve out the chromosome That you have bestowed upon me The genetic monstrosity that poisons my blood With every second of my existence I yell to the gods once again, begging them To show you the same punishment I give to myself The sentence that I deliver upon my body In retaliation, for the sin that I call my worst offence Having you as a father _________________ Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue Jul 12, 2011 6:42 pm    Post subject: Torture You Well The creaking of the walls The screaming in my floors The twisted little tune just plays Until I can't listen anymore It tells me of my own psychosis How my self-defense is obscene Day in and day out I hear them all They speak up as I start to scream So they tighten my restraints Make me hear what they say Don't fight back We're only here to help you out Do you know What your sickness is really about Just lay back You're so sick, it's easy to tell Don't you worry We're gonna torture you well The whiteness of the walls and the smell of my straps Blur the vision in all of my Forced dreams in sedative naps I can't cry because my tear ducts Are as dead as the soul they took from me So I lay in wait for the phantoms of all the living nightmares I'm forced to see Please loosen my restraints I alread know what you're gonna say Don't fight back We're only here to help you out Do you know What your sickness is really about Just lay back You're so sick, it's easy to tell Don't you worry We're gonna torture you well I don't fight I know there's know way I'm gonna survive I don't know How my madness is just being able to be alive I don't sleep Because I can't block out the lies that they tell I don't worry Because they're gonna murder me well _________________ Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue Jul 12, 2011 8:47 pm    Post subject: I liked all these and was quite glad you reminded me of them by posting that last one. I think the last was my favorite too. (The only niggle was a line where you said 'know' when you meant 'no': I know there's know way I'm gonna survive ) It seems to be a comment on our society more than the obvious 'i'm a guy being tortured to death' statement (to me anyhow.) And THAT makes it rather profound really. Anyhow, always love your poetry when I find the time for it Bizzy _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 8:29 pm    Post subject: After-Life Sentence Voices echo through the halls From someone that I can't see Their footsteps bounce off the concrete I know that they're coming for me They reach out to pull me down Shadow hands that start to suffocate Beckon me to join them down in the darkness Down in the hole I will forever stay Cuz here the dead are never quiet Fueled by unbridled rage And the blood spilled in a riot They smile as you come in the entrance Cuz now they've got company In their after-life sentence They scream and they shout As they relive their final stands They choke, fight, scratch and bite Denfending themselves the best they can Look to the north, up in the tower There sits the mastermind two Go on up, feel free to say hello I'm sure that they will welcome you Here the dead are never quiet Fueled by unbridled rage And the blood spilled in a riot They smile and refuse to give repentance They are perfectly fine serving Their forever after-death sentence Way out back in Montana way Is a home to those who've gone away Tis a prison of mortar, blood and stone You'll enter by yourself but won't be alone Men lurk in the shadows, begging you to stay See how long you last when the spirits come to play Try to stay the night and see if you can survive But, tempt those within and you won't come out alive Cuz here the dead are never quiet Fueled by unbridled rage And the blood spilled in a riot They smile and refuse to give repentance They are perfectly fine serving Their forever after-death sentence Here the dead are never quiet Fueled by unbridled rage And the blood spilled in a riot They smile and refuse to give repentance They are perfectly fine serving Their after-life sentence _________________ Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2011 10:28 pm    Post subject: Hey b! Will catchup on this as well as a number of other things on the site throughout the rest of the week. I figured I had limited time to write and more time later to read so I'd better write... (been over a month and a half since my last chapter and I had been keeping an every 2 weeks schedule up til now... ugh...) _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2011 10:10 pm    Post subject: Proverbial Silver You shoot me in the leg at the start of the race Forcing me to claw my way up to second place There's no honor in silver, just the glory of gold Its the one thing I crave but know I can never hold The only way I manage to win is to run unopposed I get a pat on the back, that's just the way it goes You shake my hand, wish me luck for the next time Right before I get kicked right to the back of the line What do I have to do to finally win All this losing is starting to erode my grin I congratulate you when you should say it to me When will the spotlight finally come and be mine to see Please answer me before I completely lose my mind Tell me why victory is so damn hard to find You get another medal, its one more that you don't need I stand in the dark and stew in my deserved envy and greed I work my fingers to the bone even when I hear them crack I keep on pushing because for me there's no going back Yet no matter how hard I try I can never seem to get ahead Even when I surrender rest, knowing that I'll sleep when I'm dead Instead I get beaten down and trampled straight into the dust But I get right back up with the hope life will prove to be just What do I have to do to finally win All this losing is starting to erode my grin I congratulate you when you should say it to me When will the spotlight finally come and be mine to see Please answer me before I completely lose my mind Tell me why a victory is so damn hard to find Time and time, I try and capture an ounce of glory Yet time and time again, I always seem to fail Maybe success is something that's just not for me There is no happy ending at the end of my fairy tale Instead, I always seem to be just one step behind I'll never manage to make it to the front of the pack Getting help from Lady Luck would be just too kind Instead, she'll see that I'm always held at the back What do I have to do to finally win All this losing is starting to erode my grin I congratulate you when you should say it to me When will the spotlight finally come and be mine to see Please answer me before I completely lose my mind Tell me why a victory is so damn hard to find _________________ Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat Jul 30, 2011 10:42 am    Post subject: Quiet time in the early portion of the day is always the best to read poetry in. This was some good stuff Bizzy. Though... that last one, while really good, makes me wonder about the source of its inspiration given the polling results on the most recent spotlight _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun Jul 31, 2011 2:19 am    Post subject: Runaway A young girl sits in the back of the class Thinking of how life is kicking her ass Her daddy's a drunk and her mom's a bitch They get their jollies from treating her like shit they hit her and scream for every single mistake It's pain that she knows she just shouldn't have to take So she grabbed her things and then she ran Seeking sanctuary somewhere across the land Now she's a runaway Doing whatever she must To survive another day Gone without good-bye Going far far away from home To save her own life Her parents have nothing to say They're too drunk and too damn proud to admit That they miss their runaway A young man sits at home, down on his luck If he lives or dies, no one give a fuck He sits in silence as tears stream down his face Trying to resist suicide's tempting embrace He's starting to lose sight of reasons to live The world has spurned all he has to give But he refuses to let it make him fall He'll keep his life by leaving behind it all To become a runaway Doing whatever he can to Keep himself sane Running into the sun Knowing that he has to Look out for number one Off to ecstacy another day He'll make it through to the end Now that he's a runaway I felt the icy stare of an entire town I'm the madman to be kicked around It's just wrong when I fell great Even if I can retaliate Unwelcome because I took a stand Against a self-righteous preacher man Now I'm a runaway Sometimes you have to Run and get away Do your best just to survive Escape from the world, take a breath And just close your eyes It's not wrong to stand up and say I've had enough of all of this shit Fuck the world I'm a runaway _________________ Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 8:06 am    Post subject: Changes Hey there stranger, do you know who I am? Your best friend, worst enemy and a lion-like lamb You beg for mercy when you've already had a taste A blood red morning sunset is the object you chased You mourn for a life you only wish you had Can't say that you know sorrow when you've never been glad Greetings, my friend, are you finally on your way Riding toward the moon because the sun can't make you stay You tell me you love me with your darkened demon heart Because hate is too strong when secret keeper's part You walk on a path you hope no one sees but you Because you can't call it a lie, when you don't even know the truth Hello again, cretin, I see your finally back How long has it been since you've actually laughed Are you sure your serious this time around As in your pool of self-pity you start to drown You hide in the darkness with a grimace and a gun because you can't feel bad when you can't see what you've done Goodbye, dear lover, I wish you only knew How often I wonder if I could have saved you I've fallen to my knees to make myself pray Only to find I didn't know what to say So I didn't cry for you at your sorrowful wake Because the promise I made for you, you yourself did break _________________ Back to top Author Guest Items Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 8:11 am    Post subject: Amazing poem biz! That said, it was clear message and it could pull a few heart strings into either directions, but it teaches also a lesson. Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2011 1:31 pm    Post subject: Yep, two more great poems there Biz! Thanks for sharing the pits of darkness in your heart... they truly are a beauty to behold when expressed in this manner. _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2011 10:11 pm    Post subject: Can't Kill a Cowboy You run your mouth and flash a grin Cause you think you're an outlaw You're untouchable, protected by sin Too bad you're totally wrong You come at me like a bullet from gun With delusions that you can win I'll shoot you down, take you out, son Cause I'm the best there's ever been You can't kill a cowboy You can only slow him down Go ahead and rough me up I'll keep on coming around No you can't beat a cowboy Once he has you in his sights Once the 12 Gauge is drawn, You've already lost the fight I'm filled to the brim, full of piss and whiskey Take every single shot that you can I know that every one will miss me I'm bulletproof like Butch Cassidy or John Wayne Kept strong by a steady stream of Jack The brilliant burn takes away all of my pain So I can bring you down like a heart attack Because you can't kill a cowboy When he has to much to say Got the six-guns drawn and ready To blow your sorry ass away So go ahead and step up to me If you have balls of steel You brag about your outlaw state When I'm the real deal I've got blood on my boots, dirt on my brow Black Tooth in my gut, ready for the showdown As high noon comes I go for the gun at my hip Fill you full of holes simply cause you gave me lip As your body falls to the dirt, I smile my wicked smile Loot your corpse and ride into the wind, laughing all the while You can't kill a cowboy You can only slow him down Go ahead and rough me up I'll keep on coming around So go ahead and step up to me If you have balls of steel You brag about your outlaw state When I'm the real deal _________________ Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu Nov 17, 2011 9:23 pm    Post subject: Mirror, Mirror Mirror, mirror Tell me why do you laugh Please, reflection Will you just take me back I can't, I can't Seem to shake the nightmares I'm stuck right here Will you pull me over there And will you save me from my shadow Let me tell you things that I can't know Dance with me down to the Rabbit Hole Beat me down and then just steal my soul Leave me alone, buried deep in the sand Take me away into your madman's wonderland Mirror, Mirror Will you join me for high tea We'll sip and sing As my friends die to leave only me Dear Reflection Can you promise that I'll be OK That I won't die Until I've screamed all I can say Then will you pull me into your dark Cut up my face to get at my heart We shall wine and dine at the Oyster's Cove An talk of cabbages, kings and hells that we know Shove me into the mud and then offer me your hand Then drag me straight into your psycho's wonderland Mirror, mirror Will you cure me of all of my ills Take away my breath With hopes that I may be still Honest Other Me Will you kindly feed me their souls Then we will leave And watch the terror unfold Then we will run and shatter the glass Close our eyes and fade into the past Run through your forest and into the mist You'll turn to nothing with blood on your fist I'll die while I sing like a sorrowful madman Smile as I go, off to find my own wonderland _________________ Back to top Author Thunderbird Elder Joined: 13 Sep 2009 Posts: 2139 Location: Rising from the ashes Items Legends 37957 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat Nov 19, 2011 2:18 pm    Post subject: Mayhap some insights into your plot work on another tale? hmm? _________________ CHAPTER 25: Near-Light Speed (NEW CHAPTER! (12/4/2011)) Zephyrrr! And... Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat Jan 14, 2012 7:49 pm    Post subject: My First Love My first love dresses all in black She's not afraid of the stone cold facts I run to her as she calls my name She doesn't give a damn that i'm insane I love her with her teeth in my neck Goddamn she is so complex She lights her flame all over the world Let's loose a scream, she's always heard She's been from the gutter to the stars She's always close, and she's never too far She's the devil who makes me whole All my life, I give her my soul She's a leather clad godess with killer hair She has a million armies everywhere She pounds her fists in my ravaged brain She makes it so I never have to complain She's the voice that I always hear No matter what, she's always near She lights her flame all over the world Let's loose a scream, she's always heard She's been from the gutter to the stars She's always close, and she's never too far She's the devil who makes me whole All my life, I give her my soul My first love dresses all in black She's not afraid of the stone cold facts She's a leather clad godess with killer hair She has a million armies everywhere She doesn't give a damn that i'm insane And heavy metal is her name _________________ Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Mon May 27, 2013 1:19 pm    Post subject: Last Night I dreamt As most often do It was so very vivid I could've sworn it was true I sat up and gazed around At the morning in my home A little voice whispered in my head I was not alone So I laid back down I took a deep breath and then Closed my eyes to think back To the Dream and where I'd been I sat alone with Van Gough So I could watch him paint His life splashed upon the canvas So he could forget his pain The world seemed to disappear As he he sat with a brush in his hand He wasn't called mad by a world That refused to understand I stood beside Hemingway With a strong drink in my hand He told me stories of his life Of war, women and Cuban Land A large smile sat on his face As he spoke and forgot about his strife I drank his scotch and thought Could I be as great in my life I laid beside Elizabeth Short And I watched her as she lay I heard her speak of fame and stardom And that she would know it one day With stars in her eyes, she told me Her name would be known far and wide And it pained me to know That she'd be known for only the way she died Then I sat back and gazed upon all three With which I had shared my time I took their words to heart And stashed them within my mind I could be like Van Gough And focus my pain and fear onto the page My blood is ink and I can wield it Like some unholy Mage I could be great like Hemingway Forever destined to destroy myself I could hit the top of the pile And drown out the future with top shelf I can be like The Dahlia Forever dreaming of the day I'll be known Chasing fame until the end When my final fate is finally bestowed _________________ Back to top Author PopeAlessandrosXVIII Arts and Poetry Mod Joined: 10 Oct 2010 Posts: 1858 Location: Surrounded by many beautiful naked men Items Legends 13801 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat Aug 23, 2014 7:06 am    Post subject: I Think. . . I like that last batch, very. . . .In tune with me at the moment. Keep it up Biz-kun! _________________ To Be A Knight And my first Finished work Death Day Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun Jul 14, 2019 4:23 pm    Post subject: Hopes From A Survivor Hopes From a Survivor I hope your crucifix burns When you grab it in your prayers May a mark be left seared upon you A symbol of the unseen scars left in your wake You wear the symbol of a god but the things you do are unholy I hope your friendship soured With the grinning imp at your side Who spews niceties as sweet as poisoned fruit The one who made first contact with your adoring follower Spreading her venom through lips and tongues to corrupt and condemn I hope you remember The bitter taste of your sins The tense embrace as you took your turn The trust you soiled, the bond you broke, the boy you defiled The forever felt impact of your soft destruction of your own flesh and blood I hope your son is safe I pray he never suffers my fate May he always just refer to you as Mother Whereas once that I called you Hero, Goddess, Cousin Now my mind has opened and I can hardly speak your name, Betrayer I hope I can hate you Your cruelty caused compassion I forgot your deeds but not the after effects I loved twice as hard for each shred of shame you left Placed on the brink of darkness, I fought to keep others from falling over I hope I forget again Not out of fear or pain but peace I pray that your touch fades from thought I wish that your taste washes clean from my mouth I want to not just forget what you have done but that you exist [/b] _________________ Back to top Author Novelest_Ninjagirl Respected Citizen Joined: 09 Dec 2007 Posts: 700 Location: The inn. Probably. Come check! Items Legends 5126 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun Jul 14, 2019 9:33 pm    Post subject: That's a hell of a poem, Biz. The way with each stanza it gets more specific, more personal, until it's about a particular person instead of a generalized being, really hit me. _________________ My latest SG! (Image courtesy of the lovely Lebrenth) Back to top Author Vishal Muralidharan Respected Citizen Joined: 24 Aug 2010 Posts: 867 Location: City Of IF! Items Legends 5251 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun Jul 14, 2019 9:54 pm    Post subject: Powerful af, wow. Really well written. And it's great to see you here, really missed you! _________________ The eyes are useless if the mind is blind. Back to top Author Chinaren Hallowed IFian Joined: 05 Sep 2005 Posts: 8879 Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com Items Legends 69488 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun Jul 14, 2019 10:52 pm    Post subject: That's really good Bizzy! I like the way you've managed to make each verse the same 'pattern'. And up to your usual cheery standards as well, but powerful stuff. Powerful stuff. Nice to see you shambling about again too. _________________ Neil Hartley Books. My Amazon page. Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Thu Jan 16, 2020 12:13 am    Post subject: Organizing My Chaos After allocating all my anarchy Between bricks beset by bountiful boundaries Crammed in cranial crannies to contain the chaos Do I deserve to decompress from the darkness Entertaining exhaustive emotions in the eventide Falling far from fevered favor Growing great gallons of grief in my grey matter Hating how I feel either too harried or too hollow Ignoring the imminent implosion I expect from insanity Just jacking jolts of energy into my system Killing kilobytes of caring by the kilo Lying lifeless in low lighting Mayhem makes for miserable moments Noise keeps me numb and needy Obsidian oblivion orders my obedience People pass pursuing perpetuity in their passions Quietly questing for quality quantifiable quaintness Running when my uproar resumes its relentlessness Some stay to offer solace and speak sympathies Telling me to trust in their truths Under cover of understanding, you are a universal upholder Vanity makes vigorous attempts at valiance done in vain Weathering my woes has made me weary and wary X-rays can't extrapolate broken excuses or exceeded expectations Yesteryear yells "You can't yank me from my uselessness!" Zeal and zest have been zapped at the zenith _________________ Back to top Author Chinaren Hallowed IFian Joined: 05 Sep 2005 Posts: 8879 Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com Items Legends 69488 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sun Jan 19, 2020 12:38 am    Post subject: Good to see you haven't lost your touch Bizzy. _________________ Neil Hartley Books. My Amazon page. Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2020 3:49 am    Post subject: Untitled Dear Friend, it has been so very long Since you vanished to distance and time I hope that you took the world by storm I sincerely hope that you are fine I never gave you the proper thanks For everything that you did for me I don't know if you ever really knew I don't know if I just let you see Did you know when you sat to talk That you were really saving a life Did you know that I had set date and time Did you know I'd chosen the knife Could you see the same dark I did Did you see me teetering of the ledge Could you hear the abyss calling me When you pulled me from the edge Could you hear the pain in my voice Did you see the hurt behind the "fine" Was it the note that I was composing Did you understand those lines Was it the look lurking in my eyes That said how I was dealing with strife Did you know I scouted a location Did you know that I picked the knife I'm sorry that I clung too tightly Hero worship devolving to madness I couldn't separate simple adoration From someone who kept me from sadness My darkness has only gotten deeper And I wish that I found drop you a line So I could finally thank you proper Say I'm sorry I wasn't worth your time Part of what keeps me from falling Is that you would ask me to choose life I can only hope that I'm strong enough To honor your deeds and not chose the knife _________________ Back to top Author Chinaren Hallowed IFian Joined: 05 Sep 2005 Posts: 8879 Location: https://www.NeilHartleyBooks.com Items Legends 69488 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Wed Jun 17, 2020 10:49 pm    Post subject: Another Biz classic! _________________ Neil Hartley Books. 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Back to top Author misterbiz Horror Mod Joined: 10 Jan 2010 Posts: 461 Location: a chair in a cold dark living room Items Legends 2874 Fables Strata-gems Posted: Sat Aug 01, 2020 4:08 pm    Post subject: Pleas Odin, if you could possibly be so kind Grant me a bit of your wisdom Maybe it will ease my restless mind You gave your eye up for it Give me just a taste, I promise I will find A way to pay you back I’ll give you my blood, its pain unrefined Thor, please, could you help me through the storm I’m lost in the dark very far from home Could you light up the sky and illustrate its form Or let me hold the hammer Maybe all that power could help me then transform Maybe then I could find my way Out of the relentless cold and back into the warm Freya, goddess of war, help me in my fight With my inner darkness That is pouring in to drown out my light Your the queen of love And I promise that I’ll be your knight If I can love myself Any small amount, no matter how slight Eir, I come to you ‘cause I know that I’m sick Pull the poison from my soul And I’ll give you any reward that you pick Or give me the cure Tell me it slow, maybe then it will click If I’m a lost cause Give me the news, and please make it quick I beseech all of the gods, in all of their halls Can you hear any of my please Or am I forgotten outside of your gilded walls Help me to survive And I will answer every one of your calls Please tell me that you care And we’re more than your little mortal dolls _________________ Back to top Display posts from previous: All Posts1 Day7 Days2 Weeks1 Month3 Months6 Months1 Year Oldest FirstNewest First         Storygames Home -> Poetry Palace All times are GMT - 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